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I am Leslie Bane. Or at least, that is how you will always know me. I’ve had various names over the years, I was once called ‘Rose’ when I lived in France. That was fun, except when the dear Emperor Napoleon tried to round me up and lock me away for ‘dissidence’.I escaped into Spain, which wasn’t the best of ideas, but needless I had already made up my mind. I would move from my homeland, my wonderful France, and go to America.
America was a big, brand spanking new baby of a country, and for the first time, it was a country that was born without a king! Can you even imagine that?
It was freedom incarnate, or so everyone believed. America was that big chunk of wonderful and everyone was allowed to take a bite… or that’s what we were told.
In reality, America was a big chuck of wonderful for everyone who had the money.
I managed, after marring some old rich guy, to set myself up as a land owner and, yes I admit, I used slaves. I wasn’t proud of myself, after all, I’d lived long enough to see the pain and suffering that system caused. But it was the only way to recuperate my losses, plus, I must admit it gave me a good supply of blood to drink.
Oh, I’m a vampire, did I mention that?
Anyway, the people around the towns didn’t like me because I never went out in the day, but I made up some stuff about illness and they all bought it. Thank God for the Enlightenment and the bringing of this scientific age. People were far more willing to accept the excuses of science than go back to believing in ‘fairy tales’ like vampires and werewolves and other such creatures of the dark.
I ‘died’ several times and was reborn each time as a family member, a cousin or an aunt, never a child. I was always, always careful to never to imply I had a husband, as I never wanted a lover whom I’d end up leaving behind when they died away.
I’d made that mistake too many times in my long unlife. Loves die away, everything dies away with time, even I will.
Of course I continued marrying, you had to in those days, but each of my husbands soon died of illnesses or ‘accidents’. The locals began to mutter about how my family was cursed, and once the local pastor took it upon himself to try and burn my house down. But he was swiftly dealt with, and besides, the civil war started up and all the able men ran out of town to go fight.
I managed to survive that as well. You don’t live more than six hundred years and not learn to see a major change when it comes your way.
Talking of changes, after more terrible wars changed the world I entered this state of being of which I’d never seen before, a Europe without kings, a new age of science and technology and, my favourite, electricity.
Electricity changed my life… or unlife, whatever. Lights that emulated the day, not just like a flickering dot in the dark as candles used to give, but full continuous light! I could start to actually have a social life again as people began to go through odder, and far more wonderful, trends and fashions and going out at night to party and mix with random strangers actually became common place, well, it was now more open than it ever was before.
I hated goth though, it was horrible and was as far off the mark of being a vampire as one could get but it was the only fashion I could stick with without having to hide my smile all the time.
Still, the modern age is fantastic. I don’t have to pretend about anything anymore. I have a computer on which I can contact all other vampires across the planet, I have a wide screen TV and surround sound on which I can watch any sunrise and sunset I want.
I even attend a school, since I can pull off being seventeen, hooray for never aging. It's fun being around kids my own age ... ok, being around kids that look my age, even though I have to act ‘goth’ to explain heavy clothing. Ugh, I once told a bunch of moronic ‘Wicca’s’ that I was an actual vampire and I proved it by baring my full fangs. I hoped to make them crap themselves and flee but they followed me about wanting me to give them ‘the gift’.
Needless to say, I moved states.
I have to apply sun block to my face and hands every few hours, but I get to write it off as a medical condition, again, hooray for science.
And it was there that I met that young man, the one who impressed me. I’d sired more than one vampire in my time, mainly to make sure I could be protected when I slept, but as time went on I found that I needed to make less and less, especially when house prices went up.
Just so you all know, there is no big horrible world controlling vampire order. There is no million year old Dracula figure sitting on some underground throne somewhere ordering all us other vamps about.
