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Ka-ren — Masquerade Part 2
Published: 2013-04-06 10:03:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 20626; Favourites: 333; Downloads: 0
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Second part of my fan-crossover-art for "Rise of the Guardians" )Full description for this stuff you may found in first part )
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P.S. Sorry for my English
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Comments: 43
Was he trying to ask her to go with him >_< dang it tooth
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I. WANT. MOOOAAARRRRR!!!!!! RAWRRRRR!!!!!! BYUSDBGFERHYBVGFERUH
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So is this comic JackxAutumn or JackxTooth or both or not or...?
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Why? Would it be less interesting to you if there was no "X"?
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Just asking! I thought maybe he would be asking one of them to the ball or something, even if it IS Autumn's ball.
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It should've been "tunnels" instead of "tonnels". Other than that, it's been mentioned below xD great work, hun!
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you're very welcome <3 your art is gorgeous!
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Oh wait... I was pretty sure it said "tonnels" before... Whatever, great job anyway \(‾▿‾\)(/‾▿‾)/
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Your english is very good, and your arts wonderful SugarCube
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Welcome, keep up the good work
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LtS: The only mistake I can see that no one had pointed out yet is; "By the way are you going to ball?" It should read, "By the way, are you going to the Ball?" Other then that, this is really good. Can't wait to see the next page. And when are we going to see Pitch? And Sandy?
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love the story! English is pretty spot on, just a few tweeks which have already been stated by someone else so I'll keep an eye out for the next part for you! 
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Neat, can't wait to read more
Also, to help you out with English grammar;
1. It should be "I've Received an invitation" instead of "I've Received the Invitation" since the invite was sent to more than one person
2. Add "an" so it can say "It's an Annual event"
3. It should be "Invitations gets sent to everyone" instead of "Invitations send to everyone"
4. also it's "Invitation" instead of "Inventention" and;
5. Change "Haven't" to "Hasn't"
Hope that helps you
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Thank you Very VERY much!
You are very kind person!
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I"m really looking forward to more of this. 
The only problem I could see with the English is the word "tunnels" instead of "tonnels"
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