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Published: 2015-08-23 12:44:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 2489; Favourites: 68; Downloads: 0
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i yell at the clouds between sunrise dreamstheir whispy constellations forming unresolved patterns
that hide and wink with conspiracy
"the devil is in the details"
she said,
but her voice is more whisper than sound
and I wonder if she was ever really here
i climb into bed and close the sheets behind me
to lock away the day
hiding my fears behind the substance of sleep and repetition
"identity is not who you are"
she said,
"but what you do"
and her voice is more thought than whisper
and I wonder if she was ever more than me
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Comments: 77
Ironically, I didnt think much of this one when I wrote it. It was just something that sat "unfinished" for a few months until I realized the reason I couldnt finish it was because it was done.
I am glad you liked it and that last verse was a little tough to write.
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I can dig it. I love the line "i climb into bed and close the sheets behind me". That is how we all feel at the end of a trying, pensive day such as you describe here.
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Thank you.
Once in a while I come up with a line I absolutely love. That was one.
Im glad you liked the poem and I appreciate the comment.
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Of course. Thank you for writing such a wonderful piece. Keep the awesome works coming.Β Β
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I'm so glad you got a DD for this. Congratulations on the feature.
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Thank You, my friend. Were you the one to suggest it?
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No, though I should have. And you're very welcome.
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It is not one I would have submitted. I dont consider it to be my "best" work at all.
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I agree that you've done (and are doing) better work, but whoever chooses features like this also hopes
it'll bring you to the attention of deviants who may not have otherwise known about you. In a good way.
That's what features are for. Right?
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Done I agree with. Are doing? Meh, I dont know. I hope so. Im going to be posting some new pictures soon and hopefully some new writings. I dont know.
If its not up to par, I can count on you to let me know.
True. Features can be good for recognition and perhaps thats why whoever submitted it did it.
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Bravo!!Β Congratulations onΒ a much deservedΒ DD! 
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Thank you!
I am glad you liked it. I was more than a little surprised to see it up on the DD page yesterday morning.
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I know the feeling. LOLΒ I was offline for 4 days before I knew I had one; when I came on, I did a double take, screamed "OMG I GOT A DD"!! - Made poor hubby who was sitting peacefully watching t.v. jump a mile.
Enjoy. You certainly earned it. 
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I have been a bit overwhelmed with thanking everyone. But I am almost done. I have met quite a few new deviants.
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Well take your time; and I'm sure people don't have expectations.
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Thank you so very much. It was quite a surprise.
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Thank you. I am glad you think so. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
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Sometimes the voices in your head are surprisingly helpful
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LOL
Agreed. But sometimes they are a distraction as well. Especially when they are speaking a different language!
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Yeah, that...
...usually doesn't happen. They're not supposed to be more educated than me.
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Thats what I told them but they just said I should have payed more attention in school.
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Thank you so much.
I like that you congratulate the members who are awarded DD's. Its a sweet thing to do and adds a nice personal touch to being awarded.
How long have you been doing it?
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My pleasure
I am glad you think so, this is why i do it
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It does go by fast.
I remember seeing your name "pop" up often on the DD's. Still, I was surprised when you popped up on mine, lol.
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I'm one of the few that still checks DDs on a daily basis and sometimes it makes me sad to compare the exposure they get now vs the one they got a few years back...
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I check them each day. Its part of my routine. However, like most things I fave, it has to grab my attention.
I never really had much exposure.
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Same for me, but i still check them. And since that work received a DD it really deserves more attention, it used to be a great way to get artists noticed.
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Exactly. I just wish to they would expand the categories a little. I do tend to see a lot of similar work posted all the time and it seems from the same people too.
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Some of those works are from well known artists that already have multiple DDs, and while i admire them for their art, i'm tired to see them every 6 months and i really think unnoticed artists should have priority over well known ones.
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Exactly. Its the same with the writing DD's. There are days when there is nothing literature based at all. Like today. Its kinda sad that with all the art here there isnt a larger variety of styles and artists being featured.
Sounds like a group that needs to be created.
