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Description The year is 2009. Location unknown. With the newly corrupted dragon 'Dregore' the dragons have gained in strengh yet again. It will be a long struggle before the Core nation can see any light of victory. With the war aganist the dragons looking bleaker and less hopefull with every passing day. The humans can only hope that somehow they can beat them.
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The storm was getting far worse, but it did not bother our three dragons, Slasinth,Wyraach and the new dragon Dregore. The wind was howling in their ears and the hail, rain beating hard onto their scales, water seeping into their eyes. But they pressed on further in the dark skies. Bearing their shadows down to the earth. Slasinth looked over to Dregore, watching him beating his wings, a big grin on Dregores face, this to made Slasinth smile. He reached out an arm to Wyraach, pointing to Dregore. Wyraach nodded to Slasinth a smile creeping across the dragons face. Slasinth turned back to look at the world below, full of humans......
all of a sudden Slasinth roared, Dregore and Wyraach looked at him then to each other and grinned. They roared to, joining Slasinth in chorus with his roar. Their voices combined they shook the earth. Almost signing then and there their greatness over the human race.

Their trip was a silent one. Neither one of them spoke and they flew on. Dregore following closely behind Slasinth and Wyraach as they guided him to his new home. Hours past with the only clear thing to see was the dark clouds and the occasional flash of lighting. Even with their superior eyesight it was hard to see through the heavy rain and cloud. It wasent until they all heard something......something.....below them? No, above them? Where was it coming from. It was a low thundering sound. Maybe it was thunder, but this was a continous noise. It struck Dregore that it was the sound of chopping blades of a Helicopter. Dregore shouted to Wyraach as they kept flying.

"Brother!" He called over the deafening winds and rain "Brother! There is something following usssss!!" Wyraach flipped in the air and started hovering. Dregore and Slasinth turned around and joined their brother, also hovering. They have been followed......by three Core Apache Gunships. The dragons snarl and onlook their foes. In the cockpit of the lead gunship. A fully masked pilot was bearing down on the screens in front of him. Lights flashing as the target crosshairs locked onto the closet dragon. The pilot looked back up, the heavy rain streaming down the cockpit screen like a river. He smirked, flicking the switch up on the joystick  and pressing down on the red button, firing the missle.

All three dragons roared at the gunships "You pathetic humanssss!!!!" Wyraach bellowed, which rattled the windows on the gunships, shaking the pilots nerves slightly. Wyraach stared at the missile streaking towards them leaving a trail where it cut through the rain. Wyraach breathed in and blasted black flames out of his gaping maw. The intense heat exploded the missle before even touching them. The rain droplets instantly turned to steam on Wyraach's snout. Smoke rising from his nostrils. He roared again and charged at the gunships. The pilots nerves shattered to tiny peices as they turned their craft to run. Wyraach grabbed a gunship and ripped open the cockpit, devoring the pilot before he could so much as scream. The other two were making a hasty retreat........Wyraach breathed in again and blasted one of the gunships out of the sky. It was sent back down to earth in a blazing inferno of twisted metal. There was only but one gunship left. Wyraach took off after it. He sunk his talons into the side of the craft and leaned over to the cockpit window. Grinning deviously at the man inside "Hello there human!! What your going so sssssoon?! Ssssstay a while!!!"

Wyraach ripped the blades off the gunship like a child would an insects wings. He flew back over to Slasinth and Dregore who were watching the evenings entertainment provided by Wyraach. They were still hovering high in the sky above the low lying clouds. Wyraach grinned and gave Dregore the twisted frame of the gunship with the pilot fearing for his life inside. Dregore looked at his brother confused "Why have you given thisssss to me?" Wyraach chuckled, Slasinth was silent. "Becasue brother, you musssst do thissss one thing for me, prove your really a dragon and KILL THISSSS VERMIN!!" Dregore looked down into the cockpit. He reached in with his huge claws and plucked the pilot from it. Dregore threw away the gunship, sending it back to earth, with the pilot dangling hundreds upon hundreds of feet above the clouds. He whimpered and yelled as he tried to plead with them "Please!! I beg of you!! I have a wife, kids!! Dont kill me! *sobbing* please show mercy!!" as he continued to cry. Dregore snarled and felt himself losing the grip he had on the man. But he stopped, something, in the back of his mind was telling him to stop. Another part of him, his human mind? Wait what? NO!! He thought "I am dragon!!! You are human!! You dont deserve my mercy!!" And with that, he thrust the man downwards, he was sent screaming down to the ground, dissappearing through the dark clouds............to his death.......

