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luckylisa — Catch Me Before I Fall
Published: 2004-05-11 04:07:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 4475; Favourites: 187; Downloads: 49
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Catch me before I fallBut it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard my body cracked
My heart shattered within
Shutting myself down
Closing up to others
My silence forever kept
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My horrors now revealed
You're gone forever
And I'm standing here alone
Lost and foresaken
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My visions now hazed
Coldness seeping in
Freezing my internal organs
Lost in time and space
Frozen expressions of sadness
No longer do I exist
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard I died in an instant
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awww thank you soooo much!!!!!
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I googled "catch me before I fall", you are the 5th url rank
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oh wow really? lol that's cool
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hey , i made a piece with tjis poem displayed on it, will you honor me and give me permission to uplaod it ????
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awww wow thank you for using my piece. yes you have my permission to upload it. just make sure in the comment section you let others know it's my poem.
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I love it .... I love poetry in English ...
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An instant were no time to seal
An instant of Darkness were no sense to heal
An instant of Cruelty were no soul to feel
Falling and falling in an instant were there nowhere to be
But Brocken in insanity.
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Oh, I LOVE this. It literally brings tears to my eyes.
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awww really? wow thank you soooo much
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so we all have to fall and to die a lot of times until we are really dying...
one hit the other
one don't help or help to late... oh what a tragedy of life...
I like this poem very much
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Don't know much about poetry.. but this was very sad and beautiful at the same time. Great talent to have!
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aww thank you hun i really appreciate that 
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Amazing, I love how you repeated that one sentence. Gives it extra power and really implies your pain. The last part also gave me goosebumps. It's awesome
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aww thank you hun. i'm glad you liked it so much
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beautiful, expressive, sentimental....
Love....can be defined differently, it's relative, based on everyone's past experiences and perception.
to me it's a cage with golden bars.
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that's so very true. thank you for reading and commenting. i'm glad you liked it
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I like this alot, reminds me of
a woman's idea of a never good enough love.
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love is never good enough. it can always have room to grow and to become better.
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Men are blessed to become content.
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i like it... i think each iteration of "catch me before i fall" that starts a new thought should be a new stanza... the flow doesn't quite sit right with me, doesn't feel right, but it doesn't distract so much... if it satisfies you, then you can tell me to shut the hell up... it's a good poem, i like the imagery and presentation as it comes off as some pretty stiff blows against the mind of the reader, which is always a good way of holding their attention.
after a second read, the line breaks are forceful (and as such don't really need punctuation; the way the words "work" they force breaks)... i like the "my heart shattered" and "freezing my internal organs" as they really reach out to grab me, especially the latter with it chilly conotation... enough rambling. this is, in my opinion (for whatever that's worth), a good work. will enjoy seeing more
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thank you so much for the comment. i love constructive comments. i know my work is far from perfect and needs work, a lot of work actually. i've never been one to worry about flow or rythm much while i write a poem. i write it, proof read for errors in spelling and then post it. i'm so busy i don't have time to sit there and tinker with it for hours, i'm a perfectionist,it has to be just right if i do worry about it lol. i'd never tell anyone to shut the hell up, okay i lied i'd only say that to my uncle's lmao.
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Woow.... I'm speechless...
Your words are soo beautiful and soo deep...
Its wonderful
You write very well! I wish I had this talent
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Naaah ^^ I just said the truth
Wonderful poem
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awesome poem!! violent imagery really gets your point across...good job!
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