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Jade-Pandora — Spring Haikuthon Mar 1-31 2008
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March 31 - haiku/senryua brief life
serenades from the reeds-
eternal spring
March 30 - haiku/senryu
start stop start stop
two squirrels hide and seek
to the treetop
March 29 - haiku/senryu
spring fever-
I cut my jeans
very short
March 28 - haiku/senryu
I trod barefoot
on the path
to his sandals
March 27 - haiku/senryu
hands trembling
I press his note into
origami folds
March 26 - haiku/senryu
waning moon, low tide
sand shifts from my feet
to my lover's
March 25 - haiku/senryu
the scent of rain
the scent of him-
one and the same
March 24 - senryu/senryu
at the zoo
sneaking a grope
by the python cage
March 23 - haiku/senryu
freshly washed hair
drying in the spring air-
I think of him
March 22 - haiku/haiku
bathroom window
moonlight
voyeur
March 21 - haiku/senryu
before dawn
he wakes me
in prayer
March 20 - haiku/senryu
moonless night
my lover's eyes
the only light
March 19 - haiku/senryu
I anticipate
his breath on my nape-
spring dusk
March 18 - haiku/senryu
cloudburst-
his clothes and mine
drip-dry in the tub
March 17 - haiku/senryu
blood oranges
pried open
bleeding down my chin
March 16 - haiku/haiku
melon flesh yields
green gourds hang-
afternoon banquet
March 15 - haiku/haiku
curbside run-off
graceful silhouette
the flight of a crane
March 14 - haiku/senryu
camp raid-
not a single egg
or raccoon left
March 13 - haiku/senryu
wasp nest
in my mailbox-
unpaid bills
March 12 - haiku/senryu
a tabby preens
on the porch-
ant queue
March 11 - haiku/haiku
daybreak-
empty and unbroken
a lone snail shell
March 10 - haiku/haiku
spring showers
woven boughs
nut hatchlings sleep
March 9 - haiku/senryu
cacophony-
returning geese
catch up on gossip
March 8 - senryu/senryu
sun bonnets in vogue-
a bee attends
high tea
March 7 - haiku/senryu
morning dew-
ladybug
reflections
March 6 - haiku/senryu
swollen stream-
bears' midday forage
the twins wrestle
March 5 - haiku/haiku
death rattle-
gulls loiter inland
from the last storm
March 4 - haiku/senryu
coitus-
two otters
underwater
March 3 - haiku/haiku
dream catchers
at dawn's first light-
cocoon remnants
March 2 - haiku/senryu
scalloped leaves-
a caterpillar's
overbite
March 1 - haiku/haiku
snow melts-
bones of winter
grin from the grass
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Comments: 299
It seems you appear to be lovestruck these days?
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these days - those days - spring is sprung
seriously - what haiku is about more than anything - is love. and spring is the season where love seems amplified in every way possible!
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Thank you! 
It's good to see you after so long!
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maybe everyone don't understand the effort you put forth.And I'm like the phase of the moon.The darkest moments seem to only bring me forth to light.
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yes... i bring you into my light through the darkness that we both understand
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to share light with a gifted person as yourself,is a reward all it's own.Glad to see another that understands the dark,any help in the dark is appreciated.
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Beautiful as ever - the hair, the spring air, the link to the other person...it's all there.
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Thank you!
i'm glad you see (or feel it all) - i certainly did!
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Freshly washed hair is a good feeling! I don't think I could dry it in the air here at the moment as it would probably freeze!
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The spring weather here has been amazing, so yes - perfect for drying my hair outdoors.
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yes - thank you, so much
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#21 gives me goosebumps.
the sensuality of your work never fails to touch me.
I stand in awe of you
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Thank you, John - i'm glad you can feel me so well.
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20 is so serene
keep going we are almost done
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oh yes, i shall meet you there at the finish.
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but don't follow the light 
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I really like the romantic delicacy of #19 and #20.
# 19 is particularly sensory with the breath on the nape of the neck, even more so perhaps because it is anticipatory rather than immediate.
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Anticipatory, and just on the cusp to becoming immediate.
Thank you, dear one.
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daybreak-
empty and unbroken
a lone snail shell
-- this haiku caught me.
It's lovely how daybreak becomes a snail shell, delicate and small enough to be picked up.
Love the positive connotation of "daybreak" too.
Way to go!
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why thank you, i'm terribly touched!
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VOYEUR
Dont u love it when u learn a new word and then ts everywhere
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i had to wear a cast on my ankle years ago and it seemed everyone was suddenly wearing casts!
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BAHAHAHA
with me i learn a new word then its everywhere its really creepy
Like voyeur id never ever heard of it before
then i learnt it
then the very next day my art teacher said it in one of his lectures
it was so weird
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aah i see!
did you like my use of the word? maybe it was creepy, huh
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no it gave a very good image
twasn't creepy coz it was weeks ago i learnt it but its still everywhere
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gasp - how naughty ... in a nice way.
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i forgot to ask - are you commenting about #21 or 22? They're both - um - that way.
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It applies to both yes...wonderfully so.
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i'm so glad you are getting to know me - my style - so well!
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damn you're a fine writer -
"scalloped leaves-
a caterpillar's
overbite"
brilliant images here - i'm so jealous
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i appreciate your comments - i'm happy that you enjoy my work, thank you!
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I anticipate
his breath on my nape-
spring dusk
Me too.... Sigh. 
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You've been doing amazingly well this month, Jade!
I have one suggestion:
'blood oranges
pried open
bleeding down my chin'
This is a great haiku, but I think that 'trickling' would work better than 'bleeding', since you already have 'blood' in the first line.
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Thank you, Kera for your unwavering support, it means so much to me!
As for your suggestion - i actually did consider "trickles" or "trickling", but it didn't give me the same image in my mind as i also wanted to give the readers. And...
i wanted the deliberate redundance of the two duel words of "blood" & "bleeding" for the sake of intensity. It's one of very few times i've used redundancy on purpose.
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Moonless but for the hidden moon itself ^_^ and all the light within.
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you're perceptions delight me at times, thank you
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Happy to delight, it' what makes the internet fun!
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day 9
i can imagine the noise. it's quite well rendered, except that the geese are a little too personified by the verb 'gossip'. personification is not a common practise in haiku.
day 11
this one is superb. it makes me ponder: a creature fragile as snail has managed to preserve its shell from being trampled on by humans' shoes. finally it still have to leave its home behind at death. quite sad and thought provoking.
march 13
another excellent add to the set. it tells a lot of minimal number of words. you have chosen the an appropriate object to represent a person's reluctance to face financial difficulty.
you have certainly improved in your haiku skill. i look forward to more!
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Attributing human characteristics to animals is not personification. Perhaps you meant anthropomorphication? Anthropomorphication is not common in traditional haiku, although is becomming more common as haiku evolves.
Personification, however, has been a common element of haiku since the very begininning.
Just trying to help.
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i'm not very sure. according to the haiku book in japanese i read, personification is to be avoided as much as possible in haiku.
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I have the highest regard for you, Peng, and your haiku, but I am going to have to disagree with you on this one.
I received the print of my haiku and the replacement cards for the letter U. I am very happy with them and I framed the print pair. They look awesome on our wall. Thank you very much!!
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