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Published: 2006-04-30 19:11:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 681; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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this is the most difficult part of the story my dearwe wash our hands clean at the end
you take the knife, stab it through his heart and then walk on
the harder part follows
redemption they call it, where you pull the knife out
the wound bleeds dry but it is his tears that burn your conscience
you want to believe that time is God
the longer you pray, the faster you receive
the shorter you wait, the more he shall bleed
pretence always gets you through
while you face him and break his insides
fancy a smile while you walk away
at the end of the wait you learn a thing or two
your edge must be wiped clean and kept because
there are only so many pieces a personβs heart can break into.
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Comments: 29
I really like the last line, it brings the whole piece together
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zaeem poem! i loved it,keep it up dez. havent been able to chat long, how are things?
take care
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thank you! i am fine and if so, i guess 'things' should be as well.
cheerio
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not bad.
not good either... i just dont feel like pooping on it.
just kidding.
deep.
reeeeal deep.
i hope you're proud of yourself
i am!....
uhm...
of you.
not me
i sux teh cox.
regardless....
~thwipul
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okie...confusing but i say thanks all the same...
cute girl on your avatar
cheerio
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you, i will kill. cute girl?!..... grrr
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c'mon....that girlie is cute. curly hair, glasses and all
hehehe
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for the record, i do agree with dezy.
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oh. now YOU'RE on my list too, mate.
oh. and while you're here. LOOKY! >>>>> ~thwipul
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i'm on the list of people who think you're a girl?
must be quite a long list, eh?
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Well well my friend.....what can i say....i was , am , n (after this one), will always be ur fan!!
this is ur greatest work till date......
P.S- ever thought of publishing ur work?.....no seriously...u could earn millions!!
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you give me way too much credit...i'm not that good!
many thanks!
cheerio
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well....for a layman like me....i guess u're awsome!!
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hey!!!!!!!
well,it is a wonderful poem...well written and the feelings come across really well.but, what happened to starting every line with caps lock?just asking! this is the kind of poems I love to read and prefer writing,as I already told you. so, my say on this is.....WAY TO GOOOO!!!!!
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dinkar happened...i've become lazy now
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whoohoo! dezy i love you!
seriously though, i don't think _every_ poem should be written that way. but it works really well with this. for example, when you put the G in God in caps, it gives a more emphasised effect, as the rest of the poem has no caps.
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great writin.
can feel the emotions.
gr8 poem.
keep goin lyk this
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i will try
thanks for your comment!
cheerio
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It's good....you can really feel the emotion....
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Happy May Day !
one of the best literary works by you Dezy !
awesome! too good !
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Very Good.....lota strong emotions.....good work i must say again....
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i bow before the literary lord. brilliant man. your best yet, seriously. keep at it.
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WOOHOOO...thanks! means alot and thanks for the brilliant title as well! WOOHOOO
cheerio
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