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luckylisa — Catch Me Before I Fall
Published: 2004-05-11 04:07:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 4475; Favourites: 187; Downloads: 49
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Catch me before I fallBut it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard my body cracked
My heart shattered within
Shutting myself down
Closing up to others
My silence forever kept
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My horrors now revealed
You're gone forever
And I'm standing here alone
Lost and foresaken
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My visions now hazed
Coldness seeping in
Freezing my internal organs
Lost in time and space
Frozen expressions of sadness
No longer do I exist
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard I died in an instant
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Comments: 160
"say you're here, or it's all over now"
Sorry, I just had to quote the song Whisper since, I actually clicked on this poem because of the title being in the song, but this poem is really good, quite amazing!! Keep writing!!!!
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This one is quite good, but I think it will be better if you choose a GOOD subject like rain, night, or even light. Sorry, but I think this poem is pointless. You may use subjects above to give some colors to your poems so they're alive ! Sorry, I just want to help and bring suggestion. Overall, quite good !
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Excuse me, but give that the subject of the poem is quite clearly an emotional experience, it's quite rude to say that a poem is pointless or that the poet should be writing about another subject. Subjects are what the poem is about. Changing the subject means changing the poem.
Now, to the poem itself, the sentiments aren't entirely original, but the way you expressed them (a physical shattering) is quite effective. The last line is particularly powerful. I do, however, think that you might want to break this poem into stanzas, which would make it clearer and easier to read.
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Sorry if that's quite rude, but I just want to help...
Anyway, thanks for reminding me to be careful and consider about my critique. Thanks for that !
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this is very good and descriptive. did it help writing this.
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thank you. yes in some ways it did.
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I normally really dont like spoken but i love this
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Beautiful. she asks for help from her pain, but sadly it is too late, for she has already fallen, cold and dead. Exceptionally Well done!
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aww thank you sooooo much!!!
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I had not seen this one, it's from WAY before I hit DA.
Most really good lit. dev's are lucky to have 100 faves after several years, this has over 150...
...and well deserved.
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Great poem, Marissa! 
Your words would make great lyrics to a song!
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Wow! This poem is amazing. I've been trying to get into poetry myself, but I haven't come up with anything this deep or profound. Bravo!
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