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Here in this garden made of boneIs found an old decaying stone
The angel that weeps over her dead
A name so old it can barely be read
And the church bells sound so very near
Just as they did that long ago year
Like the morbid wail of ancient ghosts
Their ring, ring, ringing has a sound so morose
I slowly walk with a single rose in hand
Across this hallowed little piece of land
I will lay the flower upon that grave
Knowing how hard my sorrow will be to stave
My love lies there below the ground
For a century now could he be there found
An anniversary of his death I will never miss
For after all these years I still long for his kiss
He died not long after we were wed
And then Atropos cut my own thread
But my sorrow did not quell with death
I bemoan my misery, though I take no breath
I rise each year on this very day
When the sky is always the same horrid gray
To sit here in the lap of the angel that shares my pain
Mourning that man whose death was my bane
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Comments: 30
KyuutenHeki [2011-08-13 07:56:04 +0000 UTC]
Wonderful and beautifully written. Vivid imagery and I was able to put myself in the speakers shoes as if I was there myself. Once again,beautifully done!
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MacabreVampire In reply to KyuutenHeki [2011-08-13 13:16:56 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it
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tokiofalloutgirl In reply to MacabreVampire [2011-08-13 21:52:55 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome!!
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virtualpapercut [2010-07-25 01:16:50 +0000 UTC]
Ooh couplets. Not an easy form, and a wonderful dark theme.
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MacabreVampire In reply to virtualpapercut [2010-07-25 02:02:42 +0000 UTC]
No, definitely not the easiest form. But it's growing on me. Thank you
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virtualpapercut In reply to MacabreVampire [2010-07-25 02:11:36 +0000 UTC]
I love writing heroic couplets, iambic pentameter + coupled rhymes. But noooo, not easy!
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MacabreVampire In reply to rawwwrrrface [2010-07-20 01:07:35 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! Glad you like
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RyanLaine [2010-07-12 16:59:39 +0000 UTC]
Beautifully sad, wonderfully written. I love it. Fabulous work.
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MacabreVampire In reply to APrinceAmongKings [2010-07-12 13:19:18 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much!
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tanya3286 [2010-07-11 20:20:53 +0000 UTC]
wow...u shud be...its excellent work!! very morbid~compelling in a natural way...one can feel its one from beyond the grave and that gives me a little shiver. the cold pallid desolation of human sorrow forgotten by the world of the living seems so alive here.......... it actually can give one the shivers, brrr.......
great work!!
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MacabreVampire In reply to tanya3286 [2010-07-12 13:20:16 +0000 UTC]
I'm really glad you felt that way about it! Thank you!
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amerevengeance [2010-07-11 17:29:57 +0000 UTC]
You should be proud, this is excellently written
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SeriesArtiststarter [2010-07-11 17:01:43 +0000 UTC]
Powerful. Spiritual. Emotional. and very much a special peice, ...The rhymes they go so well and all that is said are pretty much an inspiration if i had to say so. Great it is. Excellent job
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MacabreVampire In reply to SeriesArtiststarter [2010-07-12 13:18:41 +0000 UTC]
Wow, thank you so much!
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SeriesArtiststarter In reply to MacabreVampire [2010-07-12 15:46:20 +0000 UTC]
Your very welcome' It was good to view it
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