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Published: 2006-02-10 02:03:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 20; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Description Maybe next time you'll kill me for good, but until then I'll put myself back together in anticipation.
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sisterjanet [2006-02-10 04:32:07 +0000 UTC]

My creative writing professor was talking to me recently about the vast stores of cool lines he's written and kept that aren't really part of anything. What really sucks is when you write a beautiful sentence into a story but then go back and realize that your beautiful sentence is distracting and needs to be cut. That happened repeatedly in one of my recent stories. There's a quote that I found in =alienhead 's journal once that said something like "Sometimes, the only thing left to do is sharpen the axe and murder your darlings." (referring to darling sentences and the like, not becomming an axe murderer.) It's difficult but useful to keep that kind of mentality when revising.

ok. I'll shut up now, considering I've written a solid paragraph about your sentence. *hides*

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devilhooker666 In reply to sisterjanet [2006-02-10 20:26:04 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I understand exactly what you mean. Sometimes it'll take me a huge long paragraph of writing and there will only be one sentence from the whole thing I really like and most of the time it doesn't fit with the rest of the paragraph. Generally, I don't write stories, though. I keep a journal and sometimes go back and read my stuff and find that it was unintentionally poetic. But my journal is as far as some of that stuff goes.

P.S. you never actually said what you think of the sentence and I'd kind of like to know. O.o

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sisterjanet In reply to devilhooker666 [2006-02-12 04:31:05 +0000 UTC]

Maybe next time you'll kill me for good, but until then I'll put myself back together in anticipation.

is what you have. It's a good line, but I read it and thought, 'oh, but if you did:

Maybe next time you'll kill me for good; until then I'm rebuilding in anticipation.

or something like that, it would be even better.' It's possibly my deep love of semicolons.

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devilhooker666 In reply to sisterjanet [2006-02-12 15:16:03 +0000 UTC]

lol, yeah I did notice your obsession with semicolons. I kinda like yours with the semicolon better, but I don't really like the word rebuilding.

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