Wyraach actually started clapping, his claws clacking together as he hovered over to Dregore "You did what I told you to do, you really and truly are a dragon brother! Come, after that little game I fear we are delayed. Come, not far now, Danko awaitssss you" Dregore nodded and flew with them, very pleased with being praised, but fighting at the back of his mind, was a screaming image of a soldier, at what he had just done.....

The three circled downwards through the clouds, flashes of lightning brightening their forms to many afar. They land heavily in the mud leaving their huge clawed footprints in it. The rain was falling harder, Slasinth and Wyraach beckoned Dregore to the rocky face of a huge mountain, surrounded by many others like it and tall trees lining the entire scene. Wyraach and Slasinth walked inside this huge entrance to a cave. Dregore stopped and stared in awe at entrance to it. There were scorch marks around the rim and charred rocks at the base. Some intense heat had bore its way into the very side of the mountain. It filled him with pride that the dragons done this, and he was one of them and part of it. He stood up onto his back legs,finding walking on two legs was just as comfortable as walking on four. He made his way inside the mouth of the mountain. It was pitch black and hard to see, his new eyes helped him though as he guided his way through the cave which seemed to twist and turn corners. Wyraach and Slasinth were nowhere in sight. Dregore looked back to see more darkness and could still hear the harsh winds from outside.

He trudged on, and just ahead his could see a light, and a black tail snaking its way round the corner and out of sight into the light. He drew closer and closer. He could feel warmth, wonderfull warmth. It beckoned him as he picked up the pace turning the corner. A huge fire was burning in the centre of this large chamber. Wyraach, Slasinth and this other dragon were gathered around the fire, this dragon looked alot like Slasinth, except it was a duller shade of black and had a horn on the end of its snout. Wyraach and Slasinth were drying their scales, warming themselves. While this other dragon was staring at Dregore with a warm smile on its face. The dragon beckoned Dregore over with a claw to him. Dregore slowly walked into the light and warmth and sat down on his haunches next to the dragon, it felt so warm and welcoming in here, it was just a cave he thought but it felt like home. Wyraach and Slasinth looked at each other and smirked. Wyraach whispered "This should be funny assss hell to watch brother" Slasinth chuckled "Yessss, Danko meetssss a newly corrupted human, no doubt he will do hissss thing wont he" Wyraach nodded "Yessss, why wont Danko turn to ussssss fully brother"

"I dont know, but it would be wise to let them talk, it might tighten our hold on Dregore when Danko talks his useall nonsenssse" Wyraach agreed and the two stood up. This dragon Dregore had not met looked up to them "Going somewhere brotherssss?" Slasinth grinned "Why yessss Danko" The dragon bowed his head "Ok massssster, sssafe journey" Slasinth snorted and walked out of the chamber with Wyraach. Leaving Dregore with the dragon. The dragon looked back to Dregore with that warm, freindly smile "Greetingssss, I am Danko, and you are?" Dregore smiled back "I am Joh------I am Dregore" Danko raised an eyeridge at him "Dregore? Pleassssed to meet you and, what were you about to say before that?" Dregore shifted uncomfortably, staring hard into the fire wishing the question would pass, but Danko pressed it "I said what were you going to ssssay brother?" Dregore stared into the fire still and spoke "I wasssss going to say John.........John was my.........human name....."

Danko opened his eyes, another one?! Another like him! Danko calmed and replied "So, you used to be human....." Dregore nodded "Yessssss" Danko continued, pressing his questions "And how are you find being a dragon?" Dregore paused, he remembered the pain of his transformation, that lust for power, and the memories of the man he killed, and.....Marcus........Dregore shook his head "Great!! I am finding it just great!" Dregore bit his tounge. Still staring into the flames of the fire, some of the flames licking his scales. Danko's smile faded a little. He knew what was going through Dregore's mind, hes had that very conflict himself.

