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Published: 2017-04-01 21:18:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 3458; Favourites: 51; Downloads: 43
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I hadn't publish a page of Cyan Adventure for quite a while because some issues that I got in the real life and my laziness. but nah here's 4th page of Cyan AdventureNext Page fav.me/db52r2v
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And Cyan turned Button into an alicorn, nothing will possibly go wrong now
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ahahhahahaha x"D, Problem? ahahahdosihdoiwandx{i qm30{ *death*
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Thanks, but I am too lazy to the dialog
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Well how often can you cast that? Because if you can't cast it twice more before you leave, you're going to leave some enemies in Ponyville.
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Oh that is great Cyan. How much did you pay Larson to get that power?
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it's over 9,000 jewels
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WHAT 9,000?!! there's no way that can't be right!!!
sorry, I had to do the Dragon Ball Z reference
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I did it the reference first
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actually look at the top line.
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Actually he did say "It's over 9000 jewels". Which is paraphrasing Vegeta. You did Nappa's line that followed it.
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true. true. I kind of wanted to do that when someone says Vegeta's well known line, and then I say Nappa's line :3
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Phew, I was gonna say something I first thought was a designing error ... Instead: why does the narrator thank Cyan for the, although temporary, Alicornification of an Earth colt (which made me realize Cyan is talking to the narrator instead of the other colts) ?
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While I really do like this comic and its beautifully designed characters, the way it flows and is easy to read, I must agree with rautamiekka , that level of magic for their age is pretty OP.
It would've been plausible if Cyan gave somepony a set of wings (the ability to give wings, like Twilight gave butterfly wings to rarity), but turning an earth pony into a flying and magic wielding alicorn? And for a whole day too? Yeah, not gonna happen.
But if Cyan could do that, I believe it would strongly affect both his "mana" as well as his physical body.
So after such a strong spell, he would exhausted probably not even able to stand up anymore.
In this comic he looks like the magic spell didn't affect him at all. The only way we can tell he can't do it again is by him saying it.
I do not know his backgrounds either, but I assume someone with such powerful magic would be in somekind of unicorn/magic school. And I do believe they would highly discourage Cyan to use that alicorn magic without supervision, as it would bring some serious trouble for the one who's being turned into an alicorn. Also because alicorns are usually seen as royalty, it would be very odd to see somepony randomly turning ponies into alicorns.
I do advice you either change that magic ability, to either into a spell to give wings, or something less OverPowered than the alicorn thing.
Or make it much more believable he has that spell: he gets exhausted right after it, he doesn't just use it out of nowhere - maybe even tries to show off his spell by making a bigger deal out of it. And maybe make him explain why he isn't allowed / shouldn't use the magic spell. Would he boast about the spell? Or be cautios because it's so strong?
~Rose
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CC CyanLightning Ok, here it is. I never forgot about this or anything, I just gave it a lot of time to get as good as possible, and I had lots of other shit in my way. Originally I used Sync Notes on my Android phablet, but given it auto-syncs to Google Drive only when you edit the text using the app, I figured I'll just migrate it to Google Drive as a text doc and make it accessible through a link: docs.google.com/document/d/1o3…
Now, this is by no means fully exhaustive since the equine body is very complex, it has so many named parts it's ridiculous, and there are so many things one can and can't get, not to mention things that don't exist in the first place. Most things are based on the human body since they have a lot in common.
Everything in the doc are just ideas created primarily for Cyan cuz of his Alicornification spell, but I figured the same ideas could be used for any magic user, although one with a horn such as a unicorn or an Alicorn would be best, which implies MLP or otherwise equine.
Some things to say about the doc:
1) It was written with auto-capitalization of the first letter of sentence on.
2) A row of text is its own thing.
3) If a thing has any options, those are indented by 4 spaces below it in order of popping into mind.
4) A row having only a lone question mark means there was supposed to be an idea right there, but by the time I were done with the stuff before it I forgot and never got it back.
5) There are many things that more-or-less make sense and more-or-less don't make sense mixed in cuz that avoided text duplication and makes maintaining so much easier.
6) Unless a row had more than 1 sentence, no dots were used in the end of the sentence.
7) When speaking about disabling/enabling, it means toggling off and on, it's an electronics and computers thing, not a medical.
8) When speaking about 'magic systems', it's a concept of mine of the magic powers being a computerized system within the user's neural network and the brain, meaning the overall internal operation of the magic abilities can think and fend for themselves without the supervising of the user, but likewise, being a computer of sorts it's prone to external influences such as magic-based electromagnetic-like interference, forced shutdowns (hard to perform on purpose, and the system will auto-boot later; even disturbing the system doesn't drop it just like that), and internal influences such as overusages, but real electromagnetic interference doesn't have an effect unless it affects the brain's own electrical traffic.
9) A row with lone triple dot means there probly are other options that can be listed that I didn't list cuz the already given ones should make it obvious what I'm after.
10) Triple dots left at the end of a row means the immediately indented things are its options instead of the thing being the idea/option by itself.