There are some organisations, like the VSA (the Vampiric Society of America) which I suppose is like a secret society on account of no mortal knowing about them. They act as a sort of police force, protecting and serving… and killing if necessary, after all, we can’t have some loudmouth running around shouting out to the world that vampires exist, we could never risk another Jack the Ripper. They also protect, making sure to constantly issue us new identities whenever we need them and making sure that we’re, you know, not slaughtered en mass by the general vampire-fearing population.
It consists of vampire hackers with no lives and big sexy muscle-y dudes who enforce the ‘no blabbing’ rule.
Although, yes, it’s true we do control all the worlds blood banks… well most of them anyway. How else are we going to get out blood without killing people? It’s not like the old days were you could just drop a few people a week and no one would care, this is an age were a murder doesn’t go unnoticed.
How ironic, vampires controlling humanitarian efforts like blood drives.
Wait, I’m rambling on again, sorry.
Back to the cute boy. Yes he was cute, he had that whole ‘shy but handsome if he’d stop looking at his feet and putting his hood up’ thing going on. Not to mention, the moment I talked to him I found that he was actually very intelligent. Not just in a school sense, but in a world sense. It was clear that he was born a human, but he’d die to be a vampire.
Heh, I’m so great at sayings.
Anyway, he was one of those people that had that odd ability to stand back and view things, not just as they were at that time, but as a whole in the history of things. He knew his place was small and things moved on, and thus, it made him the perfect candidate for siring. Plus, my last adept had long flown the coop, some twenty years ago, and I was growing lonely.
Yes, vampires grow lonely. We may be blood drinking blasphemies of nature, but we still have feelings, just like everything else in the universe.
So I came to him, I offered him the chance to become a vampire. I stressed neither the good nor bad points of the deal. I told him he can walk away as he wishes, just don’t tell anyone. I told him what he’d have to give up, what he’d get in return, what he’d develop and lose as time went on.
And, after he spent an hour thinking it over, he accepted.
I was glad as well; I was getting bored of waiting.
So, what now? Well, oddly enough, I take each day at a time. I rarely plan ahead to be honest, since so many things like that tend to fall apart. Odd for someone who’s over six hundred years old, right?
People tend to think of vampires like we’re smart and witty and all that but every vampire I know hasn’t changed since they first got bitten. Marcus De Gravoin, aka, Mark Degar, is still a horny, foolish, egotistical asshole. Frances LeVerser is still a silly, childish, sweet girl who’ll do anything for you if you’re a friend. They’ve all become better at planning things of course, they’re all a little paranoid, as all vampires tend to be and they’ve all changed to get to know the fashions and the lingo of the day, but essentially, they’re the same person as they always were.
Times change, people don’t.
I wonder what this kid will be like in another hundred years, what he’ll see when others don’t, who he’ll bite and love and hate and save.
As always, I look forward to knowing.
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Comments: 39
De-PAKed [2011-03-20 20:42:30 +0000 UTC]
WHOOO!!! RAMBLY VAMPIRE!!!
How I love me my rambly vampires. It probably has something to do with being my sisters proof-reader...
And I'll have you know, some people DO change. I did!! >.< Quite a lot actually. SO HA!!!
I'll admit at first I was shocked it was in First person, but once I got over that, it was incredibly enjoyable and a great read. Very smooth flow.
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MindOfGenius [2009-06-29 16:53:05 +0000 UTC]
This is the fifth time i'ev read this, and ever time I do, I love it even more.
Thank you.
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Invader-Sideos In reply to MindOfGenius [2009-06-30 12:51:31 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for reading it! I must admit, it is one of my hidden gems I think
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MindOfGenius [2008-05-29 17:38:14 +0000 UTC]
i re-read this today. Wow, still piques my intrest. Love the voice that you put in from the character. Props yet again.
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Invader-Sideos In reply to MindOfGenius [2008-05-31 18:03:02 +0000 UTC]
Thanks a bunchaola!
And yea, I love that gabby style.