"You know Dregore, I was human once to" Dregore perked up his ears and looked right at Danko. Did he just say what he thought he said? "You were human to?? I thought I was the only one" Danko shook his head slowly, a frown even apparent on his reptillian face. "No you are not, some of us are, were, human. I have been a dragon for nearly a year now" Dregore looked back into the fire "So, how did they transform you Danko?"

Danko flicked his tounge out, deep in thought, he remembers it vividly. That day he met Slasinth. Danko sighed and spoke as he gazed into the fire, as if telling a tale "It was about a year ago now, around this very mountain. My name was Dan, I had a home up the hills surrounded by forest. It was peacefull and I could hear the birds sing throughout the day" He sighed, closing his eyes slowly as he went on "It was jussssst any other day. I love thisssss place. And I loved to hike and explore. I know why Slasinth chose me that day, he hassss been searching for hissss brothers, more dragonssss. The dragon livessss inside the human soul. They are sort of reborn into us when humanssss are born. Not every human hassss a brother inside them. I did, thats why Slasinth came to me. To free hissss brother, my dragon issss called, Haze"

Dregore listened hard, watching Danko's face. It seemed so full of saddness, Danko continued "Haze issss a quiet dragon, but he can be very sinissster went he wants to. He is from around Slasinth's time which is thousandssss of years ago, but he issss inside me, listening to my thoughtsss, he issss even listening to ussss right now...." Dregore looked at Danko suprised "He can hear ussss?"
Danko twitched and closed his eyes tighter "No, not now Haze......"

"What issss it Danko?" Danko opened his eyes to Dregore "Haze found your comment very amusing, he is laughing, in my head" Dregore snorted "Then why dont you tell him to shut up" Danko very suddenly looked worried, as if that was a bad thing to say. Dregore rubbed his head, his head hurt, it got worse and he grasped it in his claws "Gah!!!!" Danko was staring hard at Dregore, his eyes were red with a cruel grin on his face, he spoke but it sounded nothing like the voice before, it was alot deeper "You better sssshow me some resssspect, I hear everything Danko hears, do not inssssult me. The pains got even worse and had Dregore yelling, Danko laughed once more before the pains subsided. Dregore let go of his head, gasping as he stared at Danko "What was that for?!" Danko looked almost sorry as his eyes were back to normal and not glowing red. He turned away.

"I am sorry Dregore, Haze did not like your remark. He took control of me and hurt you.....Im sorry....Haze has the power to create intense headaches and seizures with his ability to project binural waves" Dregore sat back up rubbing his head "I will watch my tounge in future then....." Danko nodded "He agrees...." Dregore was scaring himself, Danko was scaring him in fact. Here have this dragon with another inside his mind, how must that feel? Dregore decided to change the subject. "Danko, you seem, unhappy that your a dragon, isssss this not a wonderfull gift?"

Danko could feel Haze chuckling and approving of Dregore's willingness to be dragon. He tried to ignore Haze and put a claw on Dregore's scaly shoulder "Dregore....I, its hard to explain and I expect you wont understand, but, I want to be human and also I want to be dragon. Itssss just that I was given the command of the dragon army while Slasinth was sent away and Wyraach to still be reborn. It filled me with pride that Slasinth trussssted me with thissss task. I feel obligated to protect both sides, human and dragon. I want to help the humansss because I was one, and I want to save the dragons as I feel I musssst obey Slasinth, my masssster because he isssss to powerfull and he trussssts me assss hissss brother by his side. If you understand me, I mussssst help for both races.

Dregore blinked, trying to get his head round Danko's thinking. He shook his head "You've some twisted logic there Danko" Danko smiled weakly "yeh......but Dregore" Dregore looked into Dankos eyes "Yessss?"

