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Ka-ren — Masquerade Part 3
Published: 2013-04-14 09:22:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 19832; Favourites: 286; Downloads: 0
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Third part of my fan-crossover-art for "Rise of the Guardians" )Full description for this stuff you may found in first part )
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This time I need help.
If somebody could correct me with australian accent. So that Bunny sounds more natural. )
P.S. Sorry for my English
P.P.S. If something is not correct, please help )
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LOL I was laughing when Bunny dropped him XD
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when Bunny caught him it looked like a frostbunny moment
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I posted yesterday (on Tumblr) the two first pages, and they already got 26 notes - of likings and reblogs.
My guess is that the hashtag #ka-ren will become popular among Rotg fans there.
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When Jack fell down the hole and Bunny's expression when he caught him is hilarious!
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How close are you to being done with the next one?
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I asked my mother (who is a teacher) to have a look and here's the spelling/grammar she found to help you out:
1- 'the' is needed between 'to' and 'ball' in Jack's speech bubble
2- "That tunnel. Don't turn. You'll know it when you get there." to her doesn't make sense unless you make it "That tunnel over there. Doesn't turn. You'll know it when you get there."
3- grammar one - you can't have 'and' after a '!' in Jack's line "well, yes! and you don't...?"
Other than that, PERFECT ENGLISH 
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Thank you ) and especially your mother )
You are very kind )
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thanks, and your welcome 
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This is amazing! Would you submit it to my group as well? I'll feature it!
My group link: [link]
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Come on!!! where's the next one!! By the way, love the art!!!
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I'm looking forward to seeing how this story goes! Keep it up.
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You should say, "I've recieved an invitation to *insert name*'s ball" So that the readers remember who you are talking about.
Also, "And you don't?" And lastly "You should have fun sometimes."
Just to help a bit
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Glad to be of service~
:high-five:
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I'd suggest just adding a few "mates" at the end of his sentances, and perhaps a "crikey". You've gotten as far as you really can without a voice actor. And the only thing on your English, when Bunny's talking about the tunnel to follow I think he's meant to say "you'll know it when you get there" instead of "it".
Anyways, its another great installment. Thanks for the awesome story!
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Thank you for your help )
You are very kind )
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Thank you for your great artwork! I just love looking at your style. If you want, I'll keep reading through, (even the previous ones) and do basic edits for english. I'm happy to help an artist of your amazing standards!
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