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Published: 2009-04-11 05:12:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 540; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Page 1Panel 1 Black. A speaker speaks offscreen.
SPEAKER:
Access project codename: "Unity". Access directory for subject 347-B3D-T981. Load file Alpha-Zeta-Gambit-58721. Playback March 23rd 2008, 4AM.
Panel 2 The panel lights up to form a computer screen. Very futuristic, almost alien. It takes up a huge wall, with a silhouette of a robed human looking form standing in front of it. On the screen is a bunch of computer scat while it processes the commands it was just given.
COMPUTER
File loaded. Warning: classified material being accessed. Please provide passcode to continue.
SPEAKER
Authorization Level 1. Voiceprint niner-theta-zero. Historian ID: The Curator.
Panel 3 Computer screen signals "Granted".
COMPUTER
Clearance accepted. Commencing playback in 3...
COMPUTER
2...
COMPUTER
1... Enjoy the show!
Panel 4 Dream panel. A man is peeking from behind a tree in the foreground. He is watching a mother (white, blonde hair) and her two kids, one boy (age 10, asian descent) and one girl (age 7, also asian descent). They are exiting a car, coming home from school. The mansion they are parked in front of is surrounded by a grove, lush and green in the spring air.
Panel 5 Dream panel. The mansion foyer. The kids are putting their backpacks away with mom helping them.
RYU
...and then I scored 120 on the test! It was easy.
MOM
Thats great, Ryu! And how was your day, Kameko?
KAMEKO
AWESOME! I scored 130 on my spelling test. I even corrected the teacher! TWICE! He didn't seem to like it though...
MOM
Not many people like being corrected, sweetie. Especially by someone as cute as you!
Panel 6 Dream panel. Outside the front door. The man is hiding swat style on the wall beside the door. Panel appears to go out of focus, becoming staticy and out of focus.
MOM
(through wall) Who's hungry?
RYU AND KAMEKO
(through wall) ME!!!!
Caption: Data corrupted, alerting Restoration wing. Skipping corruption.
Panel 7 Dream panel. KAMEKO's point of view. In the family's kitchen. Its a big kitchen, part of a mansion. It's complete with a tile floor and marble countertops. Pots and pans hanging over the counters. Cockeyed close up view of the mother's burning body, tied and screaming in pain. A deranged man standing behind her with a kerosene can and matches in his hands. An evil and wild look on his face, almost like he's not there, like he's seeing his enemy burning. KAMEKO and RYU are tied up, screaming off screen.
Caption: Corrupted data skipped, playback resumed.
Caption:Katto Household. March 23rd, 1991.
KAMEKO
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH! MOMMMY!
RYU
MOOOOOOOOOOOMMY!
Panel 8 Dream panel. Mother slumps over, passed out in pain, dying. The deranged man is now standing in front of KAMEKO. A lit match and a jug of kerosene is in his hands.
KAMEKO
AAAAAAAAAA-
Page 2
Panel 1 Normal panel. KAMEKO's messy condo. Clothes strewn about, books and computer parts littered through out. KAMEKO springs up from a pile of tangled sheets and clothes (she's messy, alright?). KAMEKO's covered in sweat. Tears are rolling down her face. The HDTV in the background is playing some medieval swordfighting movie, two guys fighting to the death.
KAMEKO
-AAAAAAAAAAAH!
Caption: (K) -AAAAAAAAAAAH!
TV
Father would be ashamed to see what you've done to his kingdom!
Pane 2 KAMEKO looks around, and does a double take.
TV
I think not! I'm fulfilling Father's dream! This kingdom will grow to heights unimaginable!
Panel 3 KAMEKO puts her face in her hands, sobbing.
KAMEKO
*sniff*
KAMEKO
Shit...
Panel 4KAMEKO picks up her alarm clock, brightly displaying 5:38 AM. The movie is still playing in the background, reaching the fight scene climax.
KAMEKO
Well I'm up NOW... *sniff*
Caption: (K) Stupid dream. Wish it'd just go away.
Caption: Kameko Katto's Condo. March 23rd, 2009.
KAMEKO
ETHAN! What's on the agenda today?
TV
And with it bring about destruction! You're mad!
Panel 5 KAMEKO turns off the TV and heads for the kitchen. Dirty dishes line the counters and fill the sink.
TV
No I'm afraid you're the one who's mad, dear brother! I will be a God amongst men! I wi-
ETHAN
(tailess) Well, you have that presentation on M-Theory today at 3.
KAMEKO
Michio's gonna dig that. What else?
Panel 6 KAMEKO rifles through the pantry, still in her pajamas.
ETHAN
(tailess)The board is still expecting results on that alternative energy source you've been promising.
KAMEKO
Tell them if they want a supernova, I can have it to them by lunch. Otherwise, they're gonna have to give me more time.
Panel 7 KAMEKO's sitting on a barstool, hunched over her cereal on the bar.
ETHAN
(tailess)Noted. Lastly, there's the visit to your mother's grave.
KAMEKO
Yea... That's given. What a day.
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Comments: 13
nice stuff man. like i can visualize this easily as it was pretty detailed the panels.my only gripe about this is that you gotta describe the characters a little more (like white and blonde hair is nice but give me more def).All in all, its pretty good sample,nice job.
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Well, this would be supplemented with full character sheets and location specs, those were left out intentionally.
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As a sample script for potential artists and just to show your grasp of the format needed and your style this is great, very intriguing story also and I like your dialogue style.
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Thanks. Idk if you caught it, but the captions with a (K) in them are Kameko's thoughts. I'm always thinking things and saying something different (i think everyone does) so i wanted to bring that level of realism to my work.
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Yeahh, thats great! Very Deadpool ;]
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tbh, i haven't read Deadpool. I mean i've heard about him and I know what he's like, but i've never sat down and read a story. I'm more of a DC guy, but i'm thoroughly enjoying the reprint of Hulk vs Wolverine atm.
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He's really the only Marvel character I've ever been obsessed with, I'm completely an Image comics dude ahah! He thinks in his captions and he's like the only Marvel character to know he's in a comic.
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Ah yes, the 4th wall breaking technique. She Hulk did that alot in her early 90's stuff (yay wikipedia!). I've always had a soft spot for 4th wall breakers.
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Ahhhhhhh She-Hulk :] my first comic crush
Anything to do with breaking the 4th wall, so long as it's tasteful and doesn't spoil the comics integrity or reputation is dynamite in my books aha!
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I like this, but you definitely need to make a table of characters.
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Table of Characters? Elaborate. Also take into account it's 4 in the morning, so pardon if it's a stupid question.
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Lulz.
I mean, you need to make a page of the characters, their names, minor background details, etc.
By the way you're typing, I assume there will be several more characters. With no art to accompany it, it may be hard for readers to keep up with who's who.
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Yea. This is supposed to be a sample script for potential artists. It would be supplemented with character sheets, of course.
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