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T__Tthis is a sample from the novel but it is subject to change knowing me... but the base it there.
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(Darkness, again darkness surrounded her. Was this a dream or was this a long forgotten memory? A crack of light broke the suffocating blackness. “Mana, I have a dress for you.” Mael’s young voice said. He entered, pushing a heavy door open. He had a torch in one hand and in the other a shimmering garment. She could see only his face, naked torso and arm in the dim light of the torch. Across his chest were leather straps and metal fasteners. Once again, Cassy was unable to speak. Mael had told her that Mana could not speak, that she was mute. But she could hear. Mael was talking in the strange language again. “I hope you like it… mother made it for you from one of her old dresses. They have accepted you and they said you may stay with us.” Mael seemed so happy when he said this it made her want to cry, because she knew how this would end. He helped her put the dress on, treating her like a doll that might break at any moment. Never once did he touch her like a lover though, what ever they had, it was more a friendship. When they had finished he took her to the small ray of light leaking from outside and opened the door wide. Cassy had never seen anything like this place. The walls looked like black marble and large pillars vanished up in the height of the spiraling stairway. Dark stone and multi colored tiles with light mortar made up the entire stairwell once they began their decent. Torches were lit every few feet so there was a good amount of light to see while walking the stairs. Cassy wasn’t sure how she knew but she knew that it was for the servants to see while coming and going. It wasn’t until they reached the landing that she saw Mael in the light for the first time in his entirety. Though it seemed that she wasn’t entirely in control of her actions in the memory or dream, she must have mentally lurched back at the sight of him. Horns and six wings, the very image of the beast in the drawings she had seen. He wore a long black gown on his bottom half, with a wide red stripe on the left side. His arms were covered in straps and chains, more like adornment than anything else, and his frame was small, weak looking. He was a child. Sixteen he had said he was when Mana died. He couldn’t have been older than that now as she looked at him. The three wings on his left side were leathery and bat-like. Similar to how they had looked when they flew. The three on the right were white, beautiful feathers that seemed to glow in the fire light. “Come, Mana. I promised to show you the progress father has made in the city. I bet that everyone will look at you and be jealous of your beauty.” He said and guided her to two large doors that were made of ornate filigree metal work. The doors were opened by what must have been servants, dressed much like Mael but more uniformed. Both servants had bright red eyes and starkly black hair. Cassy didn’t pay much attention to it until she began to notice that almost all the people they passed on there way out looked exactly the same. They stepped out onto a large expanse of stone that lead to a wide stairway leading down to a street of cobblestone. From this point, Cassy could see a city surrounding them. Tall dark buildings rose of like spires for miles around. The city was massive and to the farthest point you could see an odd red hazed hovering, blocking the sun… They walked down the steps and onto the road. Some parts were paved in stones and others were not. Perhaps that was what he had meant about his father making progress? Were they rebuilding this city? She wondered. It seemed so. Some buildings were nearly destroyed whereas others were being refurbished. The streets had many people walking them. Most of them looked like the servants: Black hair, white, matte skin and red eyes. But as they continued the people began to look different, some had violet hair and dark brown skin, some had green, red or golden hair and light skin but all had very long sharp ears. Cassy saw some people that looked like they were human pass by too. They called a name out to Mael, he ignored it. They called another name out, more forcefully this time, and he ignored it again. Cassy saw two other men join the humans, but these men were not human, they had the light features, pointed ears and strangely colored hair of the other people they had passed. One of the men forcefully grabbed Cassy, or Mana, away from Mael and held her. They called him horrible names, pushed him, prodded him but he never let his eyes drift from her nor did he retaliate aggressively. “Let her go… please.” He asked so gently she couldn’t believe it was the same man she knew now. One of the human men hit him in the back as hard as he could with some sort of weapon, she couldn’t see it well, and forced him to the ground. He was still watching her, his eyes burning with unshed tears as they pressed something to his face that burned him. One of the nonhuman men stomped the beautiful white wings until they bled red. He grinded his boot so hard into them the feathers gave way to flesh and bone. “
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Comments: 43
Creativesm75 [2010-09-26 09:56:45 +0000 UTC]
nice. but break the above into a few paragraphs, please? It would be easier to read.
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deadmansreel [2009-10-10 22:55:26 +0000 UTC]
That'd definitely be villain-creating material.
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Destinyfall In reply to deadmansreel [2009-10-11 17:16:51 +0000 UTC]
Yeah... its so fun to torture characters XD
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myyrrhn [2009-07-28 09:54:02 +0000 UTC]
damn you! i want to read more now!!
the only bit i didn't get was
" A black haze began to veil her eyes and then there was the pain of something cold sliding across her neck. A cry echoed out, the sound of a soul being warped and a heart being destroyed. Then there was nothing. )"
did she get her throat slit or what??
and was the soul/heart about mael?...
