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Commissioned by EternalShiva
Scene 1: The Family Pond
"Twice Shy" Origin: Chapter 10
Happy 4th of July everyone!
I know I said I'd post this last night, but I got caught up in family stuff for the fourth and it kinda got too late to work on it by the time I was done.
At last, the final page of this scene is finished. This scene is one of two manga-style scenes I'll be doing for EternalShiva's Five Scenes commission. The other three scenes will be full color pictures depicting the scene.
Now, I know a lot of you are confused about what's going on in these four pages, which means you didn't read EternalShiva's Twice Shy fanfiction *glares* So, since this is the last page, I'll go ahead and post the excerpt of the scene as it was given to me by EternalShiva. This should clear up any confusion, or make it worse XD One or the other.
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Hinata put her chin on her knees as she stared into the family garden pond, her bare feet squishing in the grass. She had her right hand dangling over the edge, playing with the ripples of water the fish produced as they swam by. She didn’t know how to take her father’s role in Naruto’s current state. When Neji had told her earlier this afternoon that her father had been dismissed as clan leader she had been shocked but once her cousin had gone into the details as to why, she shut down everything inside her. Her mind had gone blank and a strange void had formed inside her abdomen.
She felt nothing inside her, she was drained, betrayed. Neji had unwillingly left her here, saying he would return later to join her for the festival since he was now regent and had to sort out the mess caused by the council of elders. She had said nothing and sat down, feeling numb.
The fish in the pond suddenly scampered as a shadow appeared behind her. She stiffened and felt an unwanted lump in her throat form, recognizing the footsteps she had always feared, the footsteps that had always intimidated her in the past. Right now they disgusted her.
“Hinata I...” her father began to speak, wanting her forgiveness.
“Go away.” She whispered, her throat tight. She wasn’t ready to talk to him yet. Her voice shook under the emotion and Hiashi's shoulders dropped in resignation.
“As you wish.”
It was several minutes before Hiashi heard Hinata’s mournful cry in the garden, her heavy heart on his conscience and for the first time in several years since his wife had passed away, he felt like a broken man.
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So there you have it. Directly copied and pasted from the note she sent me, which was copied and pasted from the chapter XP Now you can judge for yourself how good of a job I did at depicting this small, but emotional scene.
I'll post a link to Scene 2 at the bottom here once I have it finished XD
Enjoy!
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Naruto Concept belongs to Masashi Kishimoto
"Twice Shy" Original Storyline belongs to EternalShiva
Are belongs to Jared Sanders
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Comments: 51
FoxxBrush In reply to superbilly123 [2011-07-19 07:14:23 +0000 UTC]
yeah sorry It's just an illustration of one part of a fanfiction
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FoxxBrush In reply to Match25 [2010-01-14 19:10:48 +0000 UTC]
sorry, it's just one scene of the fanfiction XP
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FoxxBrush In reply to Wild-Fire-Blood272 [2009-08-14 03:51:22 +0000 UTC]
Sorry if it's not clear This is just a short snippet of a scene from EternalShiva's "Twice Shy" fanfiction. So, if you wanna find out what exactly happened, then I suggest you visit her account and read it
It's a really good story ^^
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Wild-Fire-Blood272 In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-08-14 14:45:45 +0000 UTC]
i know im reading it now its soooo good!
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FoxxBrush In reply to Wild-Fire-Blood272 [2009-08-15 05:14:58 +0000 UTC]
hehe glad u like ^^
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ewk1990 [2009-07-24 16:15:35 +0000 UTC]
ithought the detail of it was great. my such art but still more to come as I can't wait.
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WistfulGem [2009-07-05 09:47:21 +0000 UTC]
So it's finally done! Now I can fav em all! mwhahaha! Details fantastic!
espechially in the last panal of the birds eye view of the yard. But I think it's the emptiness that captures the emotion of this scene here.
I've fully read Twice Shy now (Well the chapters that are there) ^^ I love all the little love scenes between NaruHina
haha, I'm a total pervy girl LOL
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FoxxBrush In reply to WistfulGem [2009-07-05 16:48:17 +0000 UTC]
lol awesome ^^ Glad you liked it
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TeenCat [2009-07-05 01:35:50 +0000 UTC]
shoot O_O hinata's crying O_O...
Don't cry hinata you'll make me crya-ah awaaaaa
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Lol great job, the poor girl is worried so much!
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FoxxBrush In reply to TeenCat [2009-07-05 03:53:49 +0000 UTC]
lol I take it you've read Twice Shy and understand what's going on then? :3
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TeenCat In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-07-05 15:59:50 +0000 UTC]
Twice shy...? nope but now im going to ^^ is it gooooood?
