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Published: 2011-10-27 09:46:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 106; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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Description Why have you left me?
Alone with myself,
Weeping lonely tears
As you find someone new,

Cast me aside
Like a broken toy,
Putting your love and care
Into another person,
Leaving me behind
In my lonely world,

You were the light
Which brightened my life,
Which let me see
How wonderful
The world truly is,

But you took that away,
Drawing it from my heart,
Bringing forth tears
That will not be shed
Until you are truly gone.

I hear only the echoes of my cries
As I wish you would come back,
Reaching the clouds
But no further,

Noone hears my cries,
For help or love,
Leaving me lost,
As they live their life,
Caring for their loved ones
Who care for them back,

I cared for you
I treated you with respect,
But that doesn't matter,
You have left me alone,
To comfort myself,

As a silent tear falls,
I know you are truly gone.
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Comments: 15

Zolazooo [2011-10-27 23:16:19 +0000 UTC]

Free verse is usually stronger and more expressive than rhyming. I like to think that it's because it widens the parameters of creativity. Maybe it's because I just find rhyming hard.
Great poems, Flut. Expressive, yet slightly sad. /headbitts

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Flutter1994 In reply to Zolazooo [2011-10-29 00:11:50 +0000 UTC]

True, with free verse there is no worrying about rhyme just to let your feelings free ^^
Thank you~

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killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 09:52:08 +0000 UTC]

So saaad! But wonderfully written. I like both of your poetic writing styles, personally.

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Flutter1994 In reply to killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 09:58:37 +0000 UTC]

And the best part?
I can tell you what each of my poems are about.

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killerqueen40 In reply to Flutter1994 [2011-10-27 10:00:07 +0000 UTC]

So tell me! They're all really good, and I wanna know! Please?

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Flutter1994 In reply to killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 10:03:34 +0000 UTC]

You name one, I'll tell you ^^

That icon is so cute 8'D

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killerqueen40 In reply to Flutter1994 [2011-10-27 10:06:03 +0000 UTC]

All of them!!

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Flutter1994 In reply to killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 10:45:47 +0000 UTC]

Okay,

I'm afraid: As you know this one was about going to work and everyone shouting at me because I wasn't up to the task. Bear in mind I only just started, but that isn't an excuse good enough for them.

Fallen tears: This was about school. I did one of my art assignments through the break and didn't clean up properly. Ms Bell called me out of class because I was one of the people in the room at lunch and shouted at me. She threatened to throw out all artworks with blue on them because of that. I nearly cried in front of her.

Truly gone: This is about dad how he favours Jon more than me. It isn't selfish saying "I am more important," it is him blaming me for things, yelling at me for "hurting" him when it is the other way around. I felt as though he had just cast me aside as though I was nothing. He was the one who made me realise the world is better than it seems and he was also the one to take that vision away.

Hidden pain: I was feeling useless, mum was angry with me and I was angry with me and I knew that no one apart from me should realise that I am upset. I wrote it and then forced myself to not cry anymore while I did things outside of my room. This poem is more about my self incompetence than anyone else. I consider showing pain to be weak. I waited until everyone was in bed before crying again.

Confinement: Once again, dwelling upon how useless I am and staring out into the sky, the stars so far away, yet so free. I feel trapped by my own words and feelings which keep me bound.

Oblivion: Another time when dad made me upset by blaming me for wrong things, getting angry, thinking I was lying etc. You notice how the ones about mum are angry, sort of, but the ones about dad are painful? Odd.

I think that's it, if you want to know about another one, just ask ^_~

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killerqueen40 In reply to Flutter1994 [2011-10-27 10:49:18 +0000 UTC]

I'm kidnapping you away from your parents and Ms. Bell. No more hurting Mame-chan, you meanies!!

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Flutter1994 In reply to killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 10:50:50 +0000 UTC]

I wonder how you will manage to kidnap me away from myself.
I hurt myself the most ^_~

Ms Bell has left anyway

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killerqueen40 In reply to Flutter1994 [2011-10-27 10:55:38 +0000 UTC]

We'll figure something out, somehow.
Good. Mean people shouldn't be teachers!

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Flutter1994 In reply to killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 10:57:39 +0000 UTC]

I wrote an apology note to her, but I never delivered it.
I had it with me for some time but never gave it to her out of fear that she would think that I'm being stupid.

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killerqueen40 In reply to Flutter1994 [2011-10-27 12:13:15 +0000 UTC]

Why should you? You made a mistake. You're human. "To err is human." Is this not true?
You're not stupid, so it wouldn't matter even if she thought you were.

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Flutter1994 In reply to killerqueen40 [2011-10-27 12:18:09 +0000 UTC]

It is true, yet some people expect way too much.

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killerqueen40 In reply to Flutter1994 [2011-10-27 12:31:05 +0000 UTC]

That's because they're too selfish, I think. "I don't care about you, but you should care about me, because I'm me and the world owes me something." Idiots. me--> <--speaker

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