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Published: 2007-03-26 01:49:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 82; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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Description I had a secret,
one i kept buried deep inside
I hide it from view
for as long as i could.
Thinking that once it was out
I would be destined to be hated by you.
Sure enough, you reached my heart,
found out my secret and tore it apart.
You grasped my heart with your cold hands
and ripped it out like i wasn't man.
As i lay bleeding on the floor
You tell me you love me more and more
You say you were just trying to help
You dont want me hurt, but your the one
that hurt me the worst.
You took my world
and you have the nerve to say you care!
If you cared you wouldn't have searched for
that secret,
you wouldnt have dared!
Now im left with nothing
I dont want to move on.
You want me to hate them.
You want them gone.
You'll have to face the facts
I am not giving up
I promised to them my heart forever
and forever they shall get.
I have a few questions that i would
like to ask though...
Why did you do it?
Why did you want to take the one thing
that made me the happiest?
When you saw me crying so hard I
couldn't breath, did you understand that I
wasn't crying for me?
I was crying for them because
you said you called the F.B.I.
They were going to jail.
I had ruined their life.
You had taken their heart from my hands
and stabbed it with a knife.
I took a deep breath and
watched with a blank stare
as you again told me you loved me
Told me you cared.
I made it my mission
to fall out of existance.
I was to chicken to do what i wanted.
and i know if I did I would cause them to suffer.
So even as i scream out their name
with everything I have
the waters keep rising over my head.
I'm down to my last breath and
with it i whisper "i love you. I'll love you forever..."
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Comments: 7

xXxbroken-insidexXx [2007-06-27 00:48:34 +0000 UTC]

holy crap!
that is really good!
i love it :]

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DefeatedThoughts In reply to xXxbroken-insidexXx [2007-06-28 02:10:50 +0000 UTC]

thanks! .

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clow-reed16 [2007-05-31 00:56:28 +0000 UTC]

this is a very good poem please dont say its not. its a little rough around the edges but you can see the skill and talent and emotion in it. keep on writing and i will keep on reading!

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DefeatedThoughts In reply to clow-reed16 [2007-05-31 16:31:43 +0000 UTC]

yeaaaa...this one had the most emotion in it than any of my other ones. i think thats the reason it was so rough...cause i was just writing..not really thinking about what i was putting down lol. thanks again!

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clow-reed16 In reply to DefeatedThoughts [2007-05-31 22:07:53 +0000 UTC]

sometimes emotion is the very best form of poetry. it can turn a simple stanza into something magnificent.
your welcome!

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BrooklynNight [2007-03-26 18:50:21 +0000 UTC]

this poem is really good, don't say it's not...i'm so sorry if this is what your going through right now...you could have a future in your poetry, i'll try to read them as you post them!
Keep writing,
Brooklyn

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DefeatedThoughts In reply to BrooklynNight [2007-03-27 00:08:36 +0000 UTC]

lol wow...thanks!

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