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So I write
Published: 2009-03-23 01:36:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 13448; Favourites: 450; Downloads: 152
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God,I can barely remember
when we were strangers
and all I knew was your name.
And I could sit next to you,
and not feel a thing.
I could look in your eyes
and not know exactly what you were thinking.
I wish I could draw out my feelings.
But all I would get
is a mess of paper and pencil
and some scrambled up picture
of demented people
with missing heads and limbs.
Or no faces.
So I write.
Because thereβs something so methodic
about the rolling of a ballpoint pen
running over college ruled paper.
Itβs an antidrug in itself-
rehab in every letter
and safety in every punctuation.
No, not like a cut.
Not like a sharp, shiny razor
slicing a beautifully, unmarked arm.
No, nothing like that.
Nothing compared to the constant typing of words
or the forming of sentences. And thoughts.
So I write.
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Comments: 193
And we write, to send those words, or to keep them apart.
But, at least, they're out of us.
^^
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This is. Exactly why I write. Down to the final stanza.
Wonderful, relate able work. <3
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Incredible-- it speaks in that simple and common tone we all have in our heads, yet it speaks volumes.
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No problem. Keep it up.
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Oh... My... Gosh. I feel the exact same way about writing poetry! I love what you've written and how you've said it. Also, 
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The rest of the poem is very good too.
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A lovely expression of how you feel. I enjoyed reading it
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i suggested my poem [link] but no dd 
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I just read it.
I loved the feeling you portrayed in it, very nice work!
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eh im trying to get it suggested. its not too bad but this work here by emmaxrose is alot better
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this is so beautiful...and so true! I read it and it's like welcome to my world....
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At most times is hard for me to motivate or explain why I write, to myself as well as to other people. I do find it interesting to hear other people do it though, and you have given me a fine example here.
It's an inspirational piece even though I cannot directly apply it on me.
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You're welcome.
Keep up the good work!
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This is so very beautiful, I am glad you got DD'd, so many people can connect with these words I'm sure.
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Thank you.
I hope that everyone can relate to this, even the tiniest bit. (:
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I love this! It describes my own writing well; I can relate to what you're saying about why you write.
The only thing is that the end is a little inconclusive--maybe you might add another stanza about what writing is, as opposed to the last stanza, which details what it is not.
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So simple, yet beautiful. Amazing!
You deserve the Daily Deviations award.
- Kai
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You're welcome.
- Kai
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I love it
I too find much relief and rejoice in writing and it's the most perfect way to express one's self.
Pure beauty in the matter of words.
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Beautiful! You've summed up exactly how I've always felt about writing
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my pleasure~
such an accurate piece. Lawd gawd.
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I agree with =stormchylde . I think this was a good effort, but I also think that DDs are the very best of the literature community here on dA, which this isn't quite. Not to say it's bad--I like the message.
But some of the linebreaks are awkward, and good poetry is defined by the language and the breaks. This reads like a prose paragraph randomly broken up, and that's not poetry. I think if you went back and tried reading it aloud to figure out where a natural break would go, it would improve this piece a lot.
Also, you just got a DD. Be a good person and at least take a few seconds to say "thank you" to each commenter. I know I would.
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Thank you for your input.
If it were me, I wouldn't even comment and say such a thing. But hey, that's you.
I don't think my work should have even be recognized. I just write. Why? Because I do, hence the message I just tried to prove in my piece.
I can't help the fact that they picked me, but for some reason, they did. And I am honored.
This is the first time I've been recognized for something and my inbox is swarming with about 300 messages at the moment. I am so overwhelmed, I have yet to respond to the majority of them. Maybe about 10 so far.
This is why I put up a journal thanking everyone who commented.
I am not going back and fixing my work. I made that choice after I posted it.
So thanks again for the comment.
-Emma
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Okay. In hindsight some of my comment was uncalled for, like the part where I criticized you for not thanking people--I realize that you did just get it today, and that you do have a lot of messages. I understand that and I'm sorry. I hope you can forgive me.
But most of my comment was my honest opinion about your work, and I did try to be gentle with my critique as I usually am. If you choose not to edit, that is wholly your decision, and I respect that. I merely wanted to express my opinion.
Thank you, and again I'm sorry.
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I don't want to discourage you by any means, but I did want to express that, although this isn't a BAD poem, I don't think it was DD-deserving, not quite. The rhythm feels off to me, probably because this is more like prose split into stanzas than poetry in itself. The little emo cutting bit was totally off-topic and threw me off, as a reader.
But perhaps I'm just bitter because I recently recommended some REALLY good writing for a DD, some prose and some poetry by a few people, and I feel like it's a bit of a cop-out for them to get passed over for this.
Plus, I generally feel negative towards people who don't say 'thank you' or reply to every comment, especially when you've been honored with a Daily Deviation.
Okay, snarky moment over. If you're going to tell me I'm a bitch, just don't reply, I know. D: Sorry.
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Ironically, words cannot express how truly amazing this piece of writing is - maybe I just lack writing skills.
Really, though, this is a beautiful work of literature. You're definitely a very talented author.
Congratulations on the well-deserved DD!
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