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Published: 2006-09-24 20:55:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 7416; Favourites: 174; Downloads: 67
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U n s a v e m eSteal away the softness from my eyes.
I want your fingerprints on my thighs,
The rainbows you leave there
When I taste your blood on my lips.
Cruel savior-
Make me beg.
Starve me-
Feed me the emptiness I crave,
Please- kiss me with your teeth.
Fill my head with your throat-sounds,
Primal
To chase away the void.
I cannot stand your gentle hands.
Unstained,
They stroke so tenderly,
And though I ache for you
To score with pointed fingertips
The smooth skin of my hips,
You do not.
Bruise away my bitter deeds
Like I long of you.
Tarnish me
Sweet prince,
Rid me of damned innocence,
Flay me with my longing
So hollow-
My raspy yes is barbed within my throat.
Red welts on ivory skin,
Black oceans of bliss
Your name, carved deep enough to scar.
These things I want-
For you to make me nothing,
Free me from myself,
Blind me so that I may see you,
Choke me so that I may breathe.
U n s a v e m e.
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Comments: 148
I agree with you completely. 
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Yes. I was talking about the self-mutilative cliche used in the piece.
Anyways, when I've got time I'll shoot over to your gallery and check it out.
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oooh. i love it.
definitely strikes a chord with me. hehe.
good job! wonderfully written and your words just seem to represent emotions and flow so easily.
and congrats on the popular section! definitely deserving.
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thank you, darling. 
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So beautiful! I love every word of it <3
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this was pretty well done
very passionate
gets the message well across.
It had a touch of sweet love and pain and kinkiness
nice
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that is such an amazing poem! very well written, and rather inspiring i must say!
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Please- kiss me with your teeth.
I like this line, it's original and perfectly appropriate. The rest is fitting it just isn't as unique.
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one of the best pieces I've read in a while. I love the imagery, its dark, but not cliche. The whole piece sings of conflict. Great work!! If you get a moment, come check out some of the pieces in my gallery...
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I certainly will. Thanks for the kind words!
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Thanks, and anytime!
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i really like this the imagery in this piece is so amazing that as each word i read a picture comes into my mind and i see everything that u write about
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wow! I really loved this. You do explain feelings very well even I realized that I didn't know how passionate they were.
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Yay!! 
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I really like how this creates great images for me. Excellent piece!
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wow I'm at a loss of words for once...
nice work!
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great work as always, very vivid too!! Love how its all backwards and twisted too, who needs to be saved when they can be unsaved lol!
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WOW its really beautiful and um awsome!
Its great. Keep it up! -rooting for j00-
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OMG...that was so beautiful. ;_;
That poem is the kind of poem I try so hard to compose, but never seem to get right.
Your words really touched me...so sad, yet so beautiful.
Bittersweet, it expresses feelings like many poems fail to do.
I commend you; this work is truly amazing.
I look forward to more of your deviations.
~Moon Child
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Wow, thanks for the praise!
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"Blind me so that I may see you,
Choke me so that I may breathe"
The ending is brillant, such a beautiful peice of work.
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WOW 
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I love it.
It's perfectly written out and definitely tells a great story... I just love it!! My favorites are:
"Rid me of damned innocence"
and
"Blind me so that I may see you,
Choke me so that I may breathe"
Pure and entrancing.
-EmeraldTheWolf
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Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!
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Wonderful piece! Very passionate ^_^
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Wow, that was very beautiful and very well written. I loved it.
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you really make me feel the unsaving!!
great so great!!
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Wow. Just, wow. That so explains basically, 10000% of what i feel every day. GOod to know someone's on the same page. Your pacing and emotion are freaking amzing; I can't even explain how good this is.
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wow... the imagery and emotion is so thick in this piece you can cut it with a knife. but seriously, it's absolutely sensual and beautiful and utterly human
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Thank you, that means a lot to me.
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Very nice. I love the words you used and the imagery it made.
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Wow, amazing! Im so impressed! O.O
I feel like writing something myself 
All in all, excelent work!!
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Thank you so much.
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No problem at all^-^
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Woah. This is a real great piece! The flow and word choice is so beautiful, much better than anything I could ever do. 
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