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Catch me before I fallBut it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard my body cracked
My heart shattered within
Shutting myself down
Closing up to others
My silence forever kept
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My horrors now revealed
You're gone forever
And I'm standing here alone
Lost and foresaken
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My visions now hazed
Coldness seeping in
Freezing my internal organs
Lost in time and space
Frozen expressions of sadness
No longer do I exist
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard I died in an instant
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Comments: 160
EverydaySaint In reply to ??? [2009-01-01 09:53:08 +0000 UTC]
This piece of literature is featured in the fifth edition of Literature Features!
To go see it, click this [link]
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luckylisa In reply to EverydaySaint [2009-01-01 20:30:20 +0000 UTC]
awww thank you soooo much!!!!!
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chriscx1 [2008-12-28 19:37:16 +0000 UTC]
I googled "catch me before I fall", you are the 5th url rank
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luckylisa In reply to chriscx1 [2008-12-29 06:54:19 +0000 UTC]
oh wow really? lol that's cool
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Hamish-Frost In reply to ??? [2008-12-20 11:38:11 +0000 UTC]
hey , i made a piece with tjis poem displayed on it, will you honor me and give me permission to uplaod it ????
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luckylisa In reply to Hamish-Frost [2008-12-20 16:41:12 +0000 UTC]
awww wow thank you for using my piece. yes you have my permission to upload it. just make sure in the comment section you let others know it's my poem.
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MC-blue In reply to ??? [2008-12-19 19:59:46 +0000 UTC]
I love it .... I love poetry in English ...
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BlueCato [2008-12-18 06:12:12 +0000 UTC]
An instant were no time to seal
An instant of Darkness were no sense to heal
An instant of Cruelty were no soul to feel
Falling and falling in an instant were there nowhere to be
But Brocken in insanity.
Best Wishes
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BryarRose [2008-12-15 07:02:21 +0000 UTC]
Oh, I LOVE this. It literally brings tears to my eyes.
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luckylisa In reply to BryarRose [2008-12-15 17:55:30 +0000 UTC]
awww really? wow thank you soooo much
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scheinbar In reply to ??? [2008-12-14 17:41:59 +0000 UTC]
so we all have to fall and to die a lot of times until we are really dying...
one hit the other
one don't help or help to late... oh what a tragedy of life...
I like this poem very much
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Deliciaa In reply to ??? [2008-12-13 20:13:27 +0000 UTC]
Don't know much about poetry.. but this was very sad and beautiful at the same time. Great talent to have!
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luckylisa In reply to Deliciaa [2008-12-13 21:56:28 +0000 UTC]
aww thank you hun i really appreciate that
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Chopen In reply to ??? [2008-12-09 16:56:18 +0000 UTC]
Amazing, I love how you repeated that one sentence. Gives it extra power and really implies your pain. The last part also gave me goosebumps. It's awesome
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luckylisa In reply to Chopen [2008-12-09 17:15:55 +0000 UTC]
aww thank you hun. i'm glad you liked it so much
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senses-wb [2008-12-09 15:05:26 +0000 UTC]
beautiful, expressive, sentimental.... it.
Love....can be defined differently, it's relative, based on everyone's past experiences and perception.
to me it's a cage with golden bars.
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luckylisa In reply to senses-wb [2008-12-09 17:35:42 +0000 UTC]
that's so very true. thank you for reading and commenting. i'm glad you liked it
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oldest-boy In reply to ??? [2008-11-23 00:13:08 +0000 UTC]
I like this alot, reminds me of
a woman's idea of a never good enough love.
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luckylisa In reply to oldest-boy [2008-11-23 00:18:04 +0000 UTC]
love is never good enough. it can always have room to grow and to become better.
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oldest-boy In reply to luckylisa [2008-11-23 00:20:07 +0000 UTC]
Men are blessed to become content.
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ShadowOfLife In reply to ??? [2008-07-17 14:53:00 +0000 UTC]
i like it... i think each iteration of "catch me before i fall" that starts a new thought should be a new stanza... the flow doesn't quite sit right with me, doesn't feel right, but it doesn't distract so much... if it satisfies you, then you can tell me to shut the hell up... it's a good poem, i like the imagery and presentation as it comes off as some pretty stiff blows against the mind of the reader, which is always a good way of holding their attention.
after a second read, the line breaks are forceful (and as such don't really need punctuation; the way the words "work" they force breaks)... i like the "my heart shattered" and "freezing my internal organs" as they really reach out to grab me, especially the latter with it chilly conotation... enough rambling. this is, in my opinion (for whatever that's worth), a good work. will enjoy seeing more
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luckylisa In reply to ShadowOfLife [2008-07-17 17:16:03 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much for the comment. i love constructive comments. i know my work is far from perfect and needs work, a lot of work actually. i've never been one to worry about flow or rythm much while i write a poem. i write it, proof read for errors in spelling and then post it. i'm so busy i don't have time to sit there and tinker with it for hours, i'm a perfectionist,it has to be just right if i do worry about it lol. i'd never tell anyone to shut the hell up, okay i lied i'd only say that to my uncle's lmao.
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Mari-lilac In reply to ??? [2008-07-15 17:19:35 +0000 UTC]
Woow.... I'm speechless...
Your words are soo beautiful and soo deep...
Its wonderful I really liked it
You write very well! I wish I had this talent
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Mari-lilac In reply to luckylisa [2008-07-15 17:39:08 +0000 UTC]
Naaah ^^ I just said the truth
Wonderful poem
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disconformist [2004-05-12 19:04:35 +0000 UTC]
awesome poem!! violent imagery really gets your point across...good job!
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