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"After weeks of searching, of trying to find out just what went wrong, I stood on that hill and witnessed the true cause of all this desolation and destruction.He'd returned. And he'd not been merciful.
We always thought he was just a blip on the radar. A foe we barely even saw, let alone had to deal with. Nightmare Moon and Discord posed a serious, real threat; this guy threatened a thousand-year lost kingdom with snarls and growls. A few days there, a few days of work with Cadence and Shiny, and he was gone with nary a word from the guy's mouth.
Sombra wasn't a threat.
So we thought.
Apparently, a fragment of his horn flew away as the Crystal Heart did its magic. A fragment which linked his evil, dark soul to this world from the world beyond, from the hell he was thrust into. Tartarus, Hell, whatever you want to call it. Whatever it was, it made him bitter.
And stronger.
He came back. Swift as Luna's night itself, the world was consumed in hellfire and disease, famine and hatred. No creature was safe, pony or otherwise. His wrath spread, infected, festered, and killed.
I'd somehow survived. I don't really remember much about that time, or even how long ago it was. I just remember a fight, one that left me without an eye and without my friends. Without my family. Without Shining Armor. He took everything from me, down to the memory of the moment they all died.
I'm going to find out what happened. I'm going to find out, and I'm going to kill him. Before...before all this, killing was never something I would do. I couldn't. It wasn't within me. I had too much to lose, too much to live for. My soul shone too brightly to ever hate anyone or anything enough to even consider taking life.
But that was before he took Shiny and my friends from me. I have nothing left. My body is a shell, a hollow husk of who I used to be.
I'm so sorry, Shining Armor. AJ, Rainbow, Rarity, Fluttershy, Pinkie...I'm sorry. This isn't who I wanted to become.
I guess...I'm not Twilight Sparkle anymore. Not in the ethereal sense.
But for you...for all of you, I'll hold on to that last bit of myself, long enough...long enough to avenge you.
Sombra, you will die. I will kill you. And I will not make it quick. You will not die well.
You will suffer, as you've made me."
Spiritual sequel to [link] and [link] , now with really sketchy color!
This song [link] is getting a LOT of mileage for inspiration. Should I stop with the post-apocalyptic Twilight? D: Sorry!
Also, would this be inappropriate to submit to Fallout Equestria group on here? I think so, but I just wanna make sure...
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I always thought it was too easy win.... hello Ponyclypse.
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This is awesome... I guess the fascination with post-apocalyptic Equestria stems from the desire to see just how solid those beloved characters' virtues, convictions, resolve, courage and sense of self really are when put to the ultimate test. Giving these beloved heroes the opportuniy to break and utterly fail just makes them so much greater.
See, you just inspired me to some pony-philosophy. Great work!
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Hah, that's what I've always loved about stories like FO:E and the like. Β They test the resolve and virtues of the main character to well beyond their limits, and force the character to choose the better of two or more morally grey outcomes. Β They also usually break the main character, so we get to see a kind of redemption story, as well, where the character becomes stronger than the post-apocalyptic setting they're thrust into. Β
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This is not going to end well for any pony and it's worse than any villain especially morgana in tlm 2
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'Metal Gear Pony: Solid Twilight'Β Β ....Done! (Not sure if someone else has made this reference already or not, but I'm too lazy to search.)
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Metal GEeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeear. Β D:<
LIQUID!
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So this is Twilight after an epic pony war. I thought it might just be next Tuesday morning.
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That's some serious bed-head for next Tuesday. She needs some beauty sleep, or maybe a spa trip! Don't know what to do about that eye, though...
But, yah, this is her after a pony war. Yay sad and depressing themes!
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That's awesome excellent pic great back story I love the idea of Sombra's power being connected to Tartarus.
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Oh come on! This is, like, the second piece of art I've found that almost perfectly mirrors what I'm planning to do in my fan fiction! DX GRAGLESMACKAPLEX!
You won't mind if I go ahead with this basic idea, will you?
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That...was a very creative sound you just made!
Hey, your story, your right to write it. 
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Well, this wouldn't really be the focus of the story. The Crusaders is set 200 years into the future, with a new cast of heroes (except a vampire Sweetie Belle) fighting villains. One villain would be revealed as a gone-bad Twilight, driven over the edge fighting a Sombra who had basically had your idea done to him.
And oh gosh I hope none of my readers find this comment.
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Time to go spoil it for your readers! MUAHAHAHAHA.
(Kidding)
But, that's an...interesting story, methinks. XD Certainly original! But, Twily as a bad guy? >: Aww.
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Well, a well-intentioned extremist who runs a totalitarian nation. Does everything for "the greater good", know what I mean?
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"Some of the worst things imaginable have been done with the best intentions." Or somethin' like that.
