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Haishuva — :WIP: Superjail Tribute HELP
Published: 2010-03-29 18:18:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 1774; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 79
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So this is what I've been working one. This is the pencil version; I will be inking and doing full color.What I want from you is:
what does it need?
Before I start inking, I want to know anything I need to add, change, what would look better?
I'm not sure how to fully complete the background.
I'm not the greatest with perspective, but I tried. Any quick tips?
Basically, I would love a critique! (I don't have a subscription so I can't formally select that option.)
Thanks in advance, I hope you like how its coming!
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Oh this is sooo superb! @ u @ I can NOT wait to see what it looks like inked!
I think my only itty bitty complaint is his one foot that is beside the Super Jail text. Its just throwin' me off, that's all. ^_^;; But otherwise, this is fabulous.~ I would love to see this opened instead of framed, gives it that wild and whimsical appeal.~
When I was drawing my Superjail piece I was having such a problem trying to find a good Superjail prison image. Wound up spending like, 10 minutes filling a paper up with random buildings and what not....only to wind up using a smidgen of what I drew.
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Thanks! I took advice from previous comments and added characters, fixed up his legs, and put more detail into the background. I think it is going to be really great. It has been a while but I definitely plan to finish it when I actually have a time to sit down and concentrate on it.
Opening up the frame sounds cool, I'll probably mess around with how that would look.
That is pretty funny about the background. I had no less than 5 different images printed off of different scenes showing off the prison buildings to get a good feel for the style. I liked your buildings a lot! In the updated version I have many more pipes and wires and such. Thanks again!
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Oooo I can't wait! 
Yeah I did like, the same thing when trying to fudge around with the background. 
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I think it's pretty fantastic as-is, actually!!... and I like the background! You don't want that to be the focus anyway, so you don't have to go overboard w/ it. 
The oooonly other tiny thing that bothers me is the curve on the Warden's left thigh. I think if you're gonna do a stylized curve like that, it should probably curve the other way b/c right now his thigh's looking a little broken. If you just reversed that curve, it'd be dandy, though... :3
I LOVE this, though, I can't wait to see it finished!!!!
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Yeah, you're right about that little building, I'll be changing that. And his leg too, I never would have caught that.
Thanks so much! and I'm glad you're excited to see it done. I am too!
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Very good perspective on this picture! Maybe the only thing I could say would be to add one more character in this picture?
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I am totally in love with how you draw the Warden.
And I think your perspective looks great, too. I'm not sure what to tell you to add or fix because I think it looks fine the way it is.
I'm sure this is going to turn out amazing.
8D
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Hehe, thanks! You draw him super-awesomely also.
Yer good at perspective, so I appreciate the thumbs up.
Btw, I still can't get over your Charlie-the-Unicorn-Superjail pic. I cracked up when I saw it, their expressions are perfect.
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Aw, I'm glad you think so.
Haha, I'm not that good at it really. You're a whole lot better at it than I am. XD
Thanks, I'm happy you still like it! 8D
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The backgrounds? I think you can always go google image Superjail and find some.
I can't wait to see this in color! It would've been nice to see some of the other guys in here...perhaps adding some symbols that could represent the other guys? XD
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Yeah, I really wanted to add Jared and the Mistress and possibly others, but I couldn't find a way that wouldn't clutter the image more. Where would I put them? The only place I can think of is riding the rainbow behind The Warden. (the rainbow is that big arching thing, what else would it be?)
But symbols, hmm. I will have to think about what they would be.
Oh oh I just thought, I could have Jared clinging to Jailbot's head! I think I will do that, but the others?...
I appreciate the reply! I want this to be awesome.
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Jared on Jailbot's head is a go! Now, I'm not sure what else to do unless you draw The Twins riding in some kinda hovercar (Like you see in the opening of The Jetsons)
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I agree with PuppyAkamaru. It looks great! Ink it up and color it up and it'll look even better!
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Thanks! I have been reading up on inking tutorials so I don't screw it up. I haven't done too much inking in the past, but it isn't too difficult.
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i don't think it needs anything else. it's cool just the way it is
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Ok, thanks. I'm just not the greatest at backgrounds so I'm not sure how I will enclose the picture itself. I also want to create a better illusion of movement; as you can see I barely attempted some speedlines on Jailbot's head, but I'm a scaredy-pants to ruin it so I don't know what to do. :\
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haha well then, cnt really help ya wih tht
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