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Iscariot-Priest — Spring Haikuthon '08
Published: 2008-03-02 17:01:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 1812; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 24
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1/3/08Melting mulch
past feeds present
then and now.
2/3/08
Every body’s talking
Every plant’s stalking
nature’s abuzz.
3/3/08
Rail side weeds lean
rail side people lean too
Train's coming!
4/3/08
Rail-side marigolds
yellow warning lines
stand behind the line!
5/3/08
Clouds above
dew below
air smells of rain.
6/3/08
By dawn's light
she reads his e-mail;
her hair is fire.
7/3/08
Village pub
filled with dirty old men, smoke
Frank Sinatra.
8/3/08
March
One day war
V-day!
9/3/08
Earthquakes
politic order shaken
times are a changin'.
10/3/08
Sky bloated
with water retention
that time of month.
11/3/08
Booming
thunder without rain
A Capella sky.
12/3/08
Help!
an unmovable weight
kitten asleep on me.
13/3/08
Morning glory's bloom
ignored by early commuters
bloom of morning's glory.
14/3/08
"Yaaaaaaaaaaaa sin"
mourners cry
funeral rites.
15/3/08
"Yaaaaaaaaaaaam sing"
revelers cry
wedding rites.
16/3/08
Rooster stares
suits stare back
rural train stalled
17/3/08
Everywhere green
not plants
but people
18/3/08
Fair trade
she buy bras inside
he smokes outside.
19/3/08
Sky dragon
roaring thunder
cats scatter!
20/3/08
Everywhere green
Irish again
No, Maulidur Rasul.
21/3/08
Lazy Friday
empty offices
PCs hum to themselves.
22/3/08
Northeast monsoon
bring floods in the Westcoast.
Someone's lost.
23/3/08
Easter Sunday
Singh Sunday breakfast
all follow routine.
24/3/08
Little Buddhas
Kids with melon-hair chatter
school bus is late.
25/3/08
Standing in the gale
her scarf stands stiff
flagpole woman.
26/3/08
Women with branded shoes
barefoot in the rain
27/3/08
Bad timing
neighbors are moving
and so are clouds.
28/3/08
Jog turns to run
as hobo turns mugger
29/3/08
Train lurches
couples hold tight
singles roll eyes.
30/3/08
Gym members strut
wearing sweat like badges
laborers laugh.
31/3/08
Rush till the end
B&R fills with people
empties of ice cream.
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Comments: 108
Glad to see you've completed, was a bit worried for a while. The last few have put a smile on my face
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You know how I tend to diddle daddle. :B
Takes me ages to make the raw idea into the finished form, I can never quite find the right words.
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No worries
I've noticed the shiny sheen of polish on your words
Cheers for the 
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I love how your haiku present the world through your own eyes to readers. It's very interesting, especially for some of us who have never been to Malaysia.
This project has been tons of fun, thanks again for hosting it! :]
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He he, good to know my attempt at a more personal angle didn't go horribly wrong.
Thanks for joining the haikuthon (:
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Congratulations on making it the whole month, and for hosting this event.
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Thanks, it made me realize what a responsibility being host is. And I wasn't even a very good host 
Happy to see someone liking the two line haiku. Personally, I feel the English haiku works well as a couplet.
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Yes
But there's the epic napowrimo coming out next D:
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I don't really do poetry. :/
but I will probably support it, journal features and what not.
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Oh. I see. That's cool anyway.
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I guess they are, but one month straight is enough, kthnx
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Al of these are such vibrant pictures of spring, my favourites are 4, 10, 18, 24 and 28 (that's a lot of favourites...), the imagery in these particularly stood out to me, I could see everything so clearly. Thanks for organising all this, it was fun!
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You're welcome. Interesting how you like the ones about humans. Coincidence or conspiracy? dun dun dun
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It certainly seems mighty suspicious...
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Woot, it's over!
2/3
''nature's abuzz" kinda reminds me of one of Basho's haiku.