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Something like that, yeah.
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Why is Sombra getting so OP, he was just Unicorn who decided to study power of darkness and for no reason he got more powerful then Alicorn, Immortal and got ability to destroy entire world, it make no sense.
It mean that every Unicorn who study dark magic can become powerful and almighty world destroyer, Sombra is screw up of a villain, he was just Unicorn and do not deserve to be called a threat, he does not even deserve immortality, his character make no sense if he is even character.
As for image, looks really cool, but I still do not like Sombra to be so OP, and if Sombra defeated princesses and elements and entire Equestria army, how is Twilight going to kill someone so OP as normal Unicorn, come on, I am sure you can make up far better back story for Twilight becoming Solid Twilight Sparkle.
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... Twi isn't a normal unicorn in a sense... My head canon is that MLP FIM will end with her bacoming an alicorn.
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The point is that maybe she will become Alicorn since she deserve it most from every-pony else, however until she become, she is still Unicorn, and so she have limits.
How long it would take Celestia to eliminate Twilight if she wanted too, 30 seconds with element of surprise or 5 minutes of Twilight will get chance to teleport all over the place.
Anyway as Unicorn, she is just limited, she can not surpass Alicorn, even Cadence, and as for Shinning Armor, he was made OP, I mean, 1 guard defending entire city from entire army, if princesses would buff him with they magic so he can create and maintain shield it would be ok, but it does not make sense that Shinning Armor can be so powerful, same as it not make sense that Cadence who is Alicorn was far smaller when she babysit Twilight, do she is like 15 years old or something ?
However the point is, Shinning Armor could hold shield for weeks, and he was drained from his love by Chrysalis for weeks as well, and Cadence hardly could hold up her shield.
In my head canon, Alicorn have more raw power then Unicorns, but they have huge durability, stamina and magical reserves, they only weakpoint is not so fast regeneration rate and that magic inside them can not protect them again enchanted weapons, but as for Twilight, she is hardly more durable than any Royal Guard Soldier, raw power do not help much if you can not use it for defence.
Same for elements, they are glass cannon, can KO any super villain, but they can die easy if only villain will decide to eliminate them,
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Sombre was changed when Celestia and Luna first defeat him. He gained new powers and a new form. I see no reason to believe (as has been demonstrated in many literary pieces) that Sombra's new form wouldn't become even more powerful.
Consider, also, the element of surprise. Sombra is now, literally, a shadow. He could kill the Princesses without raising an alarm, and thus rid himself of any actual threat. We see him take down Shining Armor, Captain of the royal guard, and assuming the power gain as above, the next step would be being able to defeat Twilight. I have never once insinuated Twilight will win, but she can try; that is her character.
I see nothing out of character or, as you rather confusingly put it, "OP" about my depiction of Sombra, Twilight, or the events that transpired. I have even kept it secret, through her trau-based amnesia (which is a documented phenomenon), as to what exactly happened.
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Pfff, so princesses instead of destroying the Unicorn or imprisoning him, they just changed his form into shadow so he would become immortal and gain more power.
And now in this story you made his defeat made him even stronger.
If it is not OP then what is ?
Sombra is Unicorn with no character, no words in the show, and as Unicorn he can not be a threat above Nightmare Moon.
And if he would defeat princesses easy, how Twilight can defeat him ?
I will never accept some Unicorn to gain power above Nightmare Moon, it make no sense, and it mean that every Unicorn in the world can become super powerful villain if he just study power of darkness and then be banished by princesses in shadow form.
Pfff, you would probably create hundreds of SOmbra that way, super villain mass production.
I DO NOT BUY IT, Sombra is a screw up, as Unicron he does not deserve super villain position.
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Yes, that was canon in the show. So, I don't understand your complaint about the shadow part.
And, again, look back on literary themes; there are many instances of the villain getting destroyed, or almost, and coming back stronger as a result. If you have a problem with this story, then you have a problem with a) previous literary works, and b) My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, wherein this has been played out many times.
You seem to miss the concept of a fandom and the fan works therefrom. Fan works do not have to stick to whatever canon you consider, nor the canon of the show; anything from happy romances to grimdark drama is fair game, and will be explored by at least a handful of fans. So, the fact that Sombra didn't have much to do in the show (as of yet; considering the ending, I expect to see him again) has no bearing on whether or not my or anyone else's story should be limited to your preconceptions of his character. In fact, the lack of exploration of his character and power plays well into this kind of story, and should not be taken lightly, especially considering he was built up before the premiere of Season 3.
Again, I never said Twilight could defeat him; I merely said she wanted to. I have written nothing that said she would, or that she wouldn't. You are overreaching with your assumptions, once again.
