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Dominio95 — The Dragon in Me - Chapter 21
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We slowly made our way deeper into the cavern, the Nii ignoring us for the most part. I wasn’t sure if they were unable to sense their environment or they simply didn't mind bumping into things, but whatever it was, they moved slowly enough to not be an issue even if they did hit you.

“Careful there,” Ophara muttered as she pushed a fist-sized one away from her head. We were far enough into the room by now that I couldn’t see the walls in any direction. Nevertheless, Loriel forged ahead as if she knew exactly where we were going.

Meanwhile I could still feel that same stirring of energy from before. I’d expected it to die out as the first one had, but instead it seemed to be spreading out. I couldn’t shake the feeling that I was supposed to know what it was.

“I wouldn’t worry about it if I were you,” Avanor said, falling back to walk besides me. “We’ll know soon enough if anything is up.”

I looked at him, considering what so say. “It’s not that I’m worried. It just feels… important, somehow.” I shook my head. “But you’re right, there’s no use thinking about it right now.” He simply smiled in response.

“So anyway, what do you think about this place?” he asked, gesturing at the Nii surrounding us.

I followed his gaze, letting the Nii’s light flood my perception. “It’s beautiful. I’ve never seen anything quite like it.” The constant swirling colors had an almost entrancing effect if you stared at them long enough.

“That’s great. I wasn’t sure if coming here was a good idea, but now that we’re here I’m just glad we…” he interrupted himself, all of them stopping dead in their tracks.

“What?!” Ophara asked out loud, all their expressions turning from happy to serious in an instant. I didn’t know why. There was nothing around us that would warrant such a reaction.

I was about to ask, but Avanor held up a hand, eyes unfocused as he concentrated on something else.

They’re talking to someone, I realized, noticing how all of their minds seemed to be interacting with their Imi.

I waited, resisting the temptation to probe a little deeper and maybe follow along with their conversation. Even so, it was easy to tell there was something major happening.

Several tense moments later Avanor turned around to face me. “I think we just found out what you’ve been sensing,” he said before turning back towards where we came from and breaking into a light jog. The others followed, and after a moment’s hesitation the Tsahn and I began moving as well.

“It’s dragons. Well over a hundred of them.”

The moment he said the words I knew it was true, the faint movements I was still feeling instantly taking on a whole new meaning.

“They’re intelligent,” I said without a doubt in my mind. In front of us I began making out hints of a wall, the Nii slowing us down far more than I would’ve liked.

“Are you sure?” Saren asked.

“Yes, absolutely.” Now that I knew what I was feeling that fact was as clear as day. These minds I was feeling were nothing like those of the feral dragons closer by. Each and every one of them felt just as powerful as Rahk had, back then when he’d led me here. I shuddered to think what such a congregation of power entailed.

We finally broke free of the cavern, speeding up as the Nii grew less frequent. Now only the Tsahn’s clumsy run was holding us back, but there was nothing much we could do about that.

“Do you have any idea what they might want?” Avanor asked, breath calm despite the physical exertion.

“No, I…“ I began, but interrupted myself when a thought came to me. If what I was feeling was dragons then that other stirring - the first one that had been off in a direction that didn’t seem to fit into this world - could only have been one thing.

“I don’t know what they want, but it has something to do with Rahk.”

“Who’s that?”

“He’s the dragon that helped me get here,” I replied, voice tense as I tried putting what I knew together.

“I’ve been meaning to ask about that,” Loriel shouted from behind to make herself heard over the sound of our footsteps echoing throughout the tunnels. “Are you sure that he came from here?”

“Yes. He said so himself.”

She furrowed her brows. “I guess I’m just wondering how it’s possible he’s never been seen before. And now there’s over a hundred more, out of seemingly nowhere. We’ve explored and mapped every centimeter of this planet, so how could we have possibly missed something like that?”

I didn’t know, and neither did any of the others.

We ran in silence the rest of the way, my thoughts always coming back to one single question. Why was this happening now? A species that noone had seen in millions of years suddenly returning in full force, just minutes after I had found my Krahl. Had I somehow caused this?

The thought alone made me anxious. Who knew what these dragons had in mind, their colossal powers constantly drawing closer at incredible speeds. I could only hope their intentions weren’t malicious.