"I will be punished for thissss by Haze later I know it but.....dont forget your human side, dont let them corrupt you assss they did me, you still have a chance. Dont let them slap a coller on you branding you a slave..." Dregore blinked hard "Maybe you are.......right?" Danko smiled but it faded quickly as his eyes shut tight and he clenched his teeth. He opened them as they glowed red, he stood up and slung an arm around Dregore "Dont lissssten to Danko there Dregore, youve got the right idea, being a dragon is wonderfull, dont listen to Danko's rubbish, he's just trying to scare you" Danko, now Haze, looked up to the chamber entrance and smiled "Brothers! your back" Dregore turned around. Wyraach and Slasinth were standing there, Slasinth walked in and sat down next to Haze. Wyraach stood where he was, he pointed to Dregore then down at the ground in front of him. As if giving an order to a dog from its master. Dregore obeyed and walked over to Wyraach, with Slasinth and Haze watching "Yessss Wyraach?" Wyraach grinned his fangs, flicking his black tounge "Good Dregorem you are learning, you will come with me, I want you to help me with something" Dregore nodded and followed Wyraach out of the chamber taking one last look back at Danko, before leaving them.

The two came out of the cave, the storm had passed and the sun had begun peircing through the clouds. Dregore smiled welcoming its rays. Wyraach snorted and pulled Dregore over to him. "Thissss is no time to admire nature!!" He shouted, Dregore stuttered, taken back by Wyraach's harshness but just nodded. Wyraach let go of Dregore and beckconed him to follow, he took flight into the air. Dregore beat his wings and flew after Wyraach. They were soaring above the clouds, Dregore looked over to Wyraach, beating his wings "Where are we going brother?" Wyraach did not awnser and kept staring straight ahead. Dregore left it at that, if Wyraach did not want to talk, then leave it alone. They continued onwards minutes turned to hours, with not a single word spoken between them. Wyraach begun decending back to the ground, Dregore followed and they landed on grassy feilds.

A horrible smell entered Dregore's nostrils and he gagged. "What issss that smell!?" Wyraach pointed over to a huge mass near the centre of the feild. There lay the moitionless carcass of a dragon, its body rotting away with crows pecking at it. Huge holes in its belly, Its eyes wide and maw agape. Wyraach looked on at it, Dregore saw Wyraach's usesall evil grin fall, he looked saddened at his fallen brother "See Dregore, thissss is what the Core do to us, they hunt ussss and slaughter ussss like cattle. And they say we're the monsters!?!?!" Wyraach snarled "I knew this dragon, he was a good brother and this is what the Core done...the base where these fuckers came from is over those hills" he said pointing with a talon "Its a place what they call and infantry barracks outpost, meaning for me all you can eat buffet. This is why I brought you, you will help me kill these pathetic creatures and you WILL taste human flesh brother! But we will get spotted before we get there"

Wyraach started walking around the feilds, looking down in the long grass for something, he stopped and smiled. He plucked from the ground the decaying body of a Core soldier. Wyraach carefully pulled off the soldiers uniform, full face helmet, boots and weapon. Dregore looked at Wyraach in confusion "What are you doing brother?" Wyraach grinned "You'll see Dregore" All of a sudden Wyraachs body was engulfed in black flames. Dregore covered his eyes at the intense heat. The grass around Wyraach burned away and a tree caught fire. The flames vanished and Dregore looked back to Wyraach. Dregore's jaw dropped. Where Wyraach stood, was now a human in the centre of the rounded scorched grass, putting on the Core soldiers uniform and armour "Wyraach?!" the human donned on the helmet, the orange vizor covering the humans face. The human nodded and walked over to Dregore "How, how did you do that brother?!"

Wyraach laughed, his voice muffled by the helmet, it was alot softer now from his dragon voice. "Because I can, Dregore, now listen to me, you are going to take me as close to the base as possible, you are going to pretend to be attacking me, the Core fools will rush out to help you, I want you to fly away then. They will take me inside their base and when they do, I will turn back into my dragon form and devour them all!!! I will even save some for you, seen as how Im such a good brother" Dregore nodded, what else could he do, he must obey his master. Dregore picked the human Wyraach into his claws, taking flight towards the base with Wyraach guiding him to it.

