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Published: 2015-01-18 03:22:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 2608; Favourites: 31; Downloads: 30
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Seriously considering the idea, or at least, playing around with it.not very experienced with comics or how to do them, so forgive me for any odd looking things, badly placed text or continuity errors, or even bad writing haha.
doing a bit of world building with it.
"A Tetra PMC Peacekeeping squad is patrolling the coast lines a bit farther down from some minor farming villages, as part of daily rounds, and run into an overzealous Yassat Farmer woman hiding in an old fishing shack, prompting an intense encounter."
a super huge thanks to MrJumpManv4 mrjumpmanv4.deviantart.com for helping starting me up with sketchup and editing some models used in the comic!
(edit, wow, the misspellings are rich with this one...)
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Comments: 15
I love everything else, though I think you should definitely look at other comics and how they box their font.
As it is, its difficult to tell who is talking and if its narration or actual characters speaking.
Sound effects could also do with some sort of fancy font to emphasis them.
The layout is interesting, and the art and overall colour theme of blue is fantastic.
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dude I'm so gonna keep up to date on this, looks like its gonna kick ass!!
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Good job, it's really nice and pretty, but yeah 'bout speech bubble perhap work on that. Plus sometime like panel 6, it's would work better if you have a panel who show the guy shoot and then the reaction of peoples around who take cover.
It's normal when humans (?) you mostly put them with mouth open when they talk, but not the other race?
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i know its bad
nah i tease, yeah i wasn't so aware when i did the text placement, ill have to fix that on my next one in the works,
hmm thats another thing, i did look at a few comics and i did notice things where actions happen quickly with one panel and the readers supposed to decipher what has happened, i tried it here but i don't know if it translates well so i may stop that as well,
hmm, Anat, the one with the sniper, does talk, Viza, the one dragging the other guy, doesn't talk throughout this entire page. i just drew her speaking but with her mouth closed cause i was lazy i guess,
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"i know its bad"
nah it's not bad, just my opinion on how I see it + some experience
"hmm thats another thing, i did look at a few comics and i did notice things where actions happen quickly with one panel and the readers supposed to decipher what has happened, i tried it here but i don't know if it translates well so i may stop that as well"
It's just the shot when the guy are shoot, it's better to show the result than the instant action, it's like a punch, don't draw the punch but the result of the impact.
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you don't see the punch in the face, but the result of the impact.
It's just the idea of 'readers supposed to decipher what has happened' it's exacly that, good notion, it's just in the case it's a little 'off' with what happen.
"i just drew her speaking but with her mouth closed cause i was lazy i guess,"
Some do that, it's just when you do character with open mouth it's better to do it with everybody, some kind of visual harmony.
And by the way, it's just my opinion, I'm a comic artist, but not like a great one we see in every stores so you take what you want.
But continue, I like that and with your style it's really good.
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I love the concept, but it is a little wonky on the placement of dialogue. Still, the artwork looks great and I think with a little work it could be really awesome.
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yeah, i see it, will make sure to have proper speech bubbles on the next one I'm currently working on,
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thanks man!
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Not bad for a start. I think working on your speech bubble placement is what you should work on for now. Aside from that, I quite like the muted shading and colors on this.
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yeah, had a lot of internal debate about, it, may do it classic comic style instead, thanks!
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