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Iscariot-Priest — Spring Haikuthon '08
Published: 2008-03-02 17:01:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 1812; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 24
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1/3/08Melting mulch
past feeds present
then and now.
2/3/08
Every body’s talking
Every plant’s stalking
nature’s abuzz.
3/3/08
Rail side weeds lean
rail side people lean too
Train's coming!
4/3/08
Rail-side marigolds
yellow warning lines
stand behind the line!
5/3/08
Clouds above
dew below
air smells of rain.
6/3/08
By dawn's light
she reads his e-mail;
her hair is fire.
7/3/08
Village pub
filled with dirty old men, smoke
Frank Sinatra.
8/3/08
March
One day war
V-day!
9/3/08
Earthquakes
politic order shaken
times are a changin'.
10/3/08
Sky bloated
with water retention
that time of month.
11/3/08
Booming
thunder without rain
A Capella sky.
12/3/08
Help!
an unmovable weight
kitten asleep on me.
13/3/08
Morning glory's bloom
ignored by early commuters
bloom of morning's glory.
14/3/08
"Yaaaaaaaaaaaa sin"
mourners cry
funeral rites.
15/3/08
"Yaaaaaaaaaaaam sing"
revelers cry
wedding rites.
16/3/08
Rooster stares
suits stare back
rural train stalled
17/3/08
Everywhere green
not plants
but people
18/3/08
Fair trade
she buy bras inside
he smokes outside.
19/3/08
Sky dragon
roaring thunder
cats scatter!
20/3/08
Everywhere green
Irish again
No, Maulidur Rasul.
21/3/08
Lazy Friday
empty offices
PCs hum to themselves.
22/3/08
Northeast monsoon
bring floods in the Westcoast.
Someone's lost.
23/3/08
Easter Sunday
Singh Sunday breakfast
all follow routine.
24/3/08
Little Buddhas
Kids with melon-hair chatter
school bus is late.
25/3/08
Standing in the gale
her scarf stands stiff
flagpole woman.
26/3/08
Women with branded shoes
barefoot in the rain
27/3/08
Bad timing
neighbors are moving
and so are clouds.
28/3/08
Jog turns to run
as hobo turns mugger
29/3/08
Train lurches
couples hold tight
singles roll eyes.
30/3/08
Gym members strut
wearing sweat like badges
laborers laugh.
31/3/08
Rush till the end
B&R fills with people
empties of ice cream.
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Comments: 108
just get off your butt and start writing.
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It's done, I had the pieces on a note book and finally added them D:
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congratulation upon your completion. (i know i am sooo late in coming back 
the train/couple/singles haiku just makes me laugh. very apt observation.
women with branded shoes are silly but again, this is good satire done on those people who did not buy things for its actual purpose.
the NE monsoon one is sad.
all in all, your haiku/senryu has a very distinctive style of humor and satirical appeal. they are good stuff.
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A late reply is just as good, especially if it's well thought out.
Happy that you said my style is satirical, that's what I was shooting for.
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Nice selection so far mate, and I've not seen political haiku before
I particularly like the 12th, and the differences and similarities between the 14th and 15th.
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Thanks, election happening only once in 4 years, it seems a shame not to include them
Days 3 and 4 are linked too.
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I really like this! It's a different for of writing, I ought to try it some day. And I love the wa you build such vivid images.
(seeing as I've never learned anything about Japaneses writings, I wikied/googled haikus. Found out some pretty interesting things - namely that in Japan the metric is counted, like in Portugal, by sounds instead of syllables. I'm just still a bit uncomfortable with writing poetry in English...this looks like good practice.)
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Thanks. Good to know that this got you interested in reading up on haiku.
Measuring by syllables has always been kind of a weird concept to me, but since I write in English, I assume we follow English rules of counting by syllables.
Perhaps you should try writing a few in Portuguese and see how it sounds.
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Ohh, voting day. I automatically thought Valentine's Day when I saw V-Day.
This one seems to include more cultural things than weather things. It's cool.
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V-day was last month silly >:
Thanks, I thought it'd be boring not to take advantage of the differences in culture.
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She's gonna get wet...all over you 
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Anywhere with smoke grosses me out! And love the one on the 8th, you play with words so well that I usually sit there and read it 6 times with a different meaning each time.
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Unlike food, it's frown upon not to play with your words
...but seriously, I was waiting more than 8 days to post the 8th one, since it wouldn't make sense being up any earlier than the actual voting day.
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Mmmmm... The smell of rain. How I miss it.
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Having a dry spell in your area? Ignore the innuendo, but I hope you get a chance to get wet soon.
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Not a dry spell, a snow spell...
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your poems are very easy to understand, good reads. I love the continuity of how they go about the season so well.
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Thanks, when doing haiku, I try to be literal about what I say.
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I love that smell of rain. So fresh and pure, ahhhh. :J
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I think they should bottle rain-charged air and sell it, goodness knows they do that with sea breeze D:
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That would be delicious! D:
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Canned air FTW D:
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The train images are nice. I have tracks near me, too.
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Since I take a train to work, it be nice to have a few haiku dedicated to the poor old trains and the fools who ride it
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The air most definitely does smell of rain now that you mention it...
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Since my residential area is near factories (
So by odd, do you mean nice? I warn you, I'm a rain fan boy D:<
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my favourite is the second, but the third is also great, as a Literature teacher would say: "vivid imagery"
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The general consensus seem to be the second is best, but thanks for making the third feel special
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Leaning into the train means more seats for the other people.
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If only...
but you know, if someone did get squished, everyone else would be late to work. Selfish bastard.
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That is unfortunate. And I doubt that bosses would believe that someone got squished and that's why I am late excuse.
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but...but...the lights are so PRETTY D:
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Thanks, though I was late in submitting mine too D:
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So I'm not the only one! And it's triple as bad for you, because you made the contest!
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The shame, it burns like 👍: 0 ⏩: 1
Thats awesome, I love how I am already sitting on the edge of my seat in anticipation just from reading those two.
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I'll just have to knock you off your seat then...no pressure (nervous laughter).
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I got knocked off from the third! OH NOES! Love the image of the weeds and people leaning together, it's almost like...they're both eagerly waiting, one for a season, one for a train, and they stand (lean?) united in their waiting!
This sounds like such an awesome project, I might see if I can find time tonight and work up 3 haikus to catch up. Haven't written one for 2 years now, Im so ashamed to admit, but 31 haikus should totally make up for it!
Can't wait for the 4th! 
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A great start! You can practically feel the energy in the second one.
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