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Description The Avatar Saga—Azula's Redemption
Chapter 1: Of Schoolboys and Sunflowers
By Flamehead23a

Disclaimer: I don't own Avatar, nor any characters affiliated with the show. I do own the White Phoenix, however. Please don't use this story as your own, nor post it other places without my approval. Reviews welcome, critiques scrutinized, and flames absorbed and redirected with twice the power. Please, enjoy!

O, great Muses, I humbly beseech thee.
As a mere suppliant I appear.
Beautiful of speech,
Glorious, Amorous,
Chanting, Blossoming,
and Celestial.
As an unworthy mortal, thy powers
I invoke.
For Epics,
Histories, Romances,
Tragedies, Comedies,
and Astronomy.
Thy skills I require,
and with the Shining One's
blessings, I will steal them
for a time.
                                           Here begins Episode 1
               Ευερυ στορυ μυστ ἁυε α βεγιννινγ. Τἱς στορυ ις νο εξκεπτιον...
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'Oh man, oh man, I'm late. Sifu Honna is gonna roast me.

Kuzane raced up the steps to his school, his heart pounding. The boy had been late twice this week already, and while the Avatar's victory over the Fire Lord five years ago had relaxed the atmosphere in the Fire Nation, children were still expected to appear to school on time. He raced through the halls, his soft leather shoes thumping against the polished wood of the school floor. He knew he was going to need an explanation for his teacher, and quickly crafted a tale that sounded more valid than "I overslept."

Turning a corner, he crashed headlong into the music class on their way to the school courtyard to practice. Stammering apologies and extracting himself from a Tsungi horn and its player, Kuzane narrowly avoided the music teacher and sped down the hallway. He smiled as he ran, remembering when music was one of the most boring subjects at school. Until the Avatar came, that is. He cut through the cafeteria kitchen, pinching breakfast as he went, amid shouts and swinging ladles from the cooks.

"One of these days, Kuzane!" the head chef yelled red in the face, "one of these days, you're going to be just a step too slow!"

Kuzane laughed as he slid on the polished wood between the chef's legs. He popped up behind him, a fire cake in each hand. "And one of these days you're finally going to lose that belly of yours."

The chef paused. "You really think so?"

Kuzane's face split into a smile, and he crammed one of the fire cakes into his mouth. "Sure, as soon as you manage to catch me, big guy."

The chef's yells mingled with the thuds of his feet against the wood floor.

Chest heaving, Kuzane finally cracked the door of his classroom open, hoping to sneak in during the morning recitation of the Fire Nation oath and escape his teacher's notice.

"Kuzane, so glad you could join us. And only one hour late today. I'm thrilled you managed to spare us the time." Sifu Honna's raspy voice made Kuzane flinch. His grizzled teacher had rearranged the entire room to face the door, so everyone in the class could see Kuzane's late arrival. Honna had probably did this to teach him a lesson, but for "Kuzane the performer" as his friends called him, he simply saw it as an opportunity to turn the tables on his teacher.

"Deepest apologies, Sifu Honna." Kuzane said, bowing low.  "I really was going to be on time today, but on my way to school I was attacked by, um, a pack of tigerdillos."

"…Tigerdillos."

"Yeah, I know, it was crazy," Kuzane smiled, picking up steam. "They got me just outside the market square. I tried to use the bending Sifu Wass is teaching us, but they just kept coming. I got one, then another," Kuzane jumped up onto a student's desk, recreating the adventure. "But for every one I torched, two more appeared."

Sure that his audience had eyes only for him, Kuzane ran over the desks, hopping from row to row, bounding and flipping over his classmates.  "One of them hit me just as I was jumping from the coal factory roof to the Fire Flakes stand. I hit the ground with an oomf!" Kuzane tumbled to the ground, right in front of his teacher's desk. The class was cheering, and Honna had just the beginnings of a smile in his eyes, despite his best attempts at severity. "I thought I was gonna die. But then—"

"Going to die," Honna corrected, "and then what?"

"And then," Kuzane puffed himself up, deciding his audience was ready for the grand finale, "the White Phoenix saved me."

The class erupted in laughter. Almost imperceptibly Kuzane deflated, looking at his classmates in confusion. He turned to Honna, whose smile had grown. Just as Kuzane was about to question why the class was full of uproarious laughter rather than silenced in awe, his teacher spoke.