I do not understand where you're getting the idea that he "studied the power of darkness," nor that he is a normal unicorn. From his form alone, we can see a different horn, body type, and sharp teeth, to name a few differences. Put on top of that the fact that his character became, quite literally, a shadow, and cast an entire civilization into nothingness for 1,000 years, and, yes, I can believe that he could exploit the weakness of a Princess for his own gain. Stealing away in the darkness, for example, and sneaking up on them while they are distracted/asleep.
Your strange and rather presumptuous preconceptions of the character shows that you've put little thought into the development of him. Your rather harsh dismissal of any fan work where he is powerful is also indicative of your lack of depth of thought into what fan works can accomplish. Your canon is not my canon, so do not pretend to know where my story will go.
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Every fan have something he like and dislike in the show.
In this case I dislike Sombra as super villain.
If he would be Unicorn who study dark power and enslave his subjects, it would be ok and believable for me, but only if it would limit his power, for example, his curse made his empire disappear for 1000 years, why not exploit it:
As Unicorn tyrant who's armies were defeated by princesses and he as Unicorn would be unable to defeat royal sisters in battle, he would use a spell what he was preparing for many months in the past as plan B, and so after 1000 years his empire appear again and Sombra try to take over again.
Princesses know that with they powers they would defeat him easy, but there is risk that Sombra would once again activate curse and Empire would be gone for 1000 years, so instead they would send mane 6 to deal with him, as it would be a Unicorn vs Unicorn, Sombra would be overconfident and not use his curse, and this is what princesses would hope for.
This story make Sombra a villain who is not some OP shadow who can destroy entire world, and give a set up for a fair chalenge for Twilight as she need to pass test.
What I do not like about Sombra is that he was mentioned many times to be Unicorn, and yet he is more powerful then Nightmare Moon, there is just little explanation that princesses banished him and it just made him stronger, there is no explanation why Sombra could not be killed, Celestia not said anything about him being some sort of powerful dark spawn who took control of Sombra or took for of Unicorn to spear darkness and rule.
In your story small fragment of Sombra who survived gained power above Nightmare Moon and literally defeated everyone, you made him Deus Ex Machina.
How about to leave more survives, how about letting Luna and many others escape in time, how about make most ponies his slaves instead of making everyone dead.
You story just end up in the beginning when you decided that Sombra come back 100 times stronger, kill everyone and leave Twilight in her pointless revenge.
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Deus ex machina: those words, they do not mean what you think they mean. [link]
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Sorry, it seams what I meant was that King Sombra in your story has become Marry Sue like villain before story even started.
He just come, kill everyone and leave Twilight alive so she can seek revenge and die trying, how else you can call villain who win right away and can not be defeated ?
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So, making a totally fallible villain that will obviously be defeated is a good idea, instead of adding the drama of a seemingly undefeatable foe (see: Nightmare Moon, Discord, Chrysalis, and many outside the show), only for the main character to exploit some weakness that he must quest long and hard to find?
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Well, there is a clishey what I find annoying:
Villain come, all good armies and defences prove to be useless or no one bother to stand again villain, most of the time good armies do not bother to get in villain way or if they do, they are useless or totally unbelievably stupid, this is made to add drama so that heroes could come and save the day.
I personally prefer balance, when evil villains come to take over, heroes should not be able to stop them so easy, but with the help of good armies, background characters and team work and exploiting enemy weakness they defeat villain in the end.
In your story Sombra become stronger every time he is defeated ( sealed, get stronger, sealed again, get stronger, pfff, what's the point, it just show that villain is OP or that princesses are stupid by sealing Sombra in the first place if it would only make thinks worse ).
Not to mention that when Sombra come back, he just defeat elements, all good armies and princesses, yea, whatever for there are armies if they can not do a think, what for powerful princesses if they can not even use they powers.
It all lead to Twilight who is now lonely trying to destroy Sombra and fail or she succed.
First off, if SOmbra could defeat entire armies and powerful princesses, why he struggle so much with Twilight ?
It is just clishey what make everyone except protagonist useless so that protagonist will look better and more cool.
Probably many fans like when it happen, but I happen to be person who do not:
1) I not like when Villains are stupid and easy defeated.
2) I not like when everyone except heroes are useless or do not even bother to help.
3) I not like when heroes beat villain to easy just because he do mistake or he can not defeat them as easy as he could defeat everyone else.
4) I not like when villain minions and armies are just useless pawns what are meant for heroes to grind exp and become stronger.
You can say I am a type of person who like when villains are smart, when evil and good armies are competent and useful, when heroes can not defeat evil villain unless they cooperate with those who they protect.
