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Laurence55 — Spring Bash Haiku-Thon 2008
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March 1sttiger paws-
cumulus clouds
on the move
March 2nd
wind chimes-
uncle Ronnie's dentures
in the glass
March 3rd
crosstalk
the neighbor slips
into our phone sex
March 4th
instantly
the barn owl's face-
spring dusk
March 5th
first light-
a pond skimmer ferries
its reflection
March 6th
meeting her eyes spring rain
March 7th
bulging moon
a toad muscles free
from earth
March 8th
warrior code
the old dog leaves
to die
March 9th
fist fight
the cat pummels
an old boot
March 10th
spring mountain-
my fingers reach
into heaven
March 11th
pouring rain...
he finally
comes clean
March 12th
cloudless dawn-
my brother bargains
a sick day
March 13th
clearance sale-
my aunt shops
for a husband
March 14th
descending fog...
his word
against mine
March 15th
dappled light
the crooked halo
of a lawn gnome
March 16th
vernal equinox-
a hawk flies
full circle
March 17th
milky way
I find her g-spot
March 18th
Chauffeur Blues
the cat gnaws
at a flea
March 19th
wind shift dandelion jazz
March 20th
fickle moon
I fold my gi
a third time
March 21st
alchemy
her lips press deeper
into mine
March 22nd
pillow talk
reciting
old man Issa
March 23rd
orange butterfly
the slow lift
of her sun dress
March 24th
river darkness
one tadpole
with legs
March 25th
only half a cup
of tea this time-
March loneliness
March 26th
spring cleaning
she brushes an eyelash
from my cheek
March 27th
sugar maple
this way and that-
lark song
March 28th
reaching
from beyond the grave
wildflowers
March 29th
blue jays-
suddenly I'm it
in a game of tag
March 30th
in her open palm
spring
unfolds
March 31st
moonflower
the rising note
of a cricket
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Comments: 165
all of them are great, beautiful pictures
9, 10, 11 are wonderful, especially in 11 the double meaning of "come clean" and "rain" right next to it
I also love 
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Thank you for such kind words. I am proud that you participated in the Spring Bash. I hope that haiku is something you will study even further. I am always here for advice, and most importantly for friendship!
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These are all great. I love the uniqueness of 19, and 31 left me speechless.
You've done a great job this month!
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Thanks Kera, hopefully you will take part in the next one!
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Definitely a great selection of work here, I find it difficult to select a favourite as there's something about each that I like, so I won't even try
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Thanks Phil, that means alot to me!
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satisfaction!
what a beautiful list,
the spring blossoms.
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boundless!
the gravity
of a kind word
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Really like the 23rd- you seem to improve as the month goes on and I am petering out
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Thanks Amy, I appreciate you coming by. Your gallery has impressed me as well...when the bash is over, i will be able to properly comment, rather than sparingly (because of work and school lately) Thanks!
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24 and 26 are brilliant. the 3rd line twists your thoughts in an entirely unexpected direction, as a good haiku should. very nice.
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The 21st-till-recent ones....they brought tears to my eyes....not because they were well written--which they were--but just reflection. Thank you.
I get excited when I know that there will be a new haiku waiting for me tomorrow!
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Thank you so much...yeah, after this spring bash is over, I will be working on a few projects with my favorite style, Tanka! i am excited!! Thanks for taking the time to visit my whole gallery. I really appreciate your comments on "Midnight" and "Daybreak"
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Oh, you're welcome! I'm still busy unpacking, but soon, very soon, I hope to familiarize myself with Jade Pandora's writing as well, to get to know her voice better so that I can make good comments for her, too!
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Good, she is very skilled
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I love 22!!!!
Let us know what you think of the new translations we have been doing as our entry for the second half of the bash. We have been out for a week or so, but now we are back. The universe poem came to a natural end and we did not know what to do, so we have been furvently translating old poems as our entry. This is a new form a research into the beginnings and essence of haiku.