"Did he now? I find that most interesting, as the current events I read to the class before your late arrival included a message from the Fire Lord. About how the Senken Seven have once again assembled at the Capital which, if you had been here for the geography test yesterday, would know is on the mainland of our nation, far removed from us."

Kuzane looked at the ground, the picture of a shamed and apologetic student. To the other students in the room, it was an obvious act. Kuzane never apologized for anything, and probably didn't expect to get away with such a huge story anyway.

"Now please, pupil Kuzane, recite for the class the date of the formation, function, as well as the names and titles of everyone in the Senken."

"The Senken Seven, formally founded after the defeat of Ozai the Disgraced, are seven of the strongest and most influential people alive after the war, excepting of course the Order of the White Lotus. They represent all the peoples of the world, and work to maintain balance between world powers." Kuzane kept his head bowed as he recited.

"As for the members… well, there's of course Avatar Aang of the Southern Air Temple, the Last Airbender, and co-head of the Council of Seven. Toph Bei Fong of Gaoling, Earth Master and representative of the Earth Kingdom. Katara of the Southern Water Tribe, Waterbending Master and representative of the Water Tribes, both North and South. Sword Master Sokka of the Southern Water Tribe and High Warrior Suki of Kyoshi Island, Warrior Couple and representatives of the Konketsu Island colonies.  Zuko, Firebending Master, Fire Lord, and the other Co-Head of the Council. And finally, there is Matthias Musagetes, the White Phoenix, Advisor to Lord, King, Chief, and Avatar alike."

"Well now, you do seem to listen in class once in a while," Honna said, "so, why don't you follow that wonderful display of acrobatic and oratory skill by taking your seat and getting out your report on the White Phoenix."

Kuzane paled. He had assumed the report wasn't going to be due until tomorrow. He thought quickly, making his way not to his seat, but back to the center of the semicircle the desks formed around the front door.

"Actually, Sifu, I was hoping I could orally give my report… You see, I sprained my wrist helping my poor blind mother in the shop and—"

"Oh, save it Kuzane. I knew you weren't going to have your report done." Honna cut him off, hoping to circumvent another lengthy story from the inventive youngster. "I tell you what—if I let you tell part of the Phoenix's story, will you promise to be on time for the rest of the month?  No matter how many wrist sprains or Tigerdillos try to keep you from getting here before noon?"

"Yes sir, I promise."

"Then go ahead. But just a part, mind you. I know all about you out-talking the Deputy Magistrate after your incident with those badgerfrogs."

Laughter filled the room at the elderly teacher's remark, and he marveled at how far the country had come since Lord Zuko's coronation. There were still hiccups to be sure, but the nation was slowly and surely leaving the ridged single-mindedness he secretly hated enforcing during the last Fire Lord's rule.  

Kuzane eagerly approached the front of the room, feeling immediately at home. The little liar was a born entertainer, and had dreams one day playing music for the Fire Lord himself, or maybe joining the Ember Island Players. He saw any chance to tell a story or sing a song as a chance to be the center of attention, and loved every minute of it. He reached the center of the semicircle, his stage. He looked over his fellow students, his audience. He even snuck a glance over at Sifu Honna, his critic. Then Kuzane, son of Kuzen and grandson of Kuzo, the Avatar's childhood friend; took a deep breath, readied himself, and began to speak.


"The White Phoenix, Matthias Musagetes, first appeared five and a half years ago to help the Avatar bring balance to the world. Not much is known about his life before that, aside from what he has told the royal scribes and messengers.  He doesn't use bending, yet many have seen him perform feats only someone at the rank of Master is capable of. He claims no homeland and no ties to any of the nations so he is, along with the Avatar, seen as a completely neutral mediator.  He's known all throughout the world as a hero, and is one of the most courageous people alive."
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"Come here, you coward!" Toph Bei Fong shouted after the retreating figure. Squaring her stance, she sent a fist-sized rock hurtling at the man's back.  "I swear, Bird-Boy—I've never seen a bigger baby in my life!"

The rock sped closer and closer, until just a few inches separated it from the figure's head. Toph's breath caught, sensing that he still hadn't had moved. But at the last moment something at his feet seemed to catch his eye and he ducked to examine it, the rock sailing harmlessly over his head. Toph let out her breath. Of course he wouldn't get hit. As long as she's known him, he'd never taken a hit unless it was to keep it from someone else.

"Bandit, you've never seen anything. Period." The figure turned round, making his way towards the blind earthbender. "And just because I don't want to attend the policy maker's banquet doesn't make me a coward. If anything it proves I don't want to die a slow, boring death."