And then there was Rahk, of course, who, for some reason, was separate from the others. I’d felt him do something just moments before disappearing, though the sensation had been too strange and too faint for me to know what. How was he involved in this? Was he some sort of scout for the others? He hadn’t told me much back when we’d met.

I shook my head, trying to focus on the way in front of me, but the confusing mix of excitement and anxiousness made it difficult to steer my thoughts.

It took us several more minutes to finally reach the surface, in which I felt the dragons come ever closer. They were spreading out, with a larger group heading straight for us. Now that I could sense them more clearly it became apparent just how fast they were moving. It was only going to take them a few minutes to cover the last kilometers between us.

I was the first to exit the tunnel and fly up, out of the ravine. While I waited for the others to follow I returned to my normal size, a tiny bit of calm settling in as my body changed into the familiar form. There was simply something different about this shape.

“We’ll try to meet them up there,” Avanor said, pointing at the highest mountain we could see from here.

“What are you going to do?” I asked. I hadn’t even considered what their goal was in coming up here so quickly.

“See if they’re friendly or not,” he answered simply, mounting one of the Tsahn behind Loriel. Within seconds all of them were ready to go and the animals took off in their characteristic snaking flight.

I followed close behind, turning to look north as we rose above the mountain ridge blocking our sight. A surge of emotion ran through me as I saw a sparse line of tiny figures approaching from the horizon. I hadn’t expected them to be so close already.

They were flying fast, faster than I’d thought possible. By the time we touched down on the flat mountain top, barely a thirty second flight, they were almost upon us. Their approach was heralded by a thunder in the air that rivaled any storm I’d ever heard.

The central group of maybe fifteen dragons, the one that was headed straight for us, began slowing down, falling out of line with the others. I braced myself for an impact with the oncoming storm wall that carried them, but just before it arrived a small hole opened up, passing around us before closing again. In a blink of an eye the main line of dragons was past.

I resisted the urge to look after them, focusing instead on the group approaching from the front. There were sixteen of them, flying in a loose formation with a lilac colored one with a grey underbelly leading the center. They spread out, the majority of them encircling us, their wingbeats controlled as they hovered in place in the air around us. Four more were circling higher up, while the leader touched down opposite of us, careful gaze resting on me.

It was a female, I realized, and she was larger than me, easily as large as Rahk. All of them were, in fact, their two-colored bodies significantly more massive than mine.

Instinctively I found myself standing up tall, my head raised and wings raised slightly from my body. The dragons’ eyes seemed hostile as I looked around at them.

Several tense moments passed as we eyed each other, none sure what the other party was going to do. I was taken off guard when the leader suddenly spoke.

“It’s not him,” she said in the powerful dragon tongue, for the first time taking her eyes off me to look at the other dragons.

“How can you be sure? He might be masking his mind as well as his body,” a green, and white colored dragon to the right of me asked. He met my eyes with hostility.

“He’s intimidated,” the lilac dragon stated matter-of-factly. It was true. How could I not be with this much power on the verge of attacking me?

Instead of replying the green dragon launched himself forward, out of the circle, and touched down on top of one of the tall spires covering the mountain. I tensed, but didn’t move otherwise.

“You’re right,” he said, though his voice was free of mock. His eyes lingered on me a moment longer before he turned to the lilac dragon. “We’ll leave you, then.”

She simply nodded and in a sudden flurry of motion the swarm of dragons took off, rapidly accelerating towards the southern horizon. I looked after them for a moment before turning to face the one that had remained.

“Who are you?” I asked, still gathering my composure.

“I am called Sarkehh,” she answered, “though I must ask the same to you. Who are you?”

“I am Arkanith,” I replied, strangely proud to be able to present my new name. It had truly been a great choice, I thought.

Sarkehh seemed surprised to hear that. “Who gave you that name?”

“My friends did,” I answered, looking down at them. The word had come to me without thinking, simply encapsulating my feelings towards them. But now that I’d said it, I saw the truth in it. Even if I had only known them for days, I was happy to call them my friends.

“That is good.” Her expression softened.

“What do you want here?” I asked. Sarkehh considered me for a moment

“Before I can answer that, I have to ask you one more question,” she said, waiting for my approval. I nodded.

