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Published: 2003-08-20 03:48:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 114; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Was it wrong when you found me depressedI woke up today, with a tear in my eye
I liked to take back , my life
start over, begin anew
Was it fair, when i found you crying in the street light
unmasked all your fright
the cold wind
The stinging rain
times have changed
on and on, I leave my stain
on and on, newspapers write in vain
When you saw me walking in the rain
Was it fair, when you fell into the drain
slipped away
the cold wind
the stinging rain
the times have changed
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yeah...thanks for the comment, ill work harder
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this poem has a good feeling to it. it's got a nice beat, but I think rhyming gets in your way. You don't need to rhyme, and I think becasue of the limited bumber of words you could use, you limited possibilities to make this more incredable.
I like the idea of the passing time, though. very cool.
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i like it! i dont think you need to rewrite it, but its your poem not mine.
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