"Are they really that bad?"

"One-on-one, I'm sure they're great guys. But together it's nothing but trade agreements and border re-distribution. I don't know how Aang and Zuko stand it."  

"Well Sparky's grown up around politics. And Twinkle Toes is the Avatar, so it's his duty to be bored to tears for the betterment of the world—whether he likes it or not."  Toph walked towards the figure, meeting him at the middle of the garden she had found him napping in. The years had been good to her, each passing season maturing her into the picture of natural beauty. She never wore makeup, and still kept her hair in much the same style she did during the war—long bangs reaching past her milky eyes. But five years changes a cute young girl into a much more womanly young adult.

"What's that?" she asked, her steps showing her that her friend had something in his hand.

"Just a flower that caught my eye. Here, you should stick it in your hair. That way the delegates can tell you're a girl."

Toph took the flower with a grin, recognizing the jab for what it was—the same kind of banter that kept them going during some of the worst fights of her life. "Whatever. You know I can sense them all staring at my chest during these things. They never seem to remember that just because I'm blind doesn't mean I can't tell where they're looking."

The young man stooped lower to help place the flower behind her ear, his hands radiating the internal heat he always seemed to carry within himself. Toph almost leaned her head into those hands, but she kept her feet firmly planted.

"Well you can't blame them," he said, "it's not their fault you insist on wearing dude's clothes that aren't cut for women. Seriously, it was fine when you were twelve and flat, but now with those boulders of yours—"

"All right, that's officially more than you need to say, pal." Toph pushed him away playfully.  "And Sunshine's gonna kill you for taking this, by the way. This is her private garden."

"Don't worry about it, I've got Mai covered. I brought a bunch of snow lilies from the north with me, so she can't complain if I pinch one sunflower."

"Well it's your butt on the line, Mat. Don't blame me when she sticks it full of needles."

They both laughed, the image of a stone-faced Mai coming at him with her trade-mark stilettos all too clear. The young man swung his arm over Toph's shoulder and led her out of the garden, towards the banquet hall. "Come on—let's get this over with so we can all finally start our vacation."

Toph allowed him to steer her, but not without bending the hole in the ground away. She didn't feel like getting on the lady of the house's bad side so early into their holiday. "Lead the way, oh mighty and powerful Phoenix."

Their laughter floated away in the late spring air.

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Comments: 86

flamehead23a In reply to ??? [2010-12-08 20:15:02 +0000 UTC]

I think one of my other readers said it best, "Kuzane is like a young naruto, except craftier." He's constantly striving for attention, and while he isn't particularly good at anything, he does have a pretty sharp wit.

Mat's Power scale varies based on the fiction he's in. The best way to equate his powers is thus--he's the doctor who of fiction. He's got lotsa knowledge about the way things are supposed to go, and one or two aces up his sleeve, but throw him off balance or negate his powers and he's a lame duck.

If you wanna go straight into an Aang vs Mat contest, I'd give it to Aang every time. Power-wise, it's no contest. The only way Mat could maybe win would be to get beneath Aang's skin with some choice words, hoping he'd get angry and make some serious mistakes.

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VioletVespertine In reply to flamehead23a [2010-12-08 22:41:29 +0000 UTC]

Naruto is one anime character I know nothing about.

Now I'm more curious about Mat. Time to read chapter 3.

Is there another Doctor Who fan amongst us?

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flamehead23a In reply to VioletVespertine [2010-12-09 00:43:20 +0000 UTC]

I've always had a tertiary knowledge of the series, but I'm currently working my way though the modern seasons (finally.)

just started season 3, and I love it.

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VioletVespertine In reply to flamehead23a [2010-12-09 01:05:12 +0000 UTC]

Yes, I adore the modern Doctor Who. I can't get into the old stuff, though.

Watch out for 'Blink'.....great episode.

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flamehead23a In reply to VioletVespertine [2010-12-09 01:47:26 +0000 UTC]

the next one has the doctor and his new companion going to help Shakespeare. I am excite.

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VioletVespertine In reply to flamehead23a [2010-12-09 02:02:35 +0000 UTC]

Ah, yes. I remember that one. Do you like Martha so far?

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flamehead23a In reply to VioletVespertine [2010-12-09 02:12:02 +0000 UTC]

well she's only been in one episode, but yeah. She's got all the makings of a good companion--more so than Donna at least.