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I think that's because the lit category isn't as popular as the other ones, in the sense that there are not as many people browsing it and also there aren't as many writers as, let's say, digital artists or photographers, therefore there are less people who suggest works from it. I think the Lit CVs are amazing and do their best in promoting this category, i've rarely seen CVs from other categories be as involved as they are. So really, i think the community has the power in this case, the more we send suggestions, the more Lit DDs we'll have
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Agreed. Plus, its more work to actually read something than it is to just "look" at something else.
I have had about 70% of my lit suggestions accepted as DD's. I havent suggested one in while but I havent been as active as I once was either.
It is hard to slog through all the lit work out there to find the gems. On the occasions that I have time to look for new favorites, it seems I go through about 10 pages of submissions for every piece I like. To find something I love, is more difficult.
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Indeed! And most people would rather just invest a couple of seconds into looking at a picture rather than taking more time to read a literature work ):
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It's so great to see something from you!Β The pretty language and soft-edged imagery are true center pieces here.
'i climb into bed and close the sheets behind me'
This is my favorite line. The wariness, the undercurrent of sadness. And the finality (of what, I am not sure) suggested by 'closing the sheets', as a opposed to something more familiar like 'pulling' is very striking.Β A wonderful job, dear.Β
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Thank you.
I used closing because it feels more final, more isolating than the familiar "pulling"- something I was trying to get across.
I have a lot of poems that feel almost done. I am not sure if its because there is actually nothing more to add and I dont see it, or if its my desire to just want a longer poem.
As always, I am glad you liked it and I enjoyed your comment.
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Oh wow... beautiful and thought-provoking! Your muse is much smarter and more introspective than mine... she just sits in the corner drooling and mocking me. Your imagery here is wonderful and the way you have used the quotes keeps them from being mere cliches.Β
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My Muse is a tease at best now- although she used to put out quite a bit.
Most of my work is introspective. Its what I understand best.
As for your Muse- its just different- you writing about Bunny is pretty damn good as far style and technique- its not just the sexy parts that keeps people reading- well, at least I dont just read for those parts.
As far as your poems? I read most of what you post and being so early in the morning when I am on here, I seldom find myself in the mood to decipher them and exam underlying meanings and such. Thus, I havent faved them. I dislike faving and running.
Thank You for the kind and thoughtful words. I am glad you liked this and appreciate the faving and comment immensely.
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Ha ha.. Yeah, muses are like succubi, get what they can out of you until your spent, then they move on.
Introspective is good, so long as you don't "over-do" it the way I do. Just makes you end up hating yourself.
Most of my poetry is emotional vomit. It's how I get through my days. It's not pretty, but it helps. Not sure there's much to "study" there or decipher. Some of them, yes, but the rest, just me rambling about lost loves, lol. No need to comment or fave everything, dear, it happens, especially in the morning! And yeah, I hate to fave and not comment, but I refuse to leave: it's good! or I liked it! Sounds so trite! Even if I suck at critique, I try to be thoughtful in my comments.
You are most welcome. You should write more, you're very good at it.
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Hmmm. Maybe we are the succubi draining our muses.
Im pretty sure I wont hate myself- I am aware of my faults and shortcomings but dont try to dwell on them so much as correct them when I realize I am in one of those moments.
If I find myself lacking in the commenting, I will generally just use my "bow" emojie. It feels a little less like the trite comments of Good job, love it, etc.
Lately I have found myself at a loss for words when trying to comment on something I enjoyed reading. Its like I just cant figure out what drew me to enjoy it. 
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Ha ha, I doubt that! I think they're like fairies, flitting here and there, staying for only a while, then they move on to someone else to feast.
I hear ya, me too. I'm just lacking in the "Why" of late.
Of course.
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Ya, maybe. Muse Fairies are as good an explanation as any other.
Of course, it could be that we just dont know how they work and are going along for the ride.
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True... true... Maybe we should leave out some milk and biscuits.
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What? Biscuits??? Where are the cookies?? My muse fairies LOVE cookies.
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Ha ha... "biscuits" is the English, my bad... I always use Walkers Short Bread anyway! lol
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Short bread cookies are one of my faves. Just the right balance of sweet and crunch. Makes me want some for breakfast.
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