At the base, air raid sirens were going off and humvees were leaving the base's gates towards Dregore who had been spotted moving towards the barracks "Good, Dregore, now drop me here....." Dregore did as he was told and dropped Wyraach. He fell onto the ground, tumbling in the mud. The Core vehicles were drawing closer, Dregore remembered Wyraach wants him to attack him. For the first time, Dregore used his dragon muscles, ripping a large tree from its roots holding it high above his head. Dregore roared and threw the tree at Wyraach's left, pretending to miss. The Humvees screeched to a halt in front of Wyraach, the doors flung open and Core soldiers piled out...

"GO GO GO!! Take defensive positions!!!" What looked like the Officer of the group ran over to what he thought, was a fellow soldier. Wyraach took on a very different role and acted out his pleas "Oh god help me! That dragons been chasing me for miles! He trashed my jeep, oh god I would be dead if you guys had'nt shown up..." The Officer picked Wyraach up in his arms carrying him over to the open humma, putting him gently inside. The Officer turned around and pointed at Dregore "Units!!! FIRE     AT    WILL!!!" There was a loud 'kachunk' as 50 calibur rounds were rammed into the barrels of the hummas mounted guns. Dregore turned hail tail and flew away before the soldiers could get a shot off. They saved their rounds, thinking they'd won the day with the dragons fleeing cowardice. "Ok" said one of the soldiers "Lets get this guy to the medical bay, after that, Im sure he'd want some shut eye" They all got back in the vehicles and drove back to base.

The hummas stopped outside the gates, the guards and there Alsation dogs, checking papers and vehicles. The guard opened the side with Wyraach, who was pretending to be badly hurt. His dog growled and barked at him, Wyraach smirked behind the helmet "Soldier!!! Control your dog!!" The guard wacked the dog on the nose, it whimpered, tail between its legs, wondering what it done wrong. The hummas were given the all clear and were let into the base where they took the human Wyraach to the medical bay.

Wyraach was taken through the base, he got a good look at where most of the humans were and even caught sight of the armoury which he would need to destroy. Eventually he ended up in a white room, a counter table in the middle and various cabinets with medicine and medical equiptment were stored. A medic walked in carrying a notepad. He looked at Wyraach who had stood up and was staring at him.

"Ok, erhm, now from what I hear you've had quiet the adventure would'nt you say" Wyraach slowly nodded, his head face still covered from veiw by the helmet and vizor. The medic walked slowly towards him confused "Why dont you take your helmet off soldier and tell me where you feel pain hmm?" Wyraach chuckled as his voice grew deeper and more serpentine "Tell you where it hurtsssss? Well, my eyesssss kinda hurt doc, care to look at them?" The medic reached out and slowly took the helmet off "Whats wrong with your voice trooper? I'll look at your throat next, let me see those eyes" He took out a small light and lifted the eyelid on Wyraach. The medic gasped and staggered backwards, knocking over a few bottles. He was staring hard into slitted......glowing.....red eyes.

"My god......what ARE you?!?" Wyraach chuckled "Maybe thisssss will give you a hint....human...." Wyraach cried out in pain but welcomed it, his hands grew larger, talons ripped through his finger tips, the hands literally exploding, covering the white walls with blood and flesh. His hands were now his own large claws, topped with his wicked talons. Blood dripping from them, he raised them and pointed at the medic who was trembling in fear. "Now you sssssee human and now.....YOU WILL DIE!!!" Wyraach charged forward and plunged his claws into the mans chest, he yelled and cried out "HELLLLLP!!!! SECURITYYYYYYY!!!!!!" He gurgled blood, Wyraach ripped his claws out of the medics chest, bringing with it entrails of the humans intestines. Wyraach laughed and threw the lifeless body across the room into the wall, splattering his blood and entrails on the wall.