Hope you are well,
Solar
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Hey, glad to see you guys back!!! Thanks, I really enjoyed writing 22. Yes, I saw the translations, they are excellent, and I will be commenting tomorrow night when I have some quiet time to internalize them.
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yeah, business destroyed us, and the topic for the poem - it got out of control in a sense so we decided to stop and return to it later.
have translated 40 or so poems in the last week (had a week off, and spent it doing this).
24 - amazing!!!! we love it.
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I will note you, i want to ask you about a piece
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cool!
btw, I will respond to the collab when the bash is over... but as a preliminary comment - we loved the poems you noted us!
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Thanks, I have modified one to be in the Spring Bash, so I will write another in its place.
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I absolutely love 5, 7 and 21
Keep up this great work *cheers*
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hehehe...thanks dude 
Cheers for one of the greatest haijin who ever lived!
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Oh
I love your haiku
they're so amazing and imaginative
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Ah, thank you, I appreciate that!
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wind shift dandelion jazz sounds like a great lyric for a song! This strikes me for some reason - I will have to think on why.....
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thanks Loretta
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March 11th
pouring rain...
he finally
comes clean
Powerful beyond all meaning. More than a "seen" visual, I FELT this one.
March 17th
milky way
I find her g-spot
Beautiful erotica; not so vulgar, but just enough to show its sensuality. It really pleases me to hear someone praise the woman's body like this--soft, tender--not the ugly "cunt" some people see as so foreign and fearsome!
These are progressing splendidly! Bravo! You humble me--I could learn so much from a master like you.
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Thanks Katie, although I am no master 
Keep learning, studying, and maintaining a child-like observance within the art. Avoid rigid doctrines, but internalize the principles...that is all you need. 
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the vernal equinox is on the 20th this year. 
interesting piece on the 19th, but why would you qualify such a distinct modern poem as a haiku?
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I am aware of that 
"interesting piece on the 19th, but why would you qualify such a distinct modern poem as a haiku?"
I must say...I find this to be an interesting question. Are you implying that my work should be relegated to an ancient theme. Let me ask you this first...why isn't this a haiku?
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before i answer that, i would appreciate your answer first.
however, i was not implying that 'modernity' (jazz) in the theme has anything to do with my question per se.
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Very well...this question warrants an answer. Mind you however that I am not interested in dancing all over this thread with debates. I have realized that our differences in opinion concerning haiku are based in the manner in which we view the art. Nothing will change that, and I respect our differences. We have had conversations like this on several threads...
That being said, this piece is an extreme in haiku's minimalism principle. I am using the poem's ambiguity to imply that the moving breeze is inspiring a rhythm among the flowers. I am also using the "zoom lens effect" emphasized in the art. Yes, it is modern because it is written for the time that "I" am in. I believe that haiku should adapt to the surroundings and experiences of the poet...following the principles, but not falling into doctrines of what should or shouldn't be. In other words...I believe in pushing boundaries and experimenting. It has worked well for me...and will continue to be such...
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noted. my view on the boundaries of haiku more or less corresponds with that linked to in my last journal though, and reading that will end this waltz of ours here.
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Thanks!! i really appreciate you reading my pieces!
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day 26
very romantic. not very haiku in essence but qualify in terms of minimalism and impact. i would have to say i like this one alot.
day 28
stately and dainty at the same time. the atmosphere conveyed is spot on.
day 31
another good one which conjures a serene mood. the chinese proverb has said that 'the cricket's sound accentuates silence'. i couldn't agree more.
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Thank you Peng, I appreciate that you are revisiting my gallery...in terms of 26...what in your opinion is the "essence" of modern haiku? Can that truly be defined by the classic stance that I assume you have taken? Just curious
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i think so, classic stance, the way you put it. i'm reading on haiku in japanese language only, and classical haiku masters were mainly doing nature related theme. i'm not sure about the development of haiku in the western literary world.
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