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Endless-Rainfall — MC - First scene

Published: 2010-03-06 03:28:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 8231; Favourites: 183; Downloads: 89
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“Minako, wake up!”

“Minako!”

“Come on, Minako, wake up already!”

“Please! You’ll be mad at me if you don’t!”

Even though they’d been through this ordeal too many times to count by now, Kichiro still always failed to wake his lazy sister up. The blonde boy sighed, shaking her some more. Deep breath, and…

“MINAKO!”

The girl’s eyes shot open.

…Then closed again.

Kichiro whined. The two had planned this whole thing earlier, so why did she have to fall asleep in the first place? He managed to stay awake!

The plan was simple. They were going to wait until midnight, until their Father was fast asleep, and sneak out. Well, Minako was, anyway. Kichiro decided to stay behind, to keep his Father from finding out for as long as possible.
…While actually, he was just too scared to run away in the middle of the night. I mean, there are ghost Pokemon and stuff out then, right?

So yes. It was a simple plan. A pretty risky one, considering how protective their Father was. But still, they could handle it.
So why were they doing this in the first place? Well…

“MINAKO!”

Finally, she opened her eyes again. Mumbling some irritated words, she tried to focus. Kichiro leaned right in, teeth chattering as he trembled nervously.

“It’s past midnight, Minako-!”

“…Huh…What do you want…?”

Bam. Focusing fully, right there was the distressed face of her brother.

“Aaagh!” Her eyes widened as she swatted him away. Onto the floor he fell.

“Oww..”

“…Oh- Uh, sorry, haha.” She laughed as she rubbed her eyes and sat up.

“Y-You’re the one that wanted to go out at midnight! You shouldn’t have fallen asleep!” The boy cried, getting to his feet. “Maybe this isn’t such a good idea…”

Hearing this, Minako frowned. Stupid scaredy-brother. Of course he’d want to back out now.

“Kichiro, we’re doing this! There’s no way I’m giving it up now, look how far we’ve come!”

”Yeah, ten minutes late…”

“What?! Ugh, quick, pack the last of the stuff!”

Minako ran over to the window and slid it open. On the other side was a fold out ladder attached. Unlocking it, a long row of bars fell to the ground.

“H-here…” Kichiro handed over a white shoulder bag. “Okay...?”

“Okay. Thanks.” She replied, taking it and climbing out of the window and onto the ladder.

“U-Uhm, are you sure you’ll be alright?” Her brother asked.

“It’ll be fine, Kichiro. C’mon,” She poked her tongue out, “You’re the one that we should worry about. Don’t go spilling it all to Dad,”

“I-I won’t!”

“Better not.” She gave a threatening look. “’Cause I can’t get caught. This is important.”

“I know…” He replied, looking down. “…O-Oh, don’t forget this.”

He handed a letter over to her. It looked rather old and handled, but was still in good condition. She stared at it for a few moments, thoughtfully. Then she smiled.

“We’ll sort this out. I’m sure I’ll find her.”

Kichiro smiled back.

“I really hope so.”

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And yesh. So that's the first bit of Makoto Challenge.
(I kinda fail at writing, sorry. But you get the picture.)

I want to start writing it out again, but I dunno how long that will last. I'll try to, anyway. Or at least draw some scene pictures like these.
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Comments: 133

tonyle414 [2010-03-06 03:43:33 +0000 UTC]

Minako has the face.

lol

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to tonyle414 [2010-03-14 09:34:58 +0000 UTC]

'Tis an awesome face. *nods*

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tonyle414 In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 16:48:10 +0000 UTC]

Nah, it's this one.

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to tonyle414 [2010-03-16 11:21:47 +0000 UTC]

That's an even awesomer face.

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tonyle414 In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-16 21:13:38 +0000 UTC]

I know right?

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Vernos In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:38:45 +0000 UTC]

It looks so real. The online i see that looks a little odd are the stars on the arm of the pajama. But altogether, great job its really like I'm watching Pokemon itself.

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to Vernos [2010-03-14 09:34:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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Little-MissMidnight In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:38:19 +0000 UTC]

Wow, great start on the writting, you just need to put more detail with your writting and since you are writting in third person view remember to write actions more than reactions, if you were writting in first person view it would be the other way around.

Anyway i love the scene of Ruby and her brother, (wait who is older out of the two??)

Anyway great work as always Ruby.

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to Little-MissMidnight [2010-03-14 09:34:27 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the advice X3

They're both 10, so...I'm not really sure yet. I think Kichiro would be. xD

Thanks x3

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Little-MissMidnight In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 12:07:40 +0000 UTC]

so they are both twins? lol.

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to Little-MissMidnight [2010-03-16 11:24:34 +0000 UTC]

Yep xD

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NecroCC In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:36:06 +0000 UTC]

very good n___n

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to NecroCC [2010-03-14 09:33:38 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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NecroCC In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 14:36:59 +0000 UTC]

you are welcome!!

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Bellia-25 In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:35:33 +0000 UTC]

XD this is great, the lighting is great and I love the look on Miniko's face.

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to Bellia-25 [2010-03-14 09:33:30 +0000 UTC]

Thanks X3

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Bellia-25 In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 18:09:14 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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sorato-lover [2010-03-06 03:34:01 +0000 UTC]

ah this is so cool! XD
minako sure is a lazy bump >W<
btw how old is kichiro?

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to sorato-lover [2010-03-14 09:33:24 +0000 UTC]

Thanks X3
xD
10.

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sorato-lover In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 15:59:12 +0000 UTC]

oh, that means minako and kichiro are twins then?

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to sorato-lover [2010-03-16 11:23:20 +0000 UTC]

Yeah. xD

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saber360 In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:33:59 +0000 UTC]

Flagged as Spam

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to saber360 [2010-03-14 09:33:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks *w*

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Apple-Rings In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:33:41 +0000 UTC]

This looks really great ^^

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to Apple-Rings [2010-03-14 09:33:02 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou

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Apple-Rings In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 23:55:17 +0000 UTC]

You're Welcome ^^

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Warped-Dragonfly In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:31:45 +0000 UTC]

i like the light effects in this one

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to Warped-Dragonfly [2010-03-14 09:32:27 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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Warped-Dragonfly In reply to Endless-Rainfall [2010-03-14 15:20:01 +0000 UTC]

Yw :3

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IndigoSunbeam In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:31:37 +0000 UTC]

hehehe I find their expressions priceless xD

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to IndigoSunbeam [2010-03-14 09:32:23 +0000 UTC]

Thanks xD

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BigMac1212 In reply to ??? [2010-03-06 03:30:33 +0000 UTC]

I love Minako/Ruby's expression. (Yes, I usually prefer English dub names.)

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Endless-Rainfall In reply to BigMac1212 [2010-03-14 09:32:17 +0000 UTC]

Thanks
Haha you can use her English name if you want then~

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