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By asking all these questions, you're not letting me reveal the story. Honestly, there are reasons I made the story like this, and you're bringing up all the questions I want to answer through reveals and plot points. Be patient. You seemingly want a Cliff Notes version of my story. That's not gonna happen, dude.
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Nah, I not want answers to my questions, I do rather hope Sombra would not be so totally OP, how many times villains failed because they were overconfident or played with hero instead of finishing him, how many times villains failed because they acted totally stupid, how many times good armies and leaders failed because they acted stupid and incompetent to make hero look better, how many times evil armies failed because they were incompetent and just served as experience for hero to gain before final battle.
You already make villain who defeat everything, but instead of killing hero he play with him and it will lead him to his downfall, it was repeated so many times that your story is very predictable.
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To be honest, until I read the comments, I thought the description story was an excerpt from Project Horizons or something. Still not sure of what the future of that story (Horizons) holds, but this definitely could fit! Great job!
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Haha, well, now that's just flattering me. X3
Thank you, though, and I'm glad you enjoy my stuff!
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WELL DAMN! That...is... AWESOME! AMAZING JOB!
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Seriously! Why havent i seen this before!
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Oh wow, I love this! Very well done, especially with Twilight herself. C: I like the little story snippet you added there as well; very nice touch. I hope to see more of it in the future. :3
As for the image itself, I don't think it's inappropriate to submit to Fallout Equestria. I mean... it's post-apocalyptic, it's pony, and it's pretty darn good. But I dunno; I'm not entirely sure if they accept any sort of post-apocalyptic stuff, or just Fallout-Equestria related. o3o
Anyway, keep up the awesome work! ^.^
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Thank you very much! For some reason, I have a strange attachment to this character, and want to develop her story, ya know? I'll do my best to keep the story going; I just gotta find the right inspiration (mostly the right music) for her future endeavors!
I'll try and submit it to the group here on dA; hopefully they don't say no! If they do, nothing lost, ya know?
Thank you very much for the comment and the fave! Very much appreciated!
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Oh man, I know what you mean, bro; I'm right there with ya. If I HAD to choose, Twilight may be my favorite pony (but I make it a point not to. It's honestly hard to choose among the mane 6 :C )
But yeah. c: And no problem! Your artwork is very good, so expect a watch here pretty soon. :3
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Well, choosing just ONE isn't easy for the best; the worst...that's blurring a bit, too, with this newest season! Darn character development making the ponies have actual depth. D:<
Thank you VERY much for the watch! I appreciate every one of those.
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Inorite? D: As much as I love the fact that they're really developing the characters, it just makes all the harder to choose. To be fair, it's probably for the best. xD That way, we enjoy any character we draw from the series. At least, that's how it is for me, lol. x3
And no problemo! Can't wait to see what you have in store next. C:
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Very true. There are still one or two I'm iffy about, but they're all growing on me. X3 Season 2 had a lot of caricatures of their faults; I'm glad they're evening it out! I agree with ya wholeheartedly on that. I hate drawing Rarity's mane, though. OH GOD THE CURLS.
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Lol, that's true. And I feel ya on Rarity's mane, bro. After you draw it, it's like "SUCCESS!!!! >8D" But until then, it's pretty harsh stuff. T.T
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I honestly don't think I've ever successfully pulled of Ms. Queen of the World's mane correctly. I usually just chop it off after a certain point and call it a new manestyle. XD
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Insta-Fav! Thought provoking! Fine art work! Emotionally charged!
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Thanks!
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ok, this got me seriously interested
also, people really like to make grimdark Twilight lousing her eye... I don't know if you know ~Earthsong9405 's version and I've seen a lot of other artists do it. I wonder why...
also, there must be something seriously wrong with that wound if it's bleeding all the time (looking at previous pictures)
yeah, this is definitely an awesome picture
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It's part of a very loose story that keeps retconning itself with new episodes, so, not really! XD
And, yeah, that wound is bad; she's constantly getting into scrapes and stuff, so it doesn't have time to heal right.
Thank you!
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well, this is pretty bad, if a wound like this gets messy/infected, it's pretty close to the brain, so it could lead to pretty nasty and painful death. In the good old days, when a soldier lost an eye during a battle a wound like that was treated with a hot iron just to sterilize it and make sure there's no blood there. not the prettiest sight, but pretty effective. I can totally see Twilight using her magic to do that.
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Fair enough. I was also thinking it kept reopening due to magic reasons. Ya know, cursed wound or whatever. I think that makes more sense and keeps Twily from being dead.
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yeah, a curs or something would work. maybe she uses a contra-spell to prevent infection and something to keep the pain under control, but she cannot get it healed/closed completely?
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See, this is why I need to bounce ideas off of people before approaching a story; it keeps my logic in line!
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