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Flutterdashy β€” All I Needed was Rain - Ch. 2
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Description The sun rose on the beautiful eastern sky of Equestria. Fluttershy's eyes opened gently as the light of the new day shone through her window. She yawned and rubbed her eyes. As Fluttershy got out of bed, Angel had to move positions to not be further disturbed by her awakening. Fluttershy unconsciously headed out of her room's door as she had done every day. She walked into the bathroom and started to brush her mane with her eyes only partly open. Once her hair was sufficient she headed out the bathroom door and was going down the stairs before she had realized she was not in her own home. She was still living at Rainbow Dash's house. She looked around nervously. She hadn't waken up anywhere but her own cottage in an extremely long time. She retreated into a defensive stance until she saw one of her bird cages hanging from the ceiling and remembered the wonderful thing that Rainbow Dash had done for her. Fluttershy decided that she had to repay the kindness that she had been given. Fluttershy walked into the kitchen with high spirits. After making some nice apple cinnamon oatmeal for Rainbow Dash she was ready to go out. Fluttershy had planned to spend the day helping all the little animals who were chased out of their homes. She wrote a note for Rainbow Dash and left it next to the oatmeal and flew out of the door and back to the ground.


Rainbow Dash was spread across her bed messily with the cloud blanket half on the bed and half on the floor. She sat up, her hair extremely messy. Rainbow Dash threw the blanket off of her and onto a random spot on the floor as she headed out her the door of her room. She stopped and smelled the air. Was someone cooking? Oh right, she had forgotten about Fluttershy. She smiled knowing that she wouldn't have to make her own breakfast this morning. She trotted downstairs and into the kitchen, "hey Fluttershy whatcha mak--," Rainbow Dash looked around. Where was Fluttershy? Rainbow Dash sat down and saw the oatmeal on the table with the note. Rainbow Picked up the note and read it.

Dear Rainbow Dash,
I really hope you enjoy your oatmeal that I made for you. If you were wondering, it is apple cinnamon. I have gone to spend time with all the little animals that have become homeless from the big, nasty fire. If you need me, I will be at the entrance to PonyVille that is near my own home.
Love, Fluttershy.

Rainbow Dash stared at the 'Love, Fluttershy' part for a moment then shook her head and stuffed her face into the oatmeal. It was cold. "AH! Fluttershy! When did you make this, at the break of dawn!?" She sighed and started to eat it anyway. It was much better than anything she'd make herself anyway. A loud knock was heard on the door. Rainbow's face popped out of the oatmeal bowl with bits of oats covering her face. She went to answer the door. A large male pegasus was standing at her door with a red fire pony hat on,

"Uhm, does miss Rainbow Dash live here?" Rainbow Dash smiled.

"That would be none other than me." She smirked as she pointed to herself. The fire pony chuckled softly. Rainbow Dash looked confused, she turned her head and looked into a mirror that was hung by the door and saw the oatmeal all over her face with her bedhead still full force. Her eyes got large, she quickly straightened her hair up with her hoof and wiped the oatmeal off her face. She looked back at the fire pony and restated, "I am Rainbow Dash." The fire pony nodded and got straight to business, "are you the pony that did the sonic rainboom at the Cloudsdale best young flyers competition?"

"what's it to you? Looking for an autograph?" The fire pony was not amused and had a straight face on. "No, we need your help, since you are able to do the sonic rainboom, you must be able to fly fast enough to gather enough clouds to make it rain over the forest fire. The nearest cloud system is many miles away. You do not necessarily have to fly fast enough to make a sonic rainboom though." The fire pony tapped his chin with his hoof and looked up as if he was thinking. Rainbow Dash sighed, and then looked up with a confident look on her face.

"Of course I'll go get your clouds, as the fastest flyer in Equestria I should help fellow ponies in need." The fire pony rolled his eyes and gave Rainbow Dash a large harness that is used to catch a thunderstorm of clouds at once. Rainbow Dash chuckled nervously, "a-are you sure you are going to need that many clouds?" Judging from the size of the net that was attached and folded up behind the harness, Rainbow Dash didn't think that she could carry all of those clouds. It appeared as if the fire ponies really needed the help. The fire pony nodded,

"Yes, we need a full fledge storm. The forest is taking heavy damage. we have almost contained the fire but we are running out of water from the drought. If you don't hurry, the fire will reach your friend's cottage and it will burn. After that, all of Ponyville." At first Rainbow Dash gulped, but then became confident.

