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Isn't it?But seriously, I want to know the history Aizen and Isshin have together that Aizen has known about Ichigo for so long
Bleach belongs to Tite Kubo
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No, but I find it helps to divert the readers attention between what's the story and what's just notes.
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ohh, i dont do notes. all mine is n one pov.
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That's fine, I just feel like some extra information is good for the reader. Stuff that would otherwise be breaking the fourth wall if said by the character. Especially when it comes to translations for Zanpakuto and techniques.
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there isnt alot of tht goin on n my story. not really. i cant describe a fight to save my life lol. i wish i could, kristen can fight with the best of em now. she kinda like nel tho, she doesnt like to fight but when she does u betta watch out. she doesnt like killing either. kill or be kill isnt her forte lol
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Sounds like one of my OCs, or rather two of them mixed together.
Well take lessons from me when it comes to fight scenes. Chapter 12 of Chivalry Isn't Everything is one big fight scene and there are also some in Even Gods Have Families.
Of course most of my fight scenes are in Ryoka Alliance, but since Even Gods have Families is shorter, at least at this point, read that for now before you get on Ryoka Alliance.
I know you said you didn't see the movie "It's a wonderful life", but have you ever seen a cartoon or otherwise where a character wishes that he/she wasn't born and then gets to see what life is like without them?
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Okay, because the movie "It's a wonderful life" is where that concept comes from
That being said you would definetely enjoy my fic called "For Want of a Brother"
For Want of a Brother: [link]
Description: A Shinigami from and alternate reality comes to Ichigo's world from a world where he doesn't exist. How did it happen? What will he do?
This is a very angsty fic, you have been warned, unless of course you love angst as I know some people do.
It's 17 chapters and it's finished, so I don't know whether you want to read that next or Even Gods Have Families. However, in my personal opinion you should read Even Gods Have Families since you just finished reading Chivalry Isn't Everything and then move on to For Want of a Brother
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i think im gona read even gods have families 1st.
One of my chapter kinda has a ref to suicide, should i warn ppl bout tht? i kno sum ppl hate it.
Im having a hard time summarizing it lol i feel like there is so much to it. idk wat to say lol.
Idk which to chracters 2 choose either lol.
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You're story is rated M isn't it? That alone should cover it, but if you want to throw the warning out there just to be safe go ahead
I have that problem to sometimes, which is why I find author's notes so useful, it sort of expands on the description.
Think of something that you think will get the point across without spoiling any twists that might be in the story
I say pick the two characters that have the most impact on the story that's why I selected Aizen and Gin for Ragnarok's story. Of course if you pick two same gender characters you might want to tell people that there's no Yaoi/Yuri in the story.
If you don't know what that is, I'd be happy to enlighten you
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yea its rated M. i was thinkin i mite, but tht doesnt happen til later on.
yea i kno wat it is, i'm not too big on it either
I wish it let u pic 3 ppl.
I posted it. tell me if the description is intriguing lol
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Neither am I, however I still feel as though YoruSoi has a chance (YoruichiXSoifon) and am also comfortable with it 👍: 0 ⏩: 1
I say if you have the room for it after the word Japan type in "in Karakura Town" after it or if you could remove the word Japan and replace it with Karakura Town also I would suggest making some vague reference as to how Aizen and Renji play a part if you have the room.
Examples for Aizen
"she realizes she is being stalked by
Insert suggestion 1: a certain God-modded shinigami
Insert suggestion 2: a certain Brown haired Shinigami
Suggestion 3: the leader of the Arrancar
Renji:
Vague Descrip 1: Pineapple headed Lieutenant/vice captain
Vague Descrip 2: Red haired Shinigami
Vague Descrip 3: 6th Squad Lieutenant/vice captain
Totally up to you though, I'm just making constructive suggestions to make it more appealing to more people. You'll certainly hook several people in with what you've got already though, no doubt.
I never actually mention karakura town n my story. I read tht it it actually a fictional western Tokyo city, so i just call it Tokyo in my story.
I only had enough room to describe aizen, since i was already talkin bout him.
Renji appears early on, so mayb it will b ok tht i dont descibe his role.
So it's intriguing?
They should give u at least 500 char.
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Ah, but that's not fanfictionally correct now is it?
You're going to confuse people otherwise.
That's fine
Yes from the description it's intriguing
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whoops lol idk the rules.
i'm sure it will b ok i normally just say japan. i dont call it anythng much lol
its a part of tokyo tho i dont it will confuse ppl. u'll c when u read it.
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mmkay
By the way have you ever seen the movie or the series of the Odd Couple?
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wheneva u read let me kno if it confuses u. i dont thnk it will tho.
umm mayb, idr. refresh my memory lol
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Felix Unger and Oscar Madison, those names ring any bells?
Felix is a neat freak and Oscar is a slob
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i dont think i eva seen it. i heard of it tho. y?
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No real reason, other than the fact that I make a reference to it in the latest chapter when Ragnarok is talking to a slightly intoxicated Soifon when she attempts to prevent Omaeda from choking on chicken and Dimitri tells her it's boneless chicken
Soifon: Boneless Chicken?