“What is your Krahl?”

Spoken by her the word had the same unmistakeable air of certainty behind it as it had with Rahk.

“My Krahl,” I repeated, feeling that same quality repeated in my own voice. Saying it in this tongue meant more than simply producing the sounds. It carried with it a deeper understanding of one’s own self.

I thought I was beginning to understand why I’d had so much trouble saying it several months ago.

“My Krahl is to live,” I said, trying my best to put into words what I’d felt down there in the light filled cavern. “It is to give chances for life to unfold.”

“I see.” A hint of thoughtfulness entered her expression. “Your conviction seems strong for having found it so recently,” she added.

I simply met her gaze, staying firm.

A faint smile appeared around the corners of her mouth before disappearing again. “In that case I will deliver the message we came to spread.”

She focused on Avanor, quickly touching his mind with her own before retreating again. He seemed to barely have noticed she did anything at all.

When she started speaking again it was in perfect Vornith. “I am here to give you a warning and a plea for help. As we speak, others of my kind are seeking out every member of your civilization they can find and delivering the same message.”

“Wait, wait, wait, what is going on?” Ophara interjected. “How come you…”

Sarkehh interrupted her with a gesture, expression serious. “In time. You can ask questions after I have told you what I have to say.” She paused, gathering her mind. “There is a dragon on the loose that has the potential to wipe out all life on this planet if he so desires. He has done so before and might do so again.”

I felt all my thoughts stop at that very moment. No. That can’t be true.

Sarkehh gave me a concerned look, but carried on with her explanation. Beside me Avanor and Loriel exchanged worried glances. “We do not know where he is or what he is out to do, but we ask you all to lend us your aid in finding him. Know, however, that he is a shapeshifter of phenomenal prowess, capable of masking both body and mind.”

No, no, no, I could hear myself thinking. It can’t be him. It can’t.

“Be wary of any new arrivals, be they familiar or strange. Do not attempt to confront him, for he is far too powerful to be brought down by anything other than the combined might of our entire race. That is all.”

She fell silent, eyes shifting to me. I couldn’t bare to confirm what I already knew.

“His name,” I began, barely daring to speak. “Is it Rahk?”

I knew the answer as soon as I felt the turmoil of emotions rise up in her mind. Rage, hatred, and betrayal were all there, overshadowed by a looming fear. Fear! His name alone was enough to make someone of her power afraid.

“You know him?” Sarkehh asked, the first of a million questions, I felt. Her voice seemed almost frail, suddenly.

“Yes,” I whispered, remembering the first words Rahk and I had exchanged. How he had thanked me. Thanked me for allowing him to get to my world. “I helped him escape.”

End of Part 1
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ITInikitronITI [2023-03-10 10:07:23 +0000 UTC]

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NBDragon21 [2020-12-10 02:28:14 +0000 UTC]

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peopledontcare [2020-12-03 02:07:56 +0000 UTC]

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Mattthelizzerd [2020-05-18 17:21:30 +0000 UTC]

you gunna contue this story at some point?

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teipot1 [2020-04-11 19:26:01 +0000 UTC]

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Dominio95 In reply to teipot1 [2020-04-12 07:20:07 +0000 UTC]

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LucidAura42 [2020-01-16 11:25:47 +0000 UTC]

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Dominio95 In reply to LucidAura42 [2020-01-17 10:10:38 +0000 UTC]

Hey, glad to hear you enjoyed it! I did some outlining and brainstorming on issues I saw with what I was planning last summer, and have left it on the back-burner since then. I've notes for some of the most important story arcs I want to have in the next part, but so far I just always feel there's some glue missing to tie it all together. Getting into tabletop RPGs also hasn't exactly helped in focusing my creative energies on writing^^
I do want to finish this, I'm just not sure when I actually will. For reference, I've currently got about 6k words of a fairly detailed outline sitting around - which is around double what part 0 was -, plus a bunch of extra notes about more general ideas, I'm just missing ideas for how to nicely solve some aspects of the story without either glossing over things or detracting from the main narrative.
Anyway, sorry I can't give anything more firm, but I do want to finish this, just not sure when I'll actually do it.