"I'll get your clouds!" She put on the harness, saluted to the fire pony. The fire pony saluted back.

"Thank you Rainbow Dash, we don't have any spare poinies so you are our only hope. The fire pegasus will be waiting above the fire. Bring the clouds there once you have retrieved them." Rainbow dashed off towards the ocean. As she was flying she became nervous, the words the the fire pony rushing through her thoughts. After all the entire town was resting on her shoulders.


After about an hour of Rainbow Dash flying non-stop, she had remembered what Twilight Sparkle had said during her and Applejack's race, to pace herself. Rainbow Dash needed the energy to pull the large cloud which was sure to be heavy. She had finally found a large thunderstorm that was heading in the opposite direction of Ponyville. She quickly started gathering the clouds into the harness by spinning around the cloud and letting the net that was connected to the back of the harness deploy. The net was getting progressively heavier and she was getting progressively slower. Rainbow Dash bit her lip as her muscles grew tight from the weight that she was carrying. After several rotations she had gathered enough clouds to put out the fire. The large net that had been attached to the harness was completely full and a large thundercloud was coming out the sides. She pulled it in the direction of Ponyville, which was a considerable distance away from where she had been able to collect these clouds. All the activity she was doing was taking its toll on her. The clouds moved slowly at only a few miles per hour. she would never make it in time. Images of Fluttershy flashed into her head, Fluttershy laughing, smiling, being nervous then finally, Fluttershy crying. Rainbow Dash gritted her teeth and pulled harder. The clouds that were following her were slowly picking up speed. Faster and faster until she had reached a good speed, it wasn't good enough. Rainbow Dash's body fought and fought to pull the clouds. Images of the fire burning down Fluttershy's cottage with Fluttershy sitting in front of it appeared in her head. Fluttershy looked at Rainbow Dash through her vision and lipped the words, "why Rainbow Dash, why?" Rainbow Dash could never let that happen, she could never let poor Fluttershy down. She picked up even more speed. At last an image of Fluttershy's smile from the night before lit a spark in Rainbow Dash's heart as she flew through small clouds that were in her way an an ever accelerating pace, a cone formed around Rainbow Dash.

Boom.

A rainbow explosion erupted around Rainbow Dash as she flew towards Ponyville with the power of the sonic rainboom behind her. Rainbow Dash didn't look back, she had no time to be excited about her accomplishing yet another sonic rainboom, she had word to do. Rainbow Dash had now done the fabled sonic rainboom three times now. Once, to win a contest and earn her cutie mark. Second, to save a friend's life. Third, to see Fluttershy's smiling face.


It only took mere minutes to reach the Everfree forest. The fire ponies rushed out and took the clouds from her, they hurried away to the fire without looking back. As the rainbow that was trailing Rainbow Dash faded, so did Rainbow Dash's vision. The trip had taken a physical toll on Rainbow Dash and her body pushed itself way past its limits but she had made it in time. She could now let go and feel secure in the fact that she had saved Fluttershy from tears. The image of Fluttershy smiling in front of her cottage appeared in Rainbow Dash's mind. The Fluttershy lipped out the words, "thank you Rainbow Dash, you are the greatest, I lo-." The vision broke as Rainbow Dash fell to the forest floor right over Zecora's hut. Rainbow Dash burst through the roof of the hut and fell into a cabinet of potions that Zecora had kept in stock. "My oh my, what is this here? This pony has given me great fear! She has been affected by a potion curse. A potion cure she does thirst. It also appears she is greatly harmed. By a kind pony she surely has been charmed!" Zecora rushed out of her door to get some supplies to help Rainbow Dash.



Fluttershy was caring for a few animals on the outskirts of town when she saw it, the sonic rainboom's shockwave blasting over Ponyville. Fluttershy eyes got wide, even though this was the third time she had seen it, it was the most beautiful thing she had ever seen. Wait, what could Rainbow Dash be doing that caused the sonic rainboom? The only other times she had done it wa--. "Oh my gosh did you see that Fluttershy!?" Pinkie Pie jumped from out of the bushes, Fluttershy squeaked in terror. "I was just following you to work on my ninja skills when boom! And kapow! Sonic rainboom! I wonder what Rainbow Dash could be doing? I wonder if she is in danger!" Pinkie Pie stopped talking and gasped, "oh no we gotta help her!" Pinkie rushed off in the opposite direction. Fluttershy stared at Pinkie Pie as she bounced off quickly. She hadn't gotten a word out, what a crazy pony. However crazy Pinkie Pie was, she was also right. What was she going to do? Fluttershy frantically looked around for the trail of rainbow. She found a bright rainbow trailing in front of a large thundercloud. "Rainbow Dash!" Fluttershy stated amazed that Rainbow Dash had such power to carry such a thing. The Rainbow faded over the Everfree forest and a small blue dot was easily seen falling. Fluttershy gasped and ran towards the forest. The same fire pony that was guarding near her house was standing in Fluttershy's way. "Miss, I cannot allow you to go through here right now, the fires are still going and it is very dangerous." Fluttershy bit her lip and looked around, trying to think of a way to get past the large pony. She looked at the pony and realized that he was an earth pony.

