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Published: 2014-01-17 15:53:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 650; Favourites: 28; Downloads: 2
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All the apples havin a good old time.
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Hello, perhaps needed a little more practice the bodies and proportions. Big Macintosh is not too well provided, could have seen some pictures and make a sketch.
The way in which looks AppleJack is beautiful, her proportions are better calculated, could perhaps have added more clearly instead of darkness in your hair.
The Granny Smith needs a slightly larger neck and some wrinkles, hair perhaps could do better.
AppleBloom has an expression very tender, it would be better idea to have used a pink darker instead of black for the background of his mouth, his nose is slightly larger than it should be. And the tie of his head looks a bit separate, perhaps a little more together would be better.
And finally, Pinkie Pie, has an expression an uncomfortable, do not you think? I think that one of his eyes looks a little bigger that the other, repeat it from the bottom of the mouth with foot with Bloom, the Pinkie hair looks a bit weird, but I like a lot.
The cart also has been somewhat rare, as it seems that It does not it with the position of Big Macintosh, as if it were not in fact linked with cart
Continue practicing!
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I'm not very sure of that throughout this well written since I don't speak English, I did my best.
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First, let me commend you on your colors, I think you did a very good job with the colors for this sort of sunny environment, and they match the characters well (though I don't know all their names).
I honestly do think this could benefit from some linework, because it will help define their forms more, and will also bring out their expressions. That being said, their expressions need work too, mostly in the eyebrows. If they're truly happy, then their eyebrows should be bowed upwards instead of caving down, otherwise it makes them sort of look like they're in pain, or not truly enjoying themselves.
I also agree with NeverMore-X. You do need a softer brush for their manes. Never use the brushes that look like a bunch of strings. Treat hair as one block, and maybe using a chalk brush, gently brush in the lighter and darker areas. If you do put strands in their hair, try blurring them out using a light gaussian blur.
As for the shadows, their placement seems fine, they are very uniform for the most part. I think if you define those shadows a little more in certain places (any shadow being cast by something blocking the light), then that will add greater sense of depth and form. The same goes with their lightest areas. Also, don't be afraid of contrast in the ponies! Some of those shadows are pretty light! I think Applejack's shadows are just right, so aim for something in similar contrast. As for the shiny parts of their eyes, that should also have a hard edge. except in Applejack's case, because it just lightly shows up, and that works great with her. (You really did a great job with her overall, actually)
Also, the piece which connects the pink Pony to the cart should be attached to the edge of the cart, in front of the wheel. So it would connect a bit higher in this picture. And be careful about her leg going through the harness collar. My last comment is to get rid of that wheel, because it is not following the same direction as the cart. The cart is facing us, yet the wheel is turned perpendicular to the cart, so you can either remove it entirely, or just show us a little bit of it's curved edge, and that will do just fine
I know that seems like a bit much, but really, the fixes are quite simple, and shouldn't take too much time. Your composition and coloring is very nice, as well as your storytelling! You just need some perspective corrections, and making things a little more defined with the shadows, and less defined in their hair.
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How adorable! Oh but ponies are always like that.
I like the effort you gave on here, the colors all popping out and I like the shine on that metal. ^^ I suppose the areas I will be pointing out are either mistakes or simply your style, so please be aware that I understand some things that I may call as flaws may just be intentionally made by you.
I like the expressions of the orange, green and yellow one, they're cute. The pink ones look weird to me because of how the eyes brows were angled. I like the smile most of the pink one at the back though. Some areas appear messy, like the wheel and that green object/symbol by the pink one in front.
Stroking the hair on their manes need improvement, perhaps a softer brush will give a better effect. ^^ The clouds in the background look very nice. The grass could use a stroking with a different brush as well. The spots of light over their eyes are too much for me. The choice of colors are well done.
Over all, it's a very fun scene and I absolutely like it!
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Thanks, I'll work on that.
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I really like the texture in the hair; very fluffy.
In regards to the shading, I would recommend that you put hard edged shadows mixed in with the soft. It make objects look more 3-dimensional, it's the difference between form shadows and cast shadows. On a somewhat random note, the penmanship on your initials are really nice!
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Thanks.
P.S. Kululu is my favorite.
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