Oh, and please direct ppl to this comment instead of giving the link to the doc directly
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Oh my Celestia you done an over-analysis of my comic and I love it
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Oh, sorry, over-analysis, or even analysis, wasn't even on the todo list 
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Please don't get the wrong idea here, I am not mad nor have a negative reaction toward your analysis, in fact I have very positive respond toward it and I indeed love to read it.
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I know you're positive about it, that's obvious. Likely that I don't know when it goes into the realm of analysis, especially over-analysis.
Since I was too slow to edit my comment: just in case to clarify, all of this could happen, but not all at once. Any magic user asking his system to go much further than he's currently safely capable will get a reaction.
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I see, but still thanks for analyzing it
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No problem, man, it was fun and interesting. I'll update it when something comes up, and if you wanna too, just drop me an email address which can use Google Docs.
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You know, I just want to make everything simple and leave everything that I did intentionally or unintentional to fan theories, so I can read it and make a choice what's direction next
"But if Cyan could do that, I believe it would strongly affect both his "mana" as well as his physical body.
So after such a strong spell, he would exhausted probably not even able to stand up anymore.
In this comic he looks like the magic spell didn't affect him at all. The only way we can tell he can't do it again is by him saying it."
It's either the limitation of my drawing ability or I were lazy or something else that I will explain in the page, just keep it mind that some rule in FiM will not work on Cyan's Adventure
For me honestly, reading this much analysis is a bit too early for me, because I haven't explain so much and there isn't a lot of page of the comic being publish, maybe I will ask you again when the last page of the comic being published, and I am sure that everything will make sense when the last page of the comic being published
Also, I need to add another note here, Cyan's Adventure isn't my main series it's just a practice comic to gain some experience in the something that I never done before. So when I start my main series I will pretty much prepare for multi-issues comic
Anyway I still need to thank you for your critics and advices, I would be pleasure to read any other critic in the future page of the comic
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"You know, I just want to make everything simple and leave everything that I did intentionally or unintentional to fan theories, so I can read it and make a choice what's direction next"A general advice I'd like to give, is that you know what will happen. Aka there's a plot, and you know it. There might be some exceptions on experimental comics, where the readers decide what's going to happen next, but I doubt this is the case.
When you plan out your comics, and actually know what they will say or do in page 22 or so, it's easier to make a plot that doesn't have plot holes, characters that do not act all over the place, or have abilities or scenes that do not fit the over all theme.
Especially since this is a practice comic, it would be great to try out these things, since I strongly believe you'll use them in the real comic.
"It's either the limitation of my drawing ability or I were lazy or something else"Because of this, I had to point out the lack of Cyan's exhaustedness. I do not know if you can not draw such thing, or did you leave it out just because you didn't see the need for it. Either way, it was a point that caught my eye as a reader, and I hope you could work on that!
"For me honestly, reading this much analysis is a bit too early for me, because I haven't explain so much - - and I am sure that everything will make sense when the last page of the comic being published"
Good quote. Some of my questions indeed might be answered in the later on pages, and those can be simply discarded by saying "you will find out later on"
But I just wish you know, that these early pages give people such thoughts about the comic, so maybe you can adjust them and/or fix them in the dialogue/images/pages later on.
I will eagerly continue reading Cyan's adventures and see what happens next. One of the most well drawn comics I have seen in a recent while in the MLP community!
~Rose
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I already know the where is will go, but how the plot will get there is something that still need to choose there are multiple scenarios in my mind that I need to choose and this is when reading the comments come handy. But maybe you're right, I should choose how plot will get that direction from the beginning, and again very thankful for the advises
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Can't wait to see where this goes.
~Rose
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I can think of many different ways Cyan could be affected by using such spell
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I would like to hear it
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I would like to hear your ideas!
~Rose
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Button's mom is going to flip when she sees this.
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She is going to love her son even more
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You will see, in the future page
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That face Cyan makes in panel 6 - priceless!
There should be a vector of Rarity making that face.
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Woah, seems like Cyan is a powerful unicorn even for his age.
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Although he is a powerful magic caster, but he is physically weak even for unicorn of his age. in fact his sister could easily beat him in hooves-wrestling
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How come he can still stand up if such spell depletes, or largely at least, his mana pool and he's physically weaker ? Any form of race shifting is bound to be very taxing in a way or another, and 24h is fairly impressive.
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The spell it's only depleted his magic energy or let's say it mana, but it's not depleting his stamina
and yes he is physically, either he born that way or he is too focused developing his magic ability and leave his physically underdeveloped
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He'll likely automatically use stamina to support his spellcasting should his magic control system see his mana is insuffient. Otherwise his spell just fails or if he's better than that it'll work to the extent allowed by his mana.
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He can sense how much his mana left, just like how normal pony sense their stamina low by how tired part of their body are. in his case he can sense by how much pain in his horn and his head hurting him, but keep it mind what I am saying here it's not really canon unless if I add it to the comic, I probably will add or change some detail before add it to the comic
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