"I-I'm sorry m-my friend is in danger and I have to go!" Fluttershy took off and flew over the fire pony's head.

"Hey!" The fire pony yelled at Fluttershy as he started to chase her on the ground. "Get back here I can't allow you to go through!" A pegasus walked up to the fire pony and they started to talk to each other. The talk was inaudible to Fluttershy, she stopped knowing that she could not out fly anypony. Fluttershy was probably the slowest flyer in Equestria. The fire pegasus looked up at Fluttershy and back at the other earth fire pony. The earth nodded and waved at Fluttershy, "it is okay you can go through I have reports that we have gotten the rain on the fire that we desperately needed. Once you find her you can even go home." The fire pony started to walk in the direction of the fire. Fluttershy smiled knowing that she wasn't in any trouble and she could go help Rainbow Dash without any conflict. 'First things first,' Fluttershy thought to herself. She flew home to her cottage and picked up basic first aid supplies such as bandages and alcohol. After getting those items and putting them into her saddlebag, she headed out of her door. There was no time to appreciate her home, which would have to be saved another time. Fluttershy ran head first into the Everfree forest. She kept running until after a few minutes of running she realized exactly what she was doing. Fluttershy's knees caved in and she started to shake. The image of the sonic rainboom flashed into her eyes, then the image of the cyan dot falling into the center of the forest. She stopped and realized that Rainbow Dash had fallen near where Zecora lived. Fluttershy knew the location of Zecora's hut from above because she had to consult the zebra many times in the past; sometimes she delivered special herbs that Fluttershy grew in her garden. Fluttershy flew up into the air and flew straight to Zecora's hut. The hole in the roof was visible from the sky. Fluttershy quickly flew down and knocked on Zecora's door. There was no answer. Fluttershy bit her lip, she know that time was precious. She kicked in the door. Rainbow Dash was laying on the floor in a pool of blue and green potions that were mixing with her blood that was also scattered all over the floor and walls. Fluttershy cringed and tried not to panic or cry. Time was of the essence. Two large fire pegasus landed by the front door of the hut. Zecora appeared from between a few bushes of the forest, she had gotten a few supplies. "Fluttershy! You must hurry or the rainbow one will die! Go to a doctor right away, tell her somepony is certainly in dismay. I can help her stay alive. Not for long death I can deprive." Zecora made bandages from a few plants and quickly wrapped it around Rainbow Dash. FluttershyΒ took off and headed toward Ponyville with Rainbow as fast as her wings would carry her. The fire pegasus followed her, one of them carrying the injured Rainbow Dash on his back. Fluttershy's eyes narrowed in determination and focus. The fire pegasus started to out pass her and didn't look back. Fluttershy was just too slow to keep up, even at her fastest. Flashes of Rainbow Dash laughing appeared in her head. She clenched her teeth and started to beat her wings harder. The fire pegasus were slowly appearing to come closer. It wasn't long before Fluttershy passed them. They looked at each other in shock. Fluttershy landed infront of the clinic and rushed inside before the fire pegasus could land. She got nurse Redheart to come out side. A gurny was provided. The fire pegasus after landing quickly straped Rainbow Dash to the gurny and the doctor pony rushed her into the ER.
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Comments: 8

Treebohr [2011-10-07 00:51:25 +0000 UTC]

Though there are some errors in here, most of them aren't too bad. The main thing is that the fifth paragraph is in there twice.

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Flutterdashy In reply to Treebohr [2011-10-08 01:07:47 +0000 UTC]

HOW DOES THAT EVEN HAPPEN
lol I fixed it....

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Technowolf3000 [2011-09-22 03:51:46 +0000 UTC]

P.S. Loved the chapter ;D

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Technowolf3000 [2011-09-22 03:50:39 +0000 UTC]

..........errors i saw:

Pinkie Pie stopped talking and gasped "oh no we gotta help her!"
should be:
Pinkie Pie stopped talking and gasped, "oh no, we gotta help her!"

