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elixirphoenix — Curse of the Goddess
Published: 2007-10-16 19:40:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 109; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 0
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Curse of the Goddessas reported by the Ancient Guards
And you see me here
Crying without your tears
Though, if I saw you here,
I'd kill you for your tears
I made your home
Out of a heavenly bone
And I bled for you
Even fought this god's disease
Now each year it's
Me you try and end
So now I want for me revenge
The dust blows in me eyes
Telling me good-bye
But, just before I die,
I'll make you curse your side
I made your home
Out of a heavenly bone
And I bled for you
Even fought this god's disease
Now each year it's
Me you try and end
So now I want for me revenge
The sun beats down
With a damnable sound
That I wouldn't have found
When the king held the crown
I made your home
Out of a heavenly bone
And I bled for you
Even fought this god's disease
Now each year it's
Me you try and end
So now I want for me revenge
So, I know, as you stand here
Are brimming with fear
Though you at me leer
Without a peer
I made your home
Out of a heavenly bone
And I bled for you
Even fought this god's disease
Now each year it's
Me you try and end
So now I want for me revenge
Now you are dead
And the vultures are fed
But others will be lead
To try and make me end
I made your home
Out of a heavenly bone
And I bled for you
Even fought this god's disease
Now each year it's
Me you try and end
So now I want for me revenge
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Comments: 6
I love it, however Im not all that good at the whole critique thing, so I'll just say its awesome
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Thanks for the attempt
And thanks for favoriting it
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XD I am the same. One time in the middle of the night, this song came into my head with lyrics perfectly assembled...so i got out my notepad and started writing until 3 in the morning xD I had to change things around....
As for the poem, I like it. It's different to what I usually read from you and filled with vengeance/blood which I like from time to time. XD I has no 'advanced critique' I just like your writing. ^^
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As long as I'm not the only one!
XD
Vengeance! Blood!
*drools*
XD
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Very interesting. I like the re-occurring "I make your home out of heavenly bone" line. THAT was awesome.
I wish I had more advanced critique, but from what I can see, there's nothing wrong, and everything is simply awesome. VERY nice work.
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Thanks
Maybe I should write during classes more oftenXD
But we were only reviewing today.
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