4/3
One of my fav of the set.
11/3
Love the word 'Capella' in this haiku.
16/3
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21/3
-- pcs hum! hahaha
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Thank goodness it over
2/3 remind you of basho? I'm honoured.
4/3 happy to know which is your favourite.
11/3 It's lovely word, an despite the syllable count, I feel it's a soft smooth word.
16/3 
21/3 PCs humming are funny, okay, now you're just being weird
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I thinks, I love all of them, I cannot pick favourites
there are lots of energy in these haiku, and some of the pictures are very vivid, like little kids as Buddha statues
27 is also great, the weather is crazy everywhere these days
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Ha ha, thanks for the high praise. The buddha statue children crack me up every time
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i'm starting to either return (for those haikuthon spring collections i posted early comments to), or come to those who's collections i still need & want to look over and comment on at last now that the March challenge is winding down to the last days - in this case, two more days.
It's good to see that you've been able to stay the course to the end - in this case, just a few more days left. But unlike your journal's title, the month is not ended yet, so don't count it out, there is still much to be inspired by.
i particularly love the cultural & local favor of your pieces - as it should be. Haijin from around the world participating, both hemispheres - it stands to reason we read moments that take place in opposing seasons and speaking of plants, flowers, sights & sounds that are alien & exotic to the minds of many.
#11 explains well the way of nature's voice without the expected drama of a full-blown storm
#16 lol! this brings to my mind's eye how rural bite's urban blight right back - hmmm... that could be a little piece unto itself...
rooster showdown
rural bite's urban blight
right back
heehee!
#18 perfectly with brevity a real scene of a man's patient siege
# 22 i've lived through numerous wet seasons and always on local news there's someone who never listens when they're told to stay out of the river basin (the Los Angeles river) that runs to the sea - no way to get out and no way to be found if the helicopers can't see you.
# 27 wow! ...been there, done that!
Your collection is filled with the colors & energy of your world - which brings to me an everyman's view of that world.
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Thanks for the indepth response (and don't worry about typos). Happy that my topical haiku were appreciated.
And the only way to do justice to this comment is to return the favor.
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correction: "helicopters"
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hahaha my favorite is 12/3 & 18/3 (:
ferr surre. n_n
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Cat lover, I see.
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I was in the office! Imagine if the computers did blow up
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Like the opening sequence in Saving Ryan's Privates
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I meant Saving Private Ryan, that movie with Forrest Gump!
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all internet stalkers, this fella's name be Ryan! D:
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BLAUERAUSS HAS A SMALL DESERT TOWN NAMED RYAN IN HER SCRAPS!
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OBVIOUSLY NAMED AFTER YOU. AGAIN WITH THE CONSPIRACIES
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YOU'RE ALL GONNA KNIFE ME WHILE I SLEEP!
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1, 2, 14, 15, and 18 are excellent!! i enjoy the vivacity, and unconventional nature of your writing voice...particularly in 14 15...where I can actually "hear" the voices ring out. You have an element of playful reverence and buoyancy in your work. Nicely done!!
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Thanks, with so many talented haijin I gotta try hard to stand out.
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Me, tap your phone? Never
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day 3
great one, comical and rouse a sense of anticipation at the same time.
day 12
as a cat lover, i totally understand why the kitten is so 'heavy' and unmovable.
day 14 and 15
act well as a couplet put together side by side. i guess only people who know your culture of 'yaaa sin' and 'yaaaam sing' understand this pair.
i like them for the slight satirical implications.
do you have another half set of haiku for this haiku-thon?
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I swear almost every poet is a cat person! 
If you live around enough different cultures long enough, you start to notice how they've lotsa similarities, sometimes making bizarre parallels 
but yeah, I'm guilty of using very localized ideas (days 8,9,14,15,20)
Sorry, been so busy, I keep forgetting to update (classic lazy bones 
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come on, you are the host. gotta keep it up or else.
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I never said I wasn't a bad host
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