Wyraach yelled, he was sick of this human body now. He laughs as he  felt pain building up inside him, but he welcomed it as he knew what would be happening next. Wyraachs skin started turning a strange colour. His skin started to tear as the human blood poured out of the wounds, underneath were HIS black scales again. He was so pleased to be sheding this weak and soft human prison. More of the human skin split like the rind on an orange, the blood smearing onto the floor and looked like a horror movie massacure. The wounds were appearing all around his body as he started to grow. The human figure started to contort and reshape in horrible ways. Flesh was falling off in chunks as his dragon body grew out from the human one, as if the human was a shell. His legs grew bulk and muscle, ripping the uniform as the bloody, scaled dragon haucnhes ripped through the flesh. He roared again and was getting attention from outside, not that he cared, he will deal with them soon enough. The pain was agonising, kept taking deep breaths between roars. His feet began to swell and grow, the toes broke and fell off, leaving three huge toes, black talons ripped through the tops, spraying yet more blood. With his claws already formed, Wyraach ripped off the ramaining human flesh, digging his claws into his scalp to make way for the growing dragon skull. His jaw broke and started pushing forwards into a snout. He ripped out chunks of flesh with hair attached as the scalp slid off his head in a trail of blood and clattered onto the floor. His black and red mane of hair lining the top of his head to the bottom of his neck.

His nostrils flared as horns on top of his head and snout painfully erupted from the sea of scales, blood dripping down them. He clutched his red scaly chest as pressure was building up behind him. He gritted his teeth so hard they shattered, making room for the bloody fangs pushing from his gums. He roared as three tails exploded from his backside, destroying one of the walls. Blood and tissue sprayed everywhere as his body grew upwards, he took his claws and smashed through the ceiling, spreading his arms and roaring to the heavens, sending the bases personel running from the scene. Wyraach bared bloody fangs as his shoudlers split as a tear formed down his back, blood flowed from the wounds as his two pairs of wings unfolded from his back, blood dripping down them as he stretched them, feeling the raw power returning to him. His eyes turned to slits and glowed red and he roared "WYRAACH ISSSSS BACK!! GRAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAA!!!"

In the distance, Dregore was lying in the grass, looking onto the base, he watched as smoke bellowed from it, he saw explosions and small flashes as guns were fired. He should help Wyraach, he was his servent. He stood up to fly to him. But suddenly!!! He was ambushed by Apaches!!! They decended upon him from the clouds with speed and silence. Before Dregore could react, they all fired on him huge heavy steel netting, Dregore collapsed on the ground, this would'nt hold him but a huge surge of electricity shot through him, "GROARRRRRRRR!!!!!!" Dregore roared as his vision started to fade. His last memories were soldiers walking up to his face, staring down at him through their vizors....

"Urrrrrrghhhhh" Dregore begun to stir as he flickered his eyes open, he tried to sit right up but hit the top of his horns on something hard. He looked up confused, he was in a cage!! A thick barred, re-enforced titanium cage! But where was he exactly?? He looked around his prison, many guards had their rifles pointed at him and a few heavy machine guns were pointing his way to. Dregore gulped and clenched his claws around the bars. A man in a long white coat walked up to the bars, looking over Dregore before turning to the soldier next to him. "Prepre this thing for the austopsy, lets see what makes them tick" He turned to leave but Dregore whined "No wait!! Dont do that!!" The whole hanger gasped and whispered to each other, the man turned back to Dregore with wide eyes "Did you just speak??" Dregore nodded "I did, I can talk! Look, dont dissect me" The man laughed "You do have intelligence, but I have my orders, you will go through this process dragon" Dregore bit his tounge, remembering what Danko said before.......he sighed and took a deep breath "I am not a dragon! I am, was, human!!"

The man stopped laughing and gave Dregore a very serious look....."What did you say??".........
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Comments: 35

dragonlover080 [2017-04-24 15:04:50 +0000 UTC]

Did not continue the series?

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electron2002 In reply to dragonlover080 [2017-05-01 21:38:18 +0000 UTC]

Sry to break it to you, I spoke with the guy, he moved and I think he lost inspiration. BUT with his permission I'm continuing it, thought it's probably not as good...

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dragonlover080 In reply to electron2002 [2017-05-02 10:39:46 +0000 UTC]

Ah don't worry about it, its fine. But give it your all!

