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Published: 2003-08-11 09:49:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 308; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 15
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Today was the day superman shot himselfHe got tired of our societys stupidity
Thats when it all fell apart
Thats when it all flushed down
Noone there to save us
Noone there to hear our call
Thats when i relized
Everystep i take
Latley ive been slipping
It took my whole life
but now i see
Society wasnt ment to be
The day after the president shot himself
He couldnt bare the weight of this nation
thats when the land turned to dust
thats when everyone went nuts
noone there to save us
noone there to hear our call.....
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Comments: 11
that is sooo awesome. i love it!! well done ill have to check out your other stuff
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heh, thanks...its not that ..good..but yeah..you can check out my other stuff if you like...its all crap as well
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i dont know somtimes people watch so many that they only check a few devinations in their in box cause there lazy like me or they just dont want to submit an take the time to express there opinion i think it happens to all of us *shrug* i usually check my favorits and sometimes just random people
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POETIC LICENSE... If you want noone to be one word or three words, well, it's your piece so do as you please. i make them up sometimes. it's just how it goes. i love themessage this poem gives, it reminds me of my own thinking. your opening line and the line starting the third verse are awesome. personally i like your use of the word 'nuts' rather then something hightech and fancy. i don't see this piece as being fancy. streight and to the point. i love it.
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"no one" is two words. 
keep writing, you're doing great.
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heh, yeah i know noone is two words..just in my notebook i always write it as noone, and transer it that way....i really seriously wasnt going for a message with this...i just wrote it...not thinking or anything....
But thanks for the comment, your my first...thanks again
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