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VioletVespertine In reply to flamehead23a [2010-12-09 02:45:30 +0000 UTC]

I love Donna.... she's awesome.
Martha I'm sort of neutral about. Rose I have a love/hate thing for. Their goodbye at the end of season 2 almost killed me. (I'm such a sap).

I adore the newest companion though, Amy Pond. And the latest doctor is brilliant. I didn't think anyone could please me after David Tennant, but Mat Smith is wonderful.

K, I'll stop gushing now.

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flamehead23a In reply to VioletVespertine [2010-12-09 03:09:40 +0000 UTC]

Donna's definitely got some fire in her, and I like that.

But I've got to be shallow here and admit I like something nice to look at in my television shows now and again. and Martha's definitely easy on the eyes, if you know what I mean.

gah, that goodbye at the end was crazy. that whole finale was awesome, but that goodbye more than anything. wow.

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VioletVespertine In reply to flamehead23a [2010-12-10 02:03:59 +0000 UTC]

Personally, I think Rose is butt ugly. See, I can be shallow too.

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flamehead23a In reply to VioletVespertine [2010-12-10 17:57:39 +0000 UTC]

heh. they defintely cleaned her up some as season 2 progressed...slimmed down and changed the make-up a bit.

I like how the 'love interests' in Dr. Who are much more real-life than Hollywood actresses. one of the pros of working out of BBC I suppose.

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VioletVespertine In reply to flamehead23a [2010-12-10 19:18:43 +0000 UTC]

That's what I find so refreshing about British televison. Take Coronation Street, for instance. The woman with no chin has been a star for decades.

And I love him to death but Christopher Eccleston isn't exactly pin up material.

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flamehead23a In reply to VioletVespertine [2010-12-10 21:57:21 +0000 UTC]

hehe, I imagine so.

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itland-9-13 [2010-09-16 19:07:19 +0000 UTC]

Well I just got to say that both my brother, my sister and me are kind of hooked here.

Thanks a lot, like we didn't spend enough time on the internet as it is

Anyways, thank you for a great fanfic If I was to say anything, it would be that you tend
to be very.. idk, describing.. in your way of describing intimate(?)/personal stuff, y'know? But I guess that's just me being concervative (who's ever heard of a nineteen-year old being concervative?).. I know the mainstream's not like me.

Thank you, and good luck to go! hope to see more soon

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flamehead23a In reply to itland-9-13 [2010-09-16 22:14:55 +0000 UTC]

well I'm glad you like the story so far! hopefully you and your siblings will continue to enjoy it.

and as for the nitpick...I'm not entirely sure what you mean. could you quote me an example or something?

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itland-9-13 In reply to flamehead23a [2010-09-17 20:14:26 +0000 UTC]

Well let's just say that I'm not the world's biggest fan of fluff.

..since you wanted us readers to tell you what came to our minds.
Once again, this is just my personal taste, not a flaw in your work.

Keep it up

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flamehead23a In reply to itland-9-13 [2010-09-17 21:17:57 +0000 UTC]

ah okay. Personally, I'm not that big on overly fluffy stuff either. are you just getting a fluffy feel in general, or are there specific parts that you've got in mind?

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itland-9-13 In reply to flamehead23a [2010-09-18 23:05:31 +0000 UTC]

nah, it's nothing special, really. I've seen it worse, believe me

I just mentioned because you asked for opinions, but I can't put my finger on anything. Perhaps I was in a wrong mood. Don't worry, it does'nt ruin your texts at all

..May I just add that I really think you've captured the personalities well? And I very much like the way you've portrayed Azula, in special. Great work!

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flamehead23a In reply to itland-9-13 [2010-09-20 03:04:13 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! But Azula isn't even mentioned in the first chapter...how far ahead have you read?

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itland-9-13 In reply to flamehead23a [2010-09-20 08:12:38 +0000 UTC]

Oh I've read them all a long time ago, but I didn't get an account before early this summer, and at that time, I was busy with something else.

Both me and my siblings have read everything you've put out on TAS, and we really liked it
Sorry for not letting you know sooner.. I'll try to leave more feedback in the future though.