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electron2002 In reply to dragonlover080 [2017-05-02 11:42:32 +0000 UTC]

Yup, thx

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electron2002 [2017-02-12 04:30:52 +0000 UTC]

ok to all who finished the 2 chapters and want it to continue, I made 2 FAN-MADE chapters of it, check it out if you want

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electron2002 [2016-12-05 19:48:45 +0000 UTC]

rip chap 3

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thescpcontainment [2015-01-23 03:23:46 +0000 UTC]

we contained Chapter 3 because the owner is dead just joking, by the way the foundation would kill all them by using scp-682 try that dragons-look it up
  

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Theonemangroup02 [2014-09-25 00:31:13 +0000 UTC]

*Waiting for CH3* It's been 84 years ...

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harry02041958 [2013-09-12 10:01:25 +0000 UTC]

Where is Ch. 3?

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RuCarNutz [2012-01-04 23:36:36 +0000 UTC]

Umm... Where do I start here... Oh yeah! Like the other comments below this one... Chapter 3, Chapter 3, Chapter 3?! Come on! This is really good man! I like it a lot! You left us hanging over a cliff here and we are waiting on the next part. If you need some motivation, check out other dragon tf stories or something. Put on some sweet tunes and write man. Thats what I do all the time. Nice job on the story anyway. A lot better than some others on DA.

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LOLMANIC45 [2011-12-07 06:20:20 +0000 UTC]

The Core is not using the one thing that the USSR and the USA literally raced for! Space!

"Dragons can rule air, land, and water, but they cannot rule space! Things are about to get dirty"

Launch any orbital laser weapons, orbital kill sats, orbital rail-guns, the Arkbird, the SOLG, even the Ion Cannons none of the pesky dragons could even dream taking out those. You use long-range weapons on dragons to take them out, because it is suicide engaging head on!

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TheBookMan [2011-11-26 22:57:08 +0000 UTC]

I can't wait to read the next part and by the way thanks for writing!

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LOLMANIC45 [2011-06-20 17:24:25 +0000 UTC]

why didn't they special weapons on dragon like mustard gas choline gas nukes biological weapon maybe a orbital laser is the time period 1990+ maybe cyborgs in the maybe nova 6 ha ha if were the president i would give approval to nuke the world if it was going down or migrate to mars?

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Yankeesfan111 [2010-10-27 10:27:46 +0000 UTC]

dude, this could be a book...... just sayin.......

part 3??????

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juantiller [2010-04-13 00:23:47 +0000 UTC]

come on make part 3 because you are killing me

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Coredeath In reply to juantiller [2010-04-13 09:36:10 +0000 UTC]

lol sorry I just not been motivated enough to start X3

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brambo96 In reply to Coredeath [2010-09-12 09:00:17 +0000 UTC]

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juantiller In reply to Coredeath [2010-04-13 09:44:32 +0000 UTC]

awww.

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brambo96 [2010-03-14 20:30:20 +0000 UTC]

chapter 3...?

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Tarik94 [2009-12-01 20:19:34 +0000 UTC]

cool and interesting story!

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Coredeath In reply to Tarik94 [2009-12-02 19:55:46 +0000 UTC]

thx

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Tarik94 In reply to Coredeath [2009-12-03 14:55:57 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome, i think that the pilot that dregore dropped survived because he might have a spare parashute (forgot to tell that in the first chapter)

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Coredeath In reply to Tarik94 [2009-12-03 18:17:57 +0000 UTC]

you'll never know x3

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saturnDean In reply to Coredeath [2014-09-26 23:20:44 +0000 UTC]

Oh give me a break! You left us at cliffhanger and it was getting to the good part! I want to see the rest of the story!

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Jcbq [2009-07-03 06:13:50 +0000 UTC]

and another thing, when i first began to read this it reminded me of Gears of war (the name marcus sorta fortify that idea) but instead of locust...

