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