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myyrrhn In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-31 11:27:46 +0000 UTC]
thanks for helping stupid me
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morikun-rinari [2009-07-24 04:07:12 +0000 UTC]
I really can't think "OOooh! Its hotty vampire Mael!" in this pciture. All I can think is feeling sorry for him because of the pain in his eyes. A face like that needs some sympathy...and some blood.
But I can definitely see how this event changed Mael as a person/vampire forever.
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Destinyfall In reply to morikun-rinari [2009-07-24 16:56:38 +0000 UTC]
Mael: yes it was terribly disturbing... *rests head on shoulder* ...whats this about blood XD?
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morikun-rinari In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-24 20:42:21 +0000 UTC]
Well...he could use some. A vampire like him shouldn't be deprived of blood. :/
*gives Mael a hug*
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Destinyfall In reply to morikun-rinari [2009-07-26 17:44:36 +0000 UTC]
Mael: ^.^ *slips arms around Urbanite* ...yes
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morikun-rinari In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-27 11:34:29 +0000 UTC]
Ehm...if you don't mind Mael, I'll steal a kiss! *lightly pecks Mael on the cheek*
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Destinyfall In reply to morikun-rinari [2009-07-27 22:55:04 +0000 UTC]
Mael: O.o...
what?
Mael: now i feel bad about biting her T-T
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morikun-rinari In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-28 00:54:04 +0000 UTC]
Awww, its ok Mael. *looses collar and offers neck*
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winterelf86 [2009-07-23 22:26:58 +0000 UTC]
:sad: omg that's terrible...poor Mael...poor Mana ;_; I hate scenes like this >_> <_< but writing and the drawing are excellent!
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Rashari [2009-07-23 20:53:43 +0000 UTC]
-tear falls down cheek- I don't know who I feel worse for, Mana who was violated, or Mael who had to watch, and couldn't do anything.
-hugs Mael and wipes the blood from his face with a cloth- It makes so much sense now.
I can't wait for the book, Destiny.
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Destinyfall In reply to Rashari [2009-07-24 03:27:49 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much. It was very hard to write that part... so much pain and i like to put myself in the characters place... i couldn't honestly think of any thing worse than seeing someone you love being hurt and not being able to help them ... :/
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Lava2 [2009-07-23 19:58:51 +0000 UTC]
*flinches* ouch...poor Mael and poor girl...How could you be so mean to show what happened to Mael, poor guy *hugs him* ><
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Lava2 In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-24 14:04:05 +0000 UTC]
>< but still, poor guy...but in a sick way ><
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Destinyfall In reply to CrazyMissDaisy [2009-07-24 03:28:36 +0000 UTC]
XD thank you lol nah nah i had a hard time writing it but it paid off
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CrazyMissDaisy In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-24 13:18:31 +0000 UTC]
Totally paid off!
Now I want to make a "how to make a villian" for dear Mheon.
yeah yeah copying is the honest kind of flattery ^^
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Destinyfall In reply to CrazyMissDaisy [2009-07-24 17:27:30 +0000 UTC]
LOL XD well i can't really copyright it but hey i am glad to inspire LOL
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Destinyfall In reply to dragondoodle [2009-07-24 03:31:13 +0000 UTC]
lol aw i know... but it had to be done :/
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dragondoodle In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-24 04:12:07 +0000 UTC]
Yeah . . . but . . .
Eriantielle: Don't force me to call you a hypocrite after what you put ME through . . .
Oh . . . hush you.
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dragondoodle In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-28 03:20:50 +0000 UTC]
Rysta's been MIA . . . but Eriantielle, Raghnall, and Tiernan have been telling me their histories while I've been gone . . . it's been interesting to say the least.
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SpanishDragon [2009-07-23 17:19:28 +0000 UTC]
Again, it doesn't surprise me that Mael hated the World so much.
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Bubblesdubbles [2009-07-23 16:00:44 +0000 UTC]
poor Mael..Poor Mana...
so mean
(novel? There's a novel out or going to be out? Details?)
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Destinyfall In reply to Bubblesdubbles [2009-07-23 17:09:33 +0000 UTC]
i am working on the novel right now XD thank you for reading!
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Bubblesdubbles In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-23 17:26:40 +0000 UTC]
whoa! XD tell when it's out plz! and your welcome about the reading
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the1cutemetalchick [2009-07-23 14:51:44 +0000 UTC]
wow... that drawing is so scary. all that sorrow and pain... and mael really looks like some mad monster thing. *nods*
and that whole scene is disgusting.
nice job *thumbs up* (oh my youve gotta love your job.xD)
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Destinyfall In reply to the1cutemetalchick [2009-07-24 16:58:36 +0000 UTC]
I do love it XD i do XD thank you!!!
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the1cutemetalchick In reply to Destinyfall [2009-07-24 17:57:18 +0000 UTC]
xD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! so you should
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RivisIndigoEmporium [2009-07-23 14:22:32 +0000 UTC]
...I...can't comment on this right now...too numb...too upset...too sad...but I'll be back...
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