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The Origin of Meteors
Published: 2007-11-09 07:01:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 7826; Favourites: 140; Downloads: 227
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I was dreaming....
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That's okay. I had no idea what it was at first too.
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Happy DD!!
Pretty cool image. black nylon, yep!
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Woo hoo! I is happys, I is! 
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the shamans of Peru believe the night sky is a tent overhead, and the stars that shine are holes. This has caught my imagination and will not let go.
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wow I love different cultures
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You should read before you comment.
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The universe is that, indeed... (epic)
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you are very welcome!
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congratulations on the daily deviation.
very clever imagery.
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Thank you! 
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ha ha! i am a child with fingerpaint. you flatterer, you.
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Methinks there is more to your talent then that!
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you are quite kind for saying so, dear.
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Slightly creepy, and random. Which is always good. Creepyness and Randomness go well together.
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I like it, the first part strikes me as how meteors take up an allocated amount of space amongst space, in which case you've described space like a medium made of black nylon - and so meteors (and other celestial bodies) rent a certain degree of black nylon (space) to allocate themselves. The second is like how celestial bodies have, throughout human history, been compared to all kinds of gods. So these meteors renting black nylon and falling from the sky (and all throughout space) are like celestial gods slipping through it (space/the black nylon) as the meteors.
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Excellent! You have summed up what I had hoped to capture with a few words very well. 
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Nice. 
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Congrats on your DD! I've loved this piece from the moment it was first suggested to *TheFavoritesProject by ~Synith and have been rooting for it ever since.
I love the subtlety of the message, the correlation between "nylon" and "slipping in" being so clever. I suppose this really isn't a haiku, format wise, but your username having the word "haiku" in it will probably make people view it as such. I just think that it is a truly awesome poem!
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Thank you for the support!!!
Just a bit of trivia - I chose the name HaikuKitty because I was going for a pun of "Hi, kool kitty." I can't resist a punny pun! *groan*
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Thank you! Love your avatar! Must put that on the fridge.
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Thank you, so should the rest of all female complicated machines on this planet.
And yer welcome xD.
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Beutiful words, I really like it
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I am glad the words made you feel...
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Beautiful! I love the use of modern words to describe night, then the mention of gods. Well done! I am quite taken with this piece.
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Thank you! i am glad that you liked it.
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Thank you!
PS - Love your user name.
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Thank you!
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Very clever. Haiku is so tricky, you are talented
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Hello Kitty!
I don't know if I am talented, but I did enjoy writing it.
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This is amazing. It is in some ways completely nonsensical but it is so amazingly powerful at the same time because of the incredible word choice and usage. This captures everything I think a haiku poem means and can possible be. I was taught once that to make a poem different from other writing it must have a ring at the end that spirals into the air and leaves the reader with an, ahh, type of feeling. I felt that with this poem. Wonderful job.
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I am so glad that you felt the "ahh" feeling. So many times, I read a poem I do not understand and yet it leaves me feeling breathless or teary eyed, and I KNOW I understand it on some level that is not in my thinking mind. I am so happy it sings to you. Thank you for getting it. Your comment means a lot to me.
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The way I read it, rather literally, the meteors rent the sky as dresses for the gods.
What did you mean to say.
BTW, Kitty, now it's been DD'ed, maybe give it the honor of being a full blown deviation
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Your meaning is very beautiful, thank you for sharing. It puts it into a whole new realm that I did not even intend, which is the beauty of the spoken and written word when used for meaning and symbolism to mark our lives.
When I wrote this, I was looking up at the sky and thinking about how some shamans see the night sky as a tent with the shine of the stars as holes in need of patching that allow the sun to sneak in. I watched a falling star and then I imagined a large knife cutting the nylon, the renting of garments being a strong image in my mind that conveyed the quickness of the instant. I am drawn back to that night when I read this again in a very forceful way. So few words, so much feeling remembered, this is why the challenge of haiku, tanka and senyru make me try.
I moved this to scraps because it was a miscat - and when I tried to put it into visual poetry today, it would not take it. I think I need to change the file to .png to get it to stick. So I will move it back when I get that done.
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That makes more sense. I thought so that rent would mean tear. Darn MSword synonym lied to me
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