Ragnarok: Boneless Chicken.
Soifon: If it's boneless, how did it walk?
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I do a lot of Pop Culture references in my fic, but a lot of them aren't detected because of the subtlty
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lol! wat else to u refer to?
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Um, well I do "Twilight Bashing" sometimes
I made one allusion to Final Fantasy VII in chapter 3 of Ryoka Alliance
Chapter 11 of Ryoka Alliance I made a joke abased to an Adult Anime I once watched
Chapters 18 - 20 are done in Script format in order to accomodate for the Ace Attorney Games Series feel
I know I've made others within the text, but I can't remember all the little inside jokes that I've made
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I LOVE twilight lol.
My story reminds me of it a tad lol. IT wasnt intentional tho. See idk wat exactly will happen n my story til i write it normally. Wat happens depends on how i feel tht day of wat music im listening to.
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Ah, well there's one thing we can disagree on then, I'm sort of anti-Twilight
That's the same with me though, the story can change depending on my mood, but that's only with some stories, sometimes I just want to keep the mood the way I intended to keep it.
I actually have a playlist set up for love scenes, slow scenes, angst scenes and fight scenes. I wish I had stuff for suspense scenes, but I don't, least not yet.
Oh and I remember what you said about the suicide thing I have Soifon try to kill herself in Even Gods Have Families, but Ragnarok stops her and I didn't give a warning. Of course not many people seem attracted to Even Gods Have Families anyway for some reason 
Anyway gtg, I need to shower and then get dressed to go off to the lab for some work
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Y r u anti twilight? I love the books! i have them all! I have the movies 2. I'm kinda a twi-hard lol.
I dont have playlists for certain scences. But i have like certain songs. Like a have a few songs 4 loves scences tht r sweet and such. I have dirty songs if the love scence r well dirty lol. I have have songs 4 angst scenes 2 lol. And fights scenes.
My suicide part made my preg friend sick lol. Its not even graphic i dont thnk lol. None of my friends seen it coming lol. u will tho cuz i told u haha.
Well i am going to read it eventually and im sure its good. Ur others tht i read have been good.
As far i kno no one has even looked at my chapter 1. If they have they didnt review it. Idk how to tell if any1 has even looked.
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Because of what it did to my classmates.....my female classmates.....the hot ones. Not to mention the bad rep it's given vampires that I've sort of taken upon myself to restore.
Can we drop the subject on Twilight, I hate debating on points where my opinions differ with someone, it's not worth it.
I have 5 songs for angst
18 for love scenes
11 for slow scenes
12 for fight scenes
And I also have a playlist containing the theme songs for each of my OCs in Ryoka Alliance. I'm trying to think of one for Dimitri
Of course right now for my Ryoka Alliance OCs the songs are as follows (the list will make more sense, hopefully, after you've met the characters)
Kain - Second Chance by Shinedown
Razia - Breaking Inside by Shinedown
Kendra - Million Miles from Home by Dune
Ryusei - Hero by Skillet
Sakina - Tourinquet by Evanescence
Orion - Renegade by Styx
Sachi - Tik Tok by Ke$ha
Phoenix - Testosterone by Bush
Cyrus - Animal I have Become by Three Days Grace
Thalassa - Lift Me Up by The Benjamin Gate
Keiga - Headstrong by Trapt
Grimaios - Son of Man by Phil Collins
Ayame - Breakaway by Kelly Clarkson
Luciella - Angel of Darkness by Alex C.
Scrysha - Awake and Alive by Skillet
Jade - Going Under by Evanescence
Valor - In the End by Linkin Park
If I think of one for Dimitri aka Ragnarok I'll let you know
Oh thank you ^_^
If you go to Traffic and click the Story Stats tab it'll tell you how many people have viewed your profile
Also check your e-mail frequently that'll tell you if people have faved or subscribed to your story or profile. And I haven't forgotten about the anime laws e-mail, I'll do that before I start reading, but after I've had something to eat
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i LOVE ke$ha lol.
yea it will make more sense after i read ryoka alliance.
OMG one of them so has my name lol Kendra. i dont believe tht. haha
I have had no traffic, thats a bummer lol. Its only been up 24hrs tho. I hope sum1 reads it.
Oh and ur welcome.
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Someone probably will, though I think the traffic menu is having technical difficulties at the moment
So I noticed (I saw you're full name when you e-mailed me).
People seem to like Kendra than some of my other OCs. IDK y though. She's not the strongest or the most important, but I guess guys and girls alike seem to like the subtle badass Ninja-type girls.
I'm about to kick back and read your story after I take some peptobismal for my stomach
Lesson Learned: Buffalo Wings and Pink Lemonade does not mix well in my stomach
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i sure hope so. i guess i will ad chapter 2 2nite.
Oh yea lol.
Yea she already has a kick butt name, so i'm sure she's pretty awesome lol.
Okie dokie. buffalo wings and pink lemonade dont even sound good 2gether. We had chinese earlier. I'm hungry again now tho.