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LucidAura42 In reply to Dominio95 [2020-02-04 08:57:39 +0000 UTC]

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Draconicflames [2019-10-18 03:55:01 +0000 UTC]

Any idea when you’ll start part 2?

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Dominio95 In reply to Draconicflames [2019-10-18 07:56:17 +0000 UTC]

Sorry, not sure yet. I did some outlining over the summer but the story just doesn't feel right to me yet, so I'm leaving it on the back-burner for now.

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Jolo5382 [2019-06-13 11:23:01 +0000 UTC]

hi man. i hope so much yhat you will upload part 2. I look forwart to it! I have read part 1 more than 10 times. Senteence last month.



i look forward...
my fantasy is big and rich.....
But each has its price....
here i am at the last bits of mijn fantas....
without source of origin....
is it over with the fun...


here i ask you to please to continue?

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Dominio95 In reply to Jolo5382 [2019-06-16 16:01:48 +0000 UTC]

Hey, glad to hear you liked it so much! There's definitely going to be a part 2, though I can't promise when. I'm looking to write some this summer so we'll see what that turns into.

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Jolo5382 In reply to Dominio95 [2019-06-16 17:30:19 +0000 UTC]

I am glad to hear that. I look forward. you have already made us nervous:]. and a nice source of inspiration along with a number of others to write one yourself ..... maybe you have tips for me because it is my first time .... and then how do you upload it here on diviantart?

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Dominio95 In reply to Jolo5382 [2019-06-19 13:39:46 +0000 UTC]

If you want to get into writing, honestly, the most important thing to do is just write. As for tips, look at the stories that excite you and try to figure out what it is that you love about them. Don't be afraid of revising. Show, don't tell. Those are probably the more important things to keep in mind. Just give it a try and have fun^^

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Jolo5382 In reply to Dominio95 [2019-06-19 17:04:34 +0000 UTC]

fav.me/dd9lu0d this is what i made recently let me know what you think. you can be tough on it in your answer.

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Dominio95 In reply to Jolo5382 [2019-06-21 09:15:07 +0000 UTC]

Glad to see you giving it a try I'm not sure it makes much sense for me to properly critique someone's first story since there's bound to be a whole host of issues with it. I think for now you'll get the best mileage out of improving your English. Having proper sentence structure, spelling, grammar, etc. is an important foundation for telling anything that really pulls people in. And of course, always try to be critical of your own work. There's always something to improve and if you keep an eye out for what you think worked/didn't work you're bound to get better.

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Jolo5382 In reply to Dominio95 [2019-06-21 12:00:34 +0000 UTC]

thank you 
I will continue to do my best my english is better than my dutch [my mother language]  

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dragon43210 [2019-05-11 06:48:44 +0000 UTC]

Are you sure your not dead.😉

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Dominio95 In reply to dragon43210 [2019-05-12 10:03:13 +0000 UTC]

Mostly^^ I'm looking to get back into writing soonish (a few weeks or so from now), so we'll see when I get something done.

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AGTJYT [2019-04-10 05:52:35 +0000 UTC]

Will you ever make more? It's the best thing that I've read by far!

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Dominio95 In reply to AGTJYT [2019-04-15 16:16:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Yeah, I'll finish this at some point, but I really can't say when. Writing's been on the back-burner for me for a while now but it'll always be something I care about.

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Mattthelizzerd [2018-12-22 14:49:41 +0000 UTC]

you having writers block?

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Dominio95 In reply to Mattthelizzerd [2018-12-24 09:46:58 +0000 UTC]

It's just fallen off my priority list for the most part. I'll definitely get back to it at some point but can't really promise when.

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Mattthelizzerd In reply to Dominio95 [2018-12-24 13:55:59 +0000 UTC]

ok

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dragon43210 [2018-08-16 05:51:44 +0000 UTC]

I know  you've been asked this a lot but I have to ask how far are u into part 2

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dragon43210 [2018-08-08 02:17:21 +0000 UTC]

So if Arkanith aka markus is similar to Rahk does at mean that he will  as strong s Rahk or close  as strong

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Dominio95 In reply to dragon43210 [2018-08-09 10:39:07 +0000 UTC]

He's got the potential but basically no experience, so comparing them is a bit moot at this point.

