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FallingFantasy — I take you...
Published: 2005-01-19 11:54:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 417; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 44
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I'm dreaming day and nightMy thoughts take control
and I
get lost
always
drifting
In contemplation.
Can we change what is decided for us?
Always an outsider looking in.
Distance
and time
fade
away
Dwelling on dark sin.
I am living, yet I don't feel alive-
Untill I take a soul
Feeding my dark ways.
Pulses unite
and I
loose
myself
again.
Toying with another, I help myself-
Just enough to quench my thirst,
From ones pretty since their birth.
I choose well.
Seeking
them
and
wanting
them.
And now i've found you.
Anything you'd like to do?
Here, have a glass yourself-
After all you've provided the drink,
And with it your heart will rise then sink.
Soul
soaring
heart
beating
I almost drain you then walk away-
Having been replenished for the day.
Comments: 49
Probably. For me I find that it comes in waves, one week I shall be franticly writing and the next it will be like im scrabbling agaist a wall. Its a capricious thing.
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Indeed, I dispise it.
Wanting to create but not being able to, a horrable prison of the mind.
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yeah, im hoping its just a phase though
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Intresting you should say that, I am suffering for the same condition at the moment. Over the past few weeks I have been trying to get a story that has been lurking in my head down on paper, and for the last few days its been like scratching at stone. A terrable affliction. :S
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yeah its kinda sucky :/
n i really hate it when i have cool ideas but i cant express them :/
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Well, I have to say I like this. Its a rather unusual style but that is prehaps an advantage by itself.
I enjoy the way it flows, and the images it creates in the mind.
Very good work, so keep it up!
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oh thankies. have writers block atm though, wrote that one quite a while ago.
but thank you
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Not bad at all! I like it. It's like you have a kind of dominance over something/someone.
And nice twirly word drawing.
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^_^ thank you, it was kinda based on the vampire trilogy by Anne Rice, so yeah, dominance 
thank you
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i love the way it was written you have great talent!!
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i really can't tell you amazing i find this poem...i the structure is very effect and complments the content if you get me kind of makes it seem to flow more...well done its a great piece.
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^^ thank you, yeah i do get you, i tried to make it flow. thanks
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Sorry, i just put a pic with it. found it on the net and thought it was cool
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that is SOO kool. even if you were elliterate, you could still enjoy it cos of dat shape! and if you can read, the actual content rules!
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can i just agree with all the others?
i really hate writing comments.
AHHHH!!!!!!!
the scatteredness of it gives it another dimension.
i dont know.
i am too tired to write a comment.
sorry
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yes i do.
i love it.
it's excellent.
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well, if some one was to say experimentaion was the mother of all fuck ups... id slap them silly.
this new style of writing you have adopeted is very very good. the scatered 'thoughts' are really well chosen and work really really well, giving the whole peice an amazing look, fell and pace.
there is so much more great things about this poem i would like to comment on but im running out of time... but yeh, it is an amazing peice.
+fav for me
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Thank you so much for the 
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no worries...
its better you dont try to do the same thing again anyway... the chances of it being shite would be high, as you said, this is a one off.
mind you, that dont mean that your other poems arnt great too.
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wow thats so amazing baby
ok....i thinks its something to do with a vampire like when the person sleeps they wake as a vampire then goes on the prowl!
just my thoughts lol
love ya 
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meh ^^ lol of course tis about a vampire 
I love you too
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^^ thanks byeee byeee guna go now
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me too actually.. haha bye byes!
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F**K when you write this lil Sis? tis amazing!
Rhymes just enough, and it even looks cool
WOW!!!
/you should join
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^^ yay you really like? I wrote it last night. cool tis the best reaction i've ever got out of you. thanks for the fav ^^ lots of 
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its uber awesomeness, yayness
^_^ mew
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meh ^^ uberly happy now
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teehee good good
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