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Writers-Critique [2008-05-16 01:50:23 +0000 UTC]
"In reality, America was a big chuck of wonderful for everyone who had the money." -chunk
"I wasn’t proud of myself, after all, I’d lived long enough to see the pain and suffering that system caused, but it was the only way to recuperate my losses, plus, I must admit it gave me a good supply of blood to drink." -This seems to me like a major run-on sentence. Perhaps this would be better?
"I wasn’t proud of myself. After all, I’d lived long enough to see the pain and suffering that system caused. But it was the only way to recuperate my losses. Plus, I must admit it gave me a good supply of blood to drink."
(I know you were going for more of a ramble... but it's hard to read without proper punctuation.)
I would consider this a run-on too... The locals began to mutter about how my family was cursed, and once the local pastor took it upon himself to try and burn my house down but he was swiftly dealt with and besides, the civil war started up and all the able men ran out of town to go fight.
Okay, you just need to work on run-ons in general in this one. Really. These are two separate thoughts: "I managed to survive that as well, you don’t live more than six hundred years and not learn to see a major change when it comes your way." You need a period or a semicolon or something in there...
"Its fun being around kids my own age…" 'It's' needs an apostrophe.
"Needless to say COUGHcomma!COUGH I moved states."
Oh, and it was a good story. Neat art trade.
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Invader-Sideos In reply to Writers-Critique [2008-05-16 17:00:12 +0000 UTC]
Your most critiqued story yet! (of mine anyway).
But again, thank you for pointing these errors out and, as always, I shall rush to repair them!
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Writers-Critique In reply to Invader-Sideos [2008-05-16 19:34:20 +0000 UTC]
Mhm, you're quite welcome.
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MindOfGenius [2008-05-10 08:04:56 +0000 UTC]
HOLY CRAP. This was so awesome, from the way the the narrator rambles her thoughts on, and calmly reassuring that they AREN"T taking over the world, jus trying to live among us (albeit drinking blood). Can't say enough, because everybody already said it. FAV>
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Invader-Sideos In reply to MindOfGenius [2008-05-10 12:43:36 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you good sir, I've always liked the idea that vampires and other such ruffians of the night don't really care about humanity and are just trying to live their own lives.
And thank you for the face good chap!
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MindOfGenius In reply to Invader-Sideos [2008-05-10 18:15:04 +0000 UTC]
you are quite welcome. I love to take the time to READ OTHER'S LIT WORKS (nudges you in the side)
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MindOfGenius In reply to Invader-Sideos [2008-05-11 05:15:28 +0000 UTC]
*loud whisper* READ MINE AND OTHER'S LIT AND CRITIQUE THEM!!!
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Invader-Sideos In reply to MindOfGenius [2008-05-11 13:29:10 +0000 UTC]
NOT NOW THAT YOU ASKED.
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gdpr-2309293 [2008-05-02 14:45:29 +0000 UTC]
Very cool story, I like the rambling story style you used for it
"Although, yes, it’s true we do control all the worlds blood banks… well most of them anyway."
Great, now when I'm sitting waiting to give blood I'm gonna end up looking at the staff trying to figure out which ones are the vampires, and which ones aren't
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Invader-Sideos In reply to gdpr-2309293 [2008-05-02 19:13:17 +0000 UTC]
I pegged them all as vampires. And MI6 agents trying to snatch your DNA. >_> I'm not paranoid though...
And thank you! It was all stream o' conciousness on this one.
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SakuraBlossom13 [2008-05-01 02:52:18 +0000 UTC]
i do say, quite a nice read this was.
you certainly did an effective job of portraying this character; the development of the voice was good, i was able to get to know the character well, like through the efficient tone
and the rhetorical devices were nice in this, too. i noticed some good parallelism and some tricolons. and there was good variation in syntax! along with some memorable lines, such as the one about "vampires controlling humanitarian efforts." yus. i liked that one
overall, twas the work of an obviously talented writer! it was hard for me to find flaws in it -.-;
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Invader-Sideos In reply to SakuraBlossom13 [2008-05-01 14:58:12 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much, I hope she read like a gossipy slightly ditzy kinda person, cos thats what I was aiming for.