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flamehead23a In reply to itland-9-13 [2010-09-20 14:11:23 +0000 UTC]

feedback would be great--I'm always trying to improve. I'm chipping away at the next Act...hopefully I'll get it out soon.

well I'm happy you and yours enjoy the story. Always great to hear of more people getting a kick out of something you work on. ^^

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myah5000 [2010-09-12 16:16:58 +0000 UTC]

I do love how you segued from the classroom to our heroes: nice and smooth, with a little laugh thrown in. And that little clown HAD to have some connection to Aang, didn't he?

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flamehead23a In reply to myah5000 [2010-09-12 20:56:59 +0000 UTC]

why yes, yes he did. ^^ Had to give you some reason to care about him, didn't I?

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myah5000 In reply to flamehead23a [2010-09-13 10:25:38 +0000 UTC]

Pfft. Cared about the little scallywag from his quick words with the guy in the cafeteria

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flamehead23a In reply to myah5000 [2010-09-13 12:56:06 +0000 UTC]

that poor chef, his body-image is forever doomed to be skewed due to some hooligan's taunting. ;__;

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myah5000 In reply to flamehead23a [2010-09-13 20:58:31 +0000 UTC]

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flamehead23a In reply to myah5000 [2010-09-13 22:01:17 +0000 UTC]

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SpaceShipEarth [2010-08-16 18:17:56 +0000 UTC]

Nice story I am hooked

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flamehead23a In reply to SpaceShipEarth [2010-08-16 18:18:48 +0000 UTC]

haha, thanks! I'll admit, the first two or three chapters are the hardest to get through, but after that...both the writing and the story improve dramatically. XD

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SpaceShipEarth In reply to flamehead23a [2010-08-16 18:20:01 +0000 UTC]

Then I can't wait to read farther in

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flamehead23a In reply to SpaceShipEarth [2010-08-16 18:25:57 +0000 UTC]

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SpaceShipEarth In reply to flamehead23a [2010-08-16 18:27:12 +0000 UTC]

I manly can to dA to read Literature not look at Art

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flamehead23a In reply to SpaceShipEarth [2010-08-16 18:30:49 +0000 UTC]

well hopefully you'll like what I have in store--I've got a lot of both. the writing's done by me, friends and fans do the art. XD

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SpaceShipEarth In reply to flamehead23a [2010-08-16 18:31:45 +0000 UTC]

I like how that sounds

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flamehead23a In reply to SpaceShipEarth [2010-08-16 18:34:00 +0000 UTC]

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SpaceShipEarth In reply to flamehead23a [2010-08-16 18:36:08 +0000 UTC]

^^

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Aemm300 [2009-12-27 23:04:44 +0000 UTC]

I like it so far. Toph seems to be growing up. *goes on to read the next chapter*

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flamehead23a In reply to Aemm300 [2009-12-28 03:06:38 +0000 UTC]

hehe, well this IS five years after the finale, so I'd imagine all the characters are a little more mature now.

Thanks for reading, and I look forward to reading your next thought.

(Thanks for the fave too. )

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Aemm300 In reply to flamehead23a [2009-12-28 18:16:14 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I would hope so!

You're very welcome, and I look forward to reading!

You deserve it.

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flamehead23a In reply to Aemm300 [2009-12-29 00:01:45 +0000 UTC]

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amanda2324 [2009-12-05 03:00:42 +0000 UTC]

I certainlty wasn't disappointed to say the least! Definately worth the time I used to read it. Very graceful in the literature, and the storyline is progressing at a very nice, steady rate - so idle minds can even follow it. XD

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flamehead23a In reply to amanda2324 [2009-12-05 04:15:21 +0000 UTC]

haha awesome! I'm so glad you like it. Honestly, these first three chapters are in my opinion the worst, so if you can get though them, you should notice the writing, characterization, and overall story improving dramatically.

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amanda2324 In reply to flamehead23a [2009-12-05 20:15:59 +0000 UTC]

Okay, I'll be sure to do that.

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1-Ace [2009-09-19 01:18:50 +0000 UTC]

really well-written ^^
it interested me right away, and has a sort of a hint of the show in its style.
great job!

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flamehead23a In reply to 1-Ace [2009-09-19 04:08:00 +0000 UTC]

thanks! I really appreciate the comment-- if you decide to keep reading, be sure to let me know what you do or don't like!

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1-Ace In reply to flamehead23a [2009-09-21 20:21:49 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome!
i will ^^!

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flamehead23a In reply to 1-Ace [2009-09-21 20:27:51 +0000 UTC]

hehe, thanks.

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1-Ace In reply to flamehead23a [2009-10-07 00:30:02 +0000 UTC]

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