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dragon43210 [2018-08-02 16:23:02 +0000 UTC]

My worst enemy CLIFF HANGERS

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Dominio95 In reply to dragon43210 [2018-08-03 12:51:22 +0000 UTC]

Hey, at least I made sure to wrap up a big previous plot point before leaving you hanging.

And thanks for all the comments!

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2WolfSouls [2018-07-25 01:27:43 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful story I loved the plot hope I can read more of this ^^

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Dominio95 In reply to 2WolfSouls [2018-07-29 08:27:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! There's definitely going to be more, I'm just not certain when yet^^

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Zcoder777 [2018-05-19 21:52:12 +0000 UTC]

Have you given up on this story?

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Dominio95 In reply to Zcoder777 [2018-05-21 12:03:57 +0000 UTC]

No, though I'm not working on it as much as I maybe should. I'm not really happy with how part 1 turned out and I just feel like I need to get better at writing before tackling something as involved as the things I've got planned for part 2. It would probably turn out decent if I tried right now but this story is important to me so I want to do better than decent. So, for now, I'm writing other things to try and get better at writing various types of characters and intricate settings.

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tekkitkid99 In reply to Dominio95 [2018-05-25 20:49:32 +0000 UTC]

Part 1 turned out fine, you have nothing to worry about; unless it hasn't met your expectations.

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Dominio95 In reply to tekkitkid99 [2018-05-27 11:32:07 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I appreciate it. I'm mainly saying that wasn't as good as it could've been. It's still alright in my eyes, with some moments that I'm quite proud of, but overall I think I could've done a little more so I'm trying to aim higher with part 2.

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tekkitkid99 In reply to Dominio95 [2018-05-29 17:51:58 +0000 UTC]

that's good, I'll hold you to that! 
I understand what you mean with doing a little more. I have always struggled to get my thoughts on paper because there just aren't words to describe them. If I try to write a story, I scrap it almost immediately because it has come out completely differently than it is in my mind; otherwise its just badly written.
this damned story has been rattling around somewhere in the back of my head for years, but i cant get it on paper quite right, so it doesn't go away ever.

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Dominio95 In reply to tekkitkid99 [2018-05-30 13:01:42 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, it's a whole lot easier to come up with ideas than it is to put those onto paper. It's part of the reason I don't really focus on wordsmithing in my current works, I feel like I first have to know how to tell a good story before learning to tell it beautifully.

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Haspiano In reply to Dominio95 [2018-06-02 23:13:02 +0000 UTC]

When you do something that you want to do, you want to make it perfect. Sometimes the author is the worst critic for his own work. Take your time and do it like you want to, but remember that perfection is hard to achieve and sometimes it isn't enough to make it look like you have imagined.

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Dominio95 In reply to Haspiano [2018-06-03 11:08:40 +0000 UTC]

I'm not shooting for perfection, don't worry. I'm well aware that artists are usually most critical of their own work but I think that's mainly because they've spent so much time looking at it that they're able to see all the flaws. Anyway, all I'm really trying to do is get my abilities to a point where I can be confident that I won't feel the need for a rewrite when looking back at this story. Certain sections of part 0 and 1 do meet that and I still enjoy looking back at those to see how I did things, but others scrape close to the line where I'd want to scrap them and try again. I just want to avoid that for part 2.

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Haspiano In reply to Dominio95 [2018-06-03 13:12:27 +0000 UTC]

As many said - take your time.

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Zcoder777 In reply to Dominio95 [2018-05-22 22:37:09 +0000 UTC]

Are you going to post them online?

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Dominio95 In reply to Zcoder777 [2018-05-25 17:36:46 +0000 UTC]

I might, not sure. There are a few short things I could probably post here with a little polish but the majority would require a good deal of effort to get to a presentable state.

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Mattthelizzerd [2018-03-10 17:55:18 +0000 UTC]

never mind what i wanted to say got thru.

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Mattthelizzerd [2018-03-04 22:37:57 +0000 UTC]

why did you never finish the OLD dragon in me story?

