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A Practiced ThingThe words, like labels, ink the page,
From youths the ancient masters grow,
Yet little novel comes from age.
For what to write, the child mourned?
Though Frost had carved the beaten path
And Faulkner found his calling there,
A diatribe on Austen's Bath
Yields less these days than Salinger.
His muscles leap where memory fails
To fill the gaps of artistry,
The tongue-in-cheek that cures what ails,
A satire, not a comedy.
Meticulous, he sculpts his craft,
The bellows burning temperature.
He strikes a blow upon the shaft
And shapes each word, a metaphor.
How many seasons pass him by
Before he feels the sting of age?
How many countless stories lie
Unturned, like stones upon his grave?
The child looks down to withered hands,
For age will serve to desiccate
And soon be silver, like time's sands,
The more the pity, time we waste.
I'll tell myself someday, I'm sure,
That what I write is worthier
Than vain pursuits that won't endure,
The same as any other would.
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Comments: 3
ForgottenFire [2009-12-07 15:45:19 +0000 UTC]
I think this is my favorite out of the ones you posted. I really like the use of allusion in the second stanza, which, is what I think spurs the rest on.
I think I like the last stanza, more on a personal note, because it touches on the perceived worth of our creative efforts, which can affect those attempts in good or bad ways. The one thing that gets me though, is the word "worthier". It feels like it should be something else, but when I looked for a replacement, I couldn't find one, but that's probably because it's not my poem to change.
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JustAnotherWeekend In reply to ForgottenFire [2009-12-07 16:03:05 +0000 UTC]
Thanks Yeah, lately I've found that the only thing I can write about is my difficulty thinking of anything to write, which is incredibly ironic. Without school demanding it of me, it's hard to force myself to do it, even when I want to.
As for the word "worthier," would the line read better to you if it were "that what I write's more worth my time"?
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ForgottenFire In reply to JustAnotherWeekend [2009-12-10 16:00:28 +0000 UTC]
Writing about not knowing what to write is better than not writing at all, right? Haha. Maybe you should challenge yourself to write something everyday, even if it's not poetry, or just a haiku--just so that you're writing something.
I think that "that what I write's more worth my time" sounds too cumbersome, and thus I would stick with the original.
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