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Published: 2011-01-09 04:31:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 833; Favourites: 23; Downloads: 6
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Description For Sale: Her Body. Price: Any.
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Comments: 25

ruff1298 [2013-02-19 22:22:11 +0000 UTC]

Interesting. I like the briefness of it all and yet the extremely powerful impact it has. Amazing how a few words can paint a grim picture of a poor little girl out in the streets of a city that couldn't care less.

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Puppy-eater [2011-08-19 14:27:13 +0000 UTC]

I really love this deviation I kept on thinking about it a long time after I read it, you have been featured here:[link]

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Puppy-eater [2011-08-04 13:26:17 +0000 UTC]

Wow- So short, but so much impact.
I felt like I was punched in the gut.

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EvilpixieA In reply to Puppy-eater [2011-08-05 02:46:11 +0000 UTC]

Thrilled you felt that way, it's one of my favourites from my gallery too.

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knucks838 [2011-02-25 02:54:39 +0000 UTC]

Pretty much summed that up.

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EvilpixieA In reply to knucks838 [2011-02-25 03:08:29 +0000 UTC]

thanks I tried

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MissMurderFish [2011-02-25 01:08:49 +0000 UTC]

I think this could turn into a longer story. It's a good hook~

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EvilpixieA In reply to MissMurderFish [2011-02-25 01:15:50 +0000 UTC]

thank you! I think you may be right on that one. Lol, we'll have to wait and see.

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MissMurderFish In reply to EvilpixieA [2011-02-25 01:27:13 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! I suppose so.

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3wyl [2011-02-24 19:28:34 +0000 UTC]

It's not as original a concept as it can be, perhaps, but I like the way you've portrayed it and how you've conveyed the desperation of the situation through the way she costs anything that the person can afford... it could suggest something else going on underneath it all, but.. yeah.

I think it's made more cold through the use of "Body", as if she was just an object and not living or breathing...

Great stuff.

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EvilpixieA In reply to 3wyl [2011-02-24 21:20:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I really like this one even though I sometimes think I structured it perhaps a little too simply. That said I am still rather proud of it.
Super glad you liked it and super happy to read such a well thought out response, thank you again!

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IsabelInLalaLand [2011-02-23 23:58:08 +0000 UTC]

Very sad. I really like it, good job

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EvilpixieA In reply to IsabelInLalaLand [2011-02-24 00:00:13 +0000 UTC]

thanks, exactly the emotion I was trying to get across. I'm thrilled you like it.

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speechlesswriter [2011-01-11 00:37:38 +0000 UTC]

I like it. A lot!

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EvilpixieA In reply to speechlesswriter [2011-01-11 03:05:14 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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SqueakyCaylen [2011-01-09 22:42:11 +0000 UTC]

This is very well put and from the six word stories I've read so far, one of the best, it tells not just of a story, but of a world many of us choose to forget and a struggle most of us ignore, very well presented, awesome job!

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EvilpixieA In reply to SqueakyCaylen [2011-01-10 00:16:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! It's wonderful to know that both you completely understood and got all the themes I was trying to project in just six words AND liked the way I presented it!
You are awesome.

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PurpleChaos [2011-01-09 21:01:25 +0000 UTC]

very clear. I like it.

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EvilpixieA In reply to PurpleChaos [2011-01-10 00:13:17 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad you did.

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xxRikuheartsxx12 [2011-01-09 18:28:40 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of rape...or slaves.....I'm going to try a six word storie now though..I wonder what I will produce.One thing now though.
I.Absolutly.Completly.Adore.This.Poem.

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EvilpixieA In reply to xxRikuheartsxx12 [2011-01-10 00:12:46 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so much! I think that is probably one of the nicest comments I have ever received on my work!

Good luck on your six word story! I'm sure it will be wonderful to max degree!

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elfenfeuer33 [2011-01-09 09:54:32 +0000 UTC]

it is quite shocking to say the least!!
but it would be/sound more coherent with the colon-idea if you'd write "price: any."

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EvilpixieA In reply to elfenfeuer33 [2011-01-09 15:43:06 +0000 UTC]

You know, I think you may be right. I will change that around, thanks for the advice!

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elfenfeuer33 In reply to EvilpixieA [2011-01-09 15:58:15 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome! *fat grin*

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revois [2011-01-09 04:32:42 +0000 UTC]

Very detatched feeling. Interesting.

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