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Dominio95 In reply to Mattthelizzerd [2018-03-05 02:01:38 +0000 UTC]

Originally? Because I hadn't made any plans whatsoever for it and was just winging it. That relatively quickly led to me running out of ideas. After a little while I realized that even the stuff I had written wasn't very good and I wanted to do better. So I scrapped and revised it. Then I revised it again. And again. And a few more times. Eventually I ended up with plans for what would become this story, so in my mind the old version is just that: the first draft of a story i wanted to write. Usually those don't see the light of day, but when I started out writing I really had no idea about the importance of revision^^

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Mattthelizzerd In reply to Dominio95 [2018-03-05 23:08:50 +0000 UTC]

i put a lot of thought into this so ples read it  tell me weather i know what im talking about or not (im not a writer)

i figured out two big holes in what made the old story one that makes it much less believable and could of helped avoid hitting a dead end.

the first one is makes it not believable are how people reacted to the fact that there is now a dragon in the world and this is taking into account the power to affect the minds of thous around him.  at first they would be in aw and alot of sceptaisim that its real but when peapl start to beleave that its for real things are gonna get crazy
here is the list of the kinds of people that are gonna be trouble.

1st dragon fans and turists the exestic of a dragon will draw a hell of alot of peaple wanting to see the dragon all over the world its gunna get crazy im talking black friday city wide crazy!

2nd all kinds of freaks! like...
financials people who like dragons too much!
wannabe real life dragon slayers
extreme anaml rights activists. 

3rd the government! the millatary want to get there hands on him exoeshly considering all the powrs he has like seemingly limitless growing and shrinking all the breath powers and not the the lockl ones all the ones around th world!

4th scientist of all kinds!(like the mad ones!)

that inted of being away to try to regain control of himself for 80 years make it 20 instead so he will both have somewhere to comeback to but allso having to deal with both the fact of how much everyone he knew have changed or the fact he has not aged a day. 

the first hole is to me the bigist one. 
its still in your new one but not as much.

im still a fan of your work and the is just one fantasy fans hard thought opinion.

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Dominio95 In reply to Mattthelizzerd [2018-03-06 14:39:28 +0000 UTC]

You've got the right idea, though there's more to it. Simply put, I just wasn't a good enough writer to achieve what I wanted to do, so the result was a lot of awkward and unbelievable characters and events. This was a long time ago so my memory might be a little fuzzy, but I remember not even really realizing just how much work figuring out a believable sequence of events for something like this (guy turns into dragon in today's world) would be. I just thought of situations that sounded fun and proceeded to write those, which is just not how you craft a good story. That is the main reason for your first point. You've done a good job outlining some of the considerations I would've had to make, so I think you can see why it was a little much for my first-ever larger-scale story^^

As for your second point, that's not so much a problem with the original story as it is a different path it could've taken. I remember considering various lengths for this 'recuperation' period and in the end I chose what I did because I didn't feel like writing in a contemporary world anymore. So I sort of shoehorned in a transition to a different world and was planning to turn it into this bigger fantasy thing, but if I was unprepared for writing a dragon tf story in today's world I was nowhere near ready to tackle the likes of epic fantasy. I still don't think I have the skills to pull that off, which is why I've chosen to focus on Ark's character development as the main driving point rather than the events happening around him.

Anyway, I hope you'll be able to make sense of my ramblings^^ My main point is that, yes, what you pointed out are issues with the old story but they're not the reason why I abandoned it. Ultimately that was because of my inexperience as a writer.

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Mattthelizzerd In reply to Dominio95 [2018-03-07 23:47:36 +0000 UTC]

in your new one I think you shuld of had the shape shifter dragon and his new friends complete some kind of mission or quest first befor finding other shapshifter dragons so you can explore more of the world and learn much more of how things work there and the none elf guys have a more solid reason to trust him besides just his word.

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Dominio95 In reply to Mattthelizzerd [2018-03-08 13:50:10 +0000 UTC]

I'd originally planned to have a bit more time pass before Ark found his Krahl, but it didn't really make sense for him to go anywhere in the state he was in. He knew very well that he wasn't in full control of himself and that the current situation was only barely working. That's why he was reluctant to leave when the others suggested visiting the Nii caves.

So instead I tried giving a few glimpses of what this world is like without actually having him explore it. There's going to be more to see in part 2, though as I said in my previous comment, the main focus of the story is on Ark's personal development so it might not develop the way you'd expect^^

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