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Well you'll find out when you read, but you should get to Even Gods have Families first
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yea it neva fails. eat chinese food and get full and bam 2 hrs later ur hungry again. its not very filling obviously. but it sure is good.
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I saw a comedian do a bit on that once before. It was pretty funny.
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I don't remember the name, big hefty guy, he was doing a whole bit on restaurants, I saw it a while ago on youtube
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oh idk lol.
I like jeff foxworthy and all them on with the blue collar comedy thng.
I also like jeff dunham!
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OMG I love Jeff Foxworthy's bits. He's hilarious
Oh god I can't think of Jeff Dunham without the following line crossing my mind
SILENCE!
I KEEL YOU!
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me 2! i used to have a tape of songs he sung lol. since i said tape u gota kno tht was a loooooong time ago lol. it had redneck 12 days of christmas a such on it.
Ackmed! or however u spell his name. i think peanut is my fav tho lol
jeff fa fa dunham dot com lol and he says it n like diff pitches. i love it
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Let's see um A..C....phlem LOL
I like Walter, he's blunt, but he's funny
My favorite thing with Jeff Foxworthy is "You might be a Redneck if..." bit
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LOL i have a dvd of jeff dunham sumwhere.
lol yea i like the redneck jokes too, especially since i kno sum. Alabama is prob redneck central lol
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"If your dad walks you to school because you're in the same grade...you might be a redneck."
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LOL when my dad was n the 6th grade their was 2 boys n his grade tht drove 2 school cuz they were 16 lol
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Oh, I keep forgetting to say this, as far as continuity is concerned believe it or not Ichigo's only 16 and Yuzu and Karin are 11, just thought I'd let you know
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yea i kno. i made them a yr older, cuz i wanted him to b older lol so i though i would make his sisters older as well. i guess i should i do an authors note when i post tht chapter. its just 1 yr tho, so i dont think it matters. it did 2 me tho iguess. i think i was gona do a lil ichigo kristen thng, but i didnt. i mite still do it. i kinda fore shadowed tht he liked her n chapter 9 i thnk it was. i just wanted him a tad older for it. lol
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yeah an author's note would be useful in that instance
Now you might understand why I'm so fond of them
You still could, provided Renji and Orihime don't kill them afterwards. Renji to Ichigo and Orihime to Kristen.
I don't know if you want to, because I'm sure once your story catches on that people are going to bug you about it, but if Momo keeps calling Aizen "Captain Aizen" in Kristen's presence if that gets on Kristen's nerves you might want to have her bitch slap Momo and knock some sense into her
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lol kristen is romantically *wats the word im lookin 4* like she thinks renji is her soul mate BUT she had a fierce connection wit grimmy and hes a bad boy. all girls love bad boys. she still upset over his disappearance. i'm still debating on bringin him back just for the drama of it lol.
Kris doesnt kno orihime likes ichigo. She couldnt hurt kris if she tried tho lol.
Idk tht ichigo knows bout her and renji. they havent been lovey dovey n front of him.
I was just gona make him kiss her and she wasnt exactly gona resist cuz he's just a cutie pie lol.
Can u tell tht he likes her by wat u've read?
WHat will ppl bug me about?
LOL momo didnt like it when kris said tht she didnt kno aizen very well. she went all crazy 4 a sec.
I thought bout makin kris say well he didnt rape u but i decided not to. i didnt kno how momo would react to tht lol.
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No she couldn't but that doesn't mean Tatsuki wouldn't
It wouldn't matter Renji would deck him for getting with her most likely
You mean Ichigo, yeah I've noticed, I wasn't sure you were trying to do that so I didn't say anything.
Telling you that Kristen, or someone, should give Momo a talking to or something. Someone bugged me about that in my crossover fic
This is how Momo would react 
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lol yea tatsuki could try. I wish her luck lol.
Neither will find out tho hehe.
Well i was gona do sumthn with them when she moved in with them, but i got totally put off by tht idea 4 sum reason, so i thought i mite pic it up later.
Lol,i will tell to let momo b. she is dealing the best way she can. poor momo. Kristen understands. she has plenty of probs to deal with lol.
Renji is so sweet to kristen. its adorable.
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Well Kristen would have to be warry considering that Tatsuki is ignorant of the situation.
This is, once again, true
Too true
Yes yes it is
Oddly enough though Renji is usually my "cannon fodder" for practical jokes
Examples:
Motivational poster about his epic fail in the Zanpakuto filler arc
Constant phallic overcompensation jokes about his "Bankai's size"
Pairing him up with Rangiku's pet bat in chapter 24 of Ryoka Alliance when the group splits up into pairs
Also, if you want to know more I'd be happy to tell you by e-mail, Aizen's "stalking" of Kristen, it wouldn't be the first time he's tried something of this calibur
This is classified information but I feel I can trust you to know
Aizen did the same thing to a certain deceased Female Kuchiki b4 said Kuchiki was married to a certain Flower Powered Captain
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Idk y, he is cool! I luff renji!
the motivational poster was funny tho lol.
what? he stalked her?
Yea u can email me lol.
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