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Published: 2015-06-05 07:42:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 4567; Favourites: 92; Downloads: 0
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take an evening -
reclassify emotions as chemical compounds.
remove one atom,
see what changes.
take your field notes, transcribe them
back to front.
add line breaks.
be scientific. be too scientific.
replace the word 'entropy'
with the word 'god'.
be so full of want that you can feel it
scraping its numb jaws against your insides.
write about flowers instead.
make your first line provocative.
follow it, let it unfurl -
ctrl a.
del.
inauthentic, try again.
ctrl z.
who the fuck
wants authenticity
?
read, find inspiration.
find new ways to plagiarize old ideas.
stop reading.
hash and rehash,
slash and burn.
look at the mess you've made.
add punctuation
as decoration.
spend an hour flicking back and forth -
capitalization.
uncapitalization.
write about family. if it hurts too little,
write about flowers instead.
use a word bank.
cuss,
kiss,
switch,
hit,
shock,
shatter,
fade.
write in the dark.
write from within your own skull.
write drunk.
write your litanies.
write your lines.
write your lies.
scrap it all.
write about flowers instead.
have grand plans.
have stories
singing
somewhere
secret.
have conceits,
have morals,
have visions,
have sex,
have -
write about flowers instead.
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Comments: 52
This is my favorite poem of yours Iβve ever read. I spent all of 4 hrs reading as many as possible and this is the most relatable and incredible piece that Iβve read. 10/10 love this piece to the end.
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Oh my god this is a fantastic relatable piece!
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Every honest-to-goodness poet should read this to keep things from getting so serious!
congratulations!
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Replace the word 'flowers' with 'something funny' and then you'll know my everyday.
Great writing.
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Oddly truthful at times. A well-deserved DD. 
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I haven't even read this until now because I haven't been in the mood for poetry but I'm so glad I scrolled to see a DD! It's amazing as always, good writing is something that have to read more than once until it sinks in and never leaves.Β
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This is just fantastic. Congratulations on the DD!
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Made me chuckle fondly. Writing does feel this way, sometimes.
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What a great read this piece is. Β
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Hahahahaahah!! Β Congrats on the DD, dear!! Β XD
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Can I favorite this more than once?Β
You know I love your words. I think this may be my favorite (poem 
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-tackles you with my feelings-
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The first stanza really drew in my science-loving side, and the interplay between that characteristic-of-science rationality and the search (?) forΒ a kind of painfully raw artistic freedom carried that sentiment all the way through for me. Very nice piece andΒ congrats on the DD!
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Flowers of all things!
I don't usually Favourite free verse but I really think the message brought this puppy home. Great job!
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This is really great! You've expressed perfectly the frustration one feels when trying to write. Love the repetition throughout the piece, congrats on the DD! You definitely deserve it <3
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your pent-up frustration is absolutely beautiful please never take anger management classes
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your writing never ceases to amaze <3 how have you been?
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Β Congratulations on the well deserved DD! I'm so happy for you!!
Keep up the awesome work~Β Β
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thanks so much!
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This is a powerful, powerful piece. I have no idea why this specific line captured me, out of so many beautiful gems, but "be so full of want that you can feel it/scraping its numb jaws against your insides..." Good lord. My jaw actually got that feeling when I go to the dentist and they rub the numbing cream on my gums. My teeth took on a new feeling like they were slippery gums teething, and my stomach fluttered in such a way that my blood shivered with a spurt of digested ice. I wanted to share that with you, because I wanted to affirm that this poem is powerful. Your frustration translated beautifully, and also in such a way that I feel it provides solace in a struggle many can relate to... because sometimes just giving the feeling a name or a face can be calming - if only for a moment. My stomach still feels like it's housing some ice cubes. Fantastic job. I wish I had better words.
And of course: congratulations on your DD! I'm glad, even if it was just a process, that you let yourself write something other than "flowers." Whether the plants are supposed to be taken as a metaphor, an allusion, or as a literal statement. I hope you have a lovely day!
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you have no idea how happy this comment makes me - thank you so much for taking the time, and i'm so glad it resonated with you that strongly.
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And you have no idea how happy it makes me to read that my comment could lift your day a bit!!!
It was absolutely amazing, and I'm so very grateful there are artists willing to share their crafts. Especially because I find it not only inspiring, but liberating. Art is amazing! So thank *you*, lovely. I'm really glad I could be impacted by your words! Keep writing them! You have an indisputable talent for them
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I don't know what holy rage produced this poem but it's absolutely amazing.
Also I'm probably not going to write about flowers. Ever.
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holy rage - love that. thank you so much!
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See what happens when you write about flowers instead?
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This emoticon cannot show how much I love this!!>!>!>>HFESKDJF
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sdalksdfhalskh. <3 thank you!!
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I like the "flowers" refrain. actually you've got a couple of nifty stanzas here and this basically describes my writing process to a tee, lol. also, stories/singing/somewhere/secret <3
some other stuff: I get what you're going for with the second stanza, and this might just be me, but I feel like I read (or have read, more precisely) so many things on dA that invoke these "big concept" words like "god" or "stars" or "planets" etc. and it always leaves a bad taste in my mouth. they sort of seem like crutches to me, like shortcuts to gravitas that don't really mean anything. idk.Β
similar comment about the end (especially considering the inclusion of the word 'grand' though I get that that was also probably tongue-in-cheek), with the broken line leading to the final flowers refrain. like, I'd almost say you could cut it at the refrain after "scrap it all" but then you wouldn't have the stories/singing/somewhere/secret thing and that'd be a shame. I don't really have a solution
oh! and for the stanza with all the "write" lines (13?), what do you think of getting rid of the your's in the last three lines? it sort of makes less sense with the "write your lines" bit, but I think it sounds better when spoken aloud, maybe? at least with the other two.
hope some of that was helpful. I'll be reading more!
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Try to leave a clever comment on your newly posted work -
Write about flowers instead.
{the frustration was apparent shortly after the first instance of "write about flowers instead," even before seeing it typed below in the artist's comments section}
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