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FoxxBrush In reply to TeenCat [2009-07-05 16:44:48 +0000 UTC]
lol yeah, you should read it XD
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TeenCat In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-07-06 02:42:10 +0000 UTC]
oh! you meant Twice Shy as in deviantart, lolll i thought you meant the novel rogfl XD... yeah ill check it out!
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TeenCat In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-07-06 02:39:59 +0000 UTC]
I checked it out, dammit, its a really good novel, and good novels are usually impossible to get for free.
Wait, you mean the 'Once Dead, Twice Shy' right? i read the discription in a site O_O man sounds interesting... won an award for romance, right??
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VixenTFox [2009-07-05 01:26:33 +0000 UTC]
Great work as always JakeNova. Again you forgot the creases under Lord Hiashi's eyes, but no matter.
This has been VCFD'd.
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FoxxBrush In reply to VixenTFox [2009-07-05 05:22:32 +0000 UTC]
*shrugs* No, it's fine. I'm sure the reference I used was just old.
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VixenTFox In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-07-05 05:30:07 +0000 UTC]
NO... I'm sorry... I won't say anything but good things about your art anymore. If I see small mistakes.. I'll keep them to myself.. since they only come out as hurtful... >_<
*needs a friend right now*
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FoxxBrush In reply to VixenTFox [2009-07-05 06:28:30 +0000 UTC]
No no no! I LOVE criticism. I know that's weird compared to most people, but without criticism it'd be a lot harder for me to get better. I mean, half the drawings I've posted recently, even though there's still some messed up proportions and stuff, they wouldn't even look that good if I hadn't had Jewel look at em first. Something as simple as a new set of eyes on a drawing can point out many errors that I never would've seen myself.
I know, I'm weird XD I like art blocks too lol
So please, don't keep them to yourself. Sure, I could've been more accurate on this recent stuff, but I didn't feel like digging through onemanga for references, and the reference I did use, regarding Hiashi, was from one of his very first substantial appearances in the manga (the part where Naruto and Neji are fighting in the exams) Plus, you watch the anime as well, so I'm sure there's some changes, such as the lines under his eyes, that I didn't even know existed. And yes, I know you told me it before, but I pretty much forgot about it/was too lazy to do anything about such a small detail.
So don't worry about critique with me, okay? I'm one of, if not THE, best person for taking critique you'll ever meet. The only thing I don't like is when people don't tell me what's wrong with a drawing, but rather simply tell me it sucks. That's not constructive at all, and that's the only thing that annoys me. So as long as you say it in a nice way, and tell me what's wrong with a picture, as well as suggest how I could go about fixing it, then I'm good I'm sorry, but I've had a long 4th of July day today, and I'm just now heading to bed. I'm too beat to get online. If you can hold on til like tomorrow, I can probably talk to you then, okay? You can also send me a note here on DA, describing what's bugging you, and I can reply to it as soon as I'm able.
Just try to get a good night's sleep, okay?
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VixenTFox In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-07-05 07:18:48 +0000 UTC]
I still think I keep my mouth shut.. if not for your sake, for Jewel's... the last thing I need is more tears. I have enough of my own. And I think the last few notes I sent you, cover everything.
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FoxxBrush In reply to VixenTFox [2009-07-05 16:49:20 +0000 UTC]
Alright, if that's what you need to do. But again, don't be afraid to say things to me. I happily accept all critique, even if I don't act upon it.
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eternalshiva In reply to FoxxBrush [2009-07-05 04:15:33 +0000 UTC]
>.> You're full of win Jake, I got my money's worth.
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FoxxBrush In reply to eternalshiva [2009-07-05 04:37:11 +0000 UTC]
lol glad to know Happy to be of service
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sigel4ever [2009-07-05 01:08:00 +0000 UTC]
very dramatic moment...
is only the scene one, i want to know the rest
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Flyerscurse [2009-07-04 23:12:47 +0000 UTC]
... I didn't understand at all... wait.. didn't I take my medicine this morning? a good one. indeed..
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eternalshiva [2009-07-04 18:50:11 +0000 UTC]
Omg so awesome :3 Good job Jake! It looks great!
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FoxxBrush In reply to eternalshiva [2009-07-04 19:59:50 +0000 UTC]
Thanks ^^ Glad you liked it
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Jollygrn04 [2009-07-04 17:44:26 +0000 UTC]
Outstanding job! As much as I hate Hinata crying, that last frame came out wonderful! Keep up the great work!
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Fixer444 [2009-07-04 17:38:20 +0000 UTC]
ehat's going on here? I know I have to read it but I just don't have the mood
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melaniastrom In reply to Fixer444 [2009-07-08 04:42:45 +0000 UTC]
aser ua pegunta I can do I let translate to Spanish and put it on my page?
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FoxxBrush In reply to Fixer444 [2009-07-04 17:41:42 +0000 UTC]
lol well I posted an excerpt of the scene for people just like you XD
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