While im on marcus, he is hiding something! even though the secret hasnt revealed itself yet it will (things tend to rear their heads at the most unwelcome of times)

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Jcbq [2009-04-30 15:41:36 +0000 UTC]

Both chapters were good so lets seee what you do with it from here

This also reminds me of the a story that im writing albit its entirly differnt at the same time. Hopefully im going to type it and post it

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somethingmissed [2009-04-30 00:40:49 +0000 UTC]

The first paragraph seemed to end the flight but then it picks up with the next paragraph

Love the thought “was it above them? No, was it below them?” I did not expect a helicopter to come in, I would have guessed they’d see that but still its epic ^^

“Deafening” winds, nice word

Missile that “cute through the rain” also nice

Nice comparison to the gun ships propellers to insect’s wings

“Evenings entertainment” provides an interesting outlook on their mockery of the horrific scene.

Love the thought we see in dregore’s mind as he thinks. “This is human being? Wait, what? No I’m a dragon!”

“But fighting at the back of his mind, was a screaming image of a soldier, at what he had just done” F*&^ing brilliant man! Brilliant! ^_^

Interesting how the dragons bore their way into the mountain with fire, it was something I did not expect for the homes of Slasinth, Danko and Wyraach.

Danko doesn’t have a horn on the end of his snout but that’s ok, it doesn’t really matter

“Drying their scales” another thing I wouldn’t have expected, another nice outlook on dragon life.

The conversation Wyraach and Slasinth have about Danko and Dregore before they leave was really intriguing.

You got Danko perfectly when you made him probe for Dragore’s human name

When you say “You know…. I was human too, Dregore perked up his ear” dragons don’t have ears unless your referring to their ear fans

“Danko twitched his eye and closed it, ‘no… not now haze’……. Haze finds you comment very amusing” Amazing! That’s exactly what Danko would have done at that time, a year after hes been transformed and used to it!

You introduced Haze’s power perfectly ^^

I love how Danko conveys what Haze is thinking “he agrees…”

When wyraach fails to answer Degrores question while they flew off I wonder where they could be going and why it is so secretive

Woah, I was kinda stunned when you put the dragon carcass on the grassy field. It kinda contradicts each other. Nice!

Awwww man, I really wished you described what wyraach looked like as a human >.<

It really is a huge twist making Wyraach into a human, even if it was intentional.

Nice detail how the dog was barking at wyraach. We know hes a dragon but they don’t despite the dog, oh the innocence

“whats wrong with your voice? Let me look at your throat next.” Oh god the dramatic tension!

“gurgled blood” oooo…. Gorey… I like!

You mention how wyraach welcomed the pain twice, it seems like an over used description

“split like a rind of an orange” excellent simile!

I thought wyraachs eyes were already red and slitted when he showed them to the docter?

Oh shit! Autopsy! What will dregore do?!?!

You ended it perfectly with him admitting he was human. I have a feeling there is going to be a lot of conversation soon afterwards ^.=.^

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I could not stop reading this! I was even sad to leave when i had to go for dinner. XD Thanks again for another awesome adventure!

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Atlas231 In reply to somethingmissed [2009-05-07 21:34:22 +0000 UTC]

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somethingmissed In reply to Atlas231 [2009-05-10 18:38:17 +0000 UTC]

Ah thanks

Ah yes, i think you showed me a good example, my bad >.<

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Atlas231 In reply to somethingmissed [2009-05-10 18:42:47 +0000 UTC]

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somethingmissed In reply to Atlas231 [2009-05-11 01:17:19 +0000 UTC]

lol, true... dragon ears... who knew?

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CorporalDeath49 [2009-04-29 02:55:42 +0000 UTC]

looks like you can use a hand from the headmen guard

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SeathHWF [2009-04-29 01:06:37 +0000 UTC]

Epic
srry for lack of other commentary

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caman213 [2009-04-28 23:14:00 +0000 UTC]

Dang, I thought Danko was going to be Marcus. Well I just lost five bucks. Awesome story though.

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AuraGuardianHadou [2009-04-28 18:39:56 +0000 UTC]

Nice work

I has the feeling Wyraach is gonna have to bust ya out of there XD

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Coredeath In reply to AuraGuardianHadou [2009-04-28 19:15:10 +0000 UTC]

lol we'll see dragon, we'll see >.<

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AuraGuardianHadou In reply to Coredeath [2009-04-29 16:44:11 +0000 UTC]

heh

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