sugabear [2003-10-19 00:14:42 +0000 UTC]

Like this one too

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xoxnightlingxox [2003-09-25 04:36:18 +0000 UTC]

I like this poem...gives a jolted-stream-of-consciousness feeling...when you're thinking and it's not actually phrases instead just words that come fast making sense or not...

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perfectisboring [2003-08-20 17:57:54 +0000 UTC]

Very nice ^^ But it's kinda hard to pick out the separate thoughts. I could really see these as song lyrics. You know Static X's Cold? If you took out the official lyrics and put your poem in place of them, it'd be better than the real song. *thumbs up* Hehe

Though the poem is short, you always have a knack for creating very vivid imagery.

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missmorbidminded [2003-08-20 16:59:39 +0000 UTC]

i like it but maybe you could put it in another form...just my suggestion- you dont have to listen to me.

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