And yus, I looove my literary devices, especially when I got to write about the awesomeness of electricity and humanitarian vampires
Thank you again! And its ok, I usually find flaws in my own work anyway. I feel like I wrapped the end up too fast and I could have done more on emotions.
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swiblet [2008-04-30 19:13:06 +0000 UTC]
xDDD There are so many tiny details! I really feel like I know her now! And this gossipy talkative personality is never one I would fit with a vampire, but....its works 83
Great writing, Sideos! 8D I see why people love ya!
~~B3N
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Invader-Sideos In reply to swiblet [2008-04-30 19:49:31 +0000 UTC]
Hehehe, thank you!
And vampires can be gossip queens too!
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gdpr-2852538 [2008-04-30 09:55:46 +0000 UTC]
Oh, wow I'm a big fan of vampires and stories like this, where they tell their own story. Nice.
I like stories that don't just make them powerful, evil beasts. But thinking normal people too, who just have to plan their life a little better than others, to avoid questions about why they are not aging.
Nice writting As always
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Invader-Sideos In reply to gdpr-2852538 [2008-04-30 10:58:03 +0000 UTC]
Indeed, I love the idea of taking something as powerful and as scary as a vampire and making them have to go out shopping for clothes and such
Its realism, funnyness AND interesting all at once!
Ahem, and thank you!
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gdpr-2852538 In reply to Invader-Sideos [2008-04-30 14:14:01 +0000 UTC]
It's the whole package 8D
^^ Yar welcome
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jeevani [2008-04-30 02:23:20 +0000 UTC]
OMG.
I likie!
It's awesome the way you made it sound as if it was someone actually telling the story. All the little interjections made it seem like someone was trying to interrupt!
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Invader-Sideos In reply to jeevani [2008-04-30 10:53:44 +0000 UTC]
Thanks!
And I think that might have been one of her vampire friends... or her terrified yet bored victem
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Invader-Sideos In reply to pearlshatz [2008-04-30 01:40:01 +0000 UTC]
Its one big ramble!
Which means you must have liked all of it.
Thanks!
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InvaderMari [2008-04-30 00:25:45 +0000 UTC]
This was a really interesting story to read, not to mention it was completely new. It was in 1st person, and it was a rambling type story, but written well enough so that one could follow it, and it was natural, almost like you're actually talking to the person instead of reading the story.
I also like how you emphasized her age several times and showed it by mentioning the different ages that she lived through and the events with it. The Jack the Ripper mention was also awesome.
Overall, I think it was good, although, at first it was a tad bit hard to follow, but once you get into the story, it's easier and it flows nicely. This was a fantastic beginning for a new type of writing, and I'm sure that once you write a full original piece in 3rd person, you'll be able to tell a distinct improvement in your writing. Trying something new always strengthens your passion. Awesome job, love!
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Invader-Sideos In reply to InvaderMari [2008-04-30 01:41:57 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much mein liebing!
Yes its like she's being interviewed, but not seriously so, almost like telling a friend a story. And age was a theme in this, especially the changes of ages compared with the way people seemingly don't.
And yus, the beginning could be better I think, but I'm glad you found everything else worked!
:heart:
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potato-famine [2008-04-30 00:17:11 +0000 UTC]
8DDDD so much awesome! i love the development you added to her X3 its always fun to see what others would do with a character
the history and thought put into this is amazing too. i love the thought of her outliving all her previous lovers and such :3
thanks X3 i love it!
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Invader-Sideos In reply to potato-famine [2008-04-30 01:39:19 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I'm glad you like her
Also, that was just something that evolved but it went with the theme of things moving on and changing and stuff.
Anyways, THANKS FOR FAVING AND COMMENTING.
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