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Published: 2005-01-21 19:51:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 6575; Favourites: 43; Downloads: 245
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[Rated Mature because of implied nudity]Didn't Jim knew _that_ would happen to him when he put on Scarlet _beforehand_?
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Scarlet PI's first case! The Case of the Missing Jewels! Sorry if that's inappropriate!
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This brings up such bad innuendo XD
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It's not right to start investigating before involving a lady fully into such a collaboration!
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STOP GIVING THIS STUFF MATURE RATINGS! It's really not necessary unless it's frontal.
And what in God's name is Jim doing? D:
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I think that this strip is easiest to read of all of the other ones. I can tell whats going on and the pacing seems just about right. The combonation of long panel, two short blocks and another long panel also make for a pleasing composition to look at. Kudos on that.
However the spelling mistakes really take away from truely enjoying the humor. (I'm a terrible speller, my spell check is my best friend!) Mainly I'm noting the "Even your tail feels attacked to mine." Attacked and Attatch are really different actions! It would make your work a whole lot more professional and readable to just write out the whole script in a word doc and run a spell check through it. It would probably take you half the time and you might even be able to make a better story by re-reading it some.
I also think it would help if you used strait paralell lines to shade with, to run an even tone of gray over areas such as the fursuits pants or Scarlets hair for example. The back and forth shading makes it look oddly textured and is distracting.
Those are my two cents, take or leave them at your leisure.
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Thank you very much for the good word, as well as the typo correction. I'll be correcting that as soon as I can.
Even with my throughest of attempts to proofread, that occasional typo slips though. That's why I was hoping that I could get some proofreaders here before I post them on the site proper. At times I have ample time, at times I don't, but I appreciate the help nevertheless. Dittos with teh suggestions and tips on how to improve my drawing style, something I'm constantly hammering.
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Tnx for the new strip..... ^_^
please go on more quckly
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