The fire pony yelled at Fluttershy as he started to chase her "get back here I can't allow you to go through!"
should be:
The fire pony yelled at Fluttershy as he started to chase her. "Get back here! I can't allow you to go through!"

"Oh my gosh did you see that Fluttershy!?" Pinkie Pie jumped from out of the bushes, Fluttershy squeaked in terror
should be:
"Oh my gosh, did you see that, Fluttershy!?" Pinkie Pie jumped from out of the bushes. Fluttershy squeaked in terror.

She trotted downstairs and into the kitchen, "hey Fluttershy whatcha mak-," Rainbow Dash looked around, where was Fluttershy?
should be:
She trotted downstairs and into the kitchen. "Hey, Fluttershy, What'cha mak--," Rainbow Dash looked around. Where was Fluttershy?

Dear Rainbow Dash,
I really hope you enjoy your oatmeal that I made for you. In case you were wondering it is apple cinnamon. I have gone to spend time with all the little animals that have become homeless from the big nasty fire. If you need me I will be at the entrance to Ponyville that is near my own home.
Love, Fluttershy
should be:
Dear Rainbow Dash,
I really hope you enjoy your oatmeal that I made for you. In case you were wondering, it was apple cinnamon. I have gone to spend time with all the little animals that have become homeless from the big, nasty fire. If you need me, I will be at the entrance to PonyVille that is near my own home.
Love, Fluttershy.
(Im beginning to feel like a grammar nazi, omgz x.x)



A large male pegasus was standing at her door with a red fire pony hat on, "uhm, does miss Rainbow Dash live here." Rainbow Dash smiled,
"that would be none other than me." She smirked as she pointed to herself. The fire pony laughed quietly. Rainbow Dash looked confused, she looked into a mirror that was hung by the door and saw the oatmeal all over her face and her bedhead still full force. Her eyes got large and she quickly straightened her hair up with her hoof and wiped the oatmeal off her face. She looked back at the fire pony and restated "I am Rainbow Dash." The fire pony nodded and got straight to business. "Are you the pony that did the sonic rainboom at the Cloudsdale best young flyers competition?" Rainbow Dash smiled,
should be:
A large male pegasus was standing at her door with a red fire pony hat on. "Uhm, does Miss Rainbow Dash live here?" He asked. Rainbow Dash smiled, "that would be none other than me." She smirked and pointed to herself. The fire pony laughed quietly. Rainbow Dash, confused, looked into a mirror that was hung by the door and saw the oatmeal on her face and her bed-head still full force. Her eyes widened. She quickly straightened her hair up with her hoof and wiped the oatmeal off her face. She looked back and the fire pony and restated, "I am Rainbow Dash." The fire pony nodded and got straight to business.
"Are you the pony that did the Sonic Rainboom at the Cloudsdale Best Young Flyers Competition?"
Rainbow Dash Smiled.

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theres prolly alot more, but i feel like too much of a grammar nazi nao x.X but, in the furture, you should use less commas. and to make it look more professional, maybe a few Bold, Italic or Underlining. So instead of saying "Are you the pony that did the Sonic Rainboom at the Cloudsdale Best Young Flyers Competition?" you could say, "Are you the pony that did the Sonic Rainboom at the Cloudsdale Best Young Flyers Competition?" or, "Are you the pony that did the Sonic Rainboom at the Cloudsdale Best Young Flyers Competition?"

Ah, by the way, just wanted to notify you, some of the changes i made may make the story sound different, those are optional, you dont need to change them like that, but its recommended that you do

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DivineSpiritual [2011-09-20 23:04:06 +0000 UTC]

I;m looking forward to more of this story. :3 besides the grammer and somewhat capitalization, this is a good story. you are doing a good job keeping the ponies in character.

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Flutterdashy In reply to DivineSpiritual [2011-09-20 23:07:06 +0000 UTC]

Could you possible point out some things so I can fix them? I'd appreciate it very much!

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DuhHerro [2011-09-19 21:32:19 +0000 UTC]

Same. I want mooooar :3

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PatRoison [2011-09-19 10:01:01 +0000 UTC]

This chapter was really good. I like how Rainbow stayed looking at the 'Love, Fluttershy' and the allusion of what the vision of Fluttershy was saying to her. It was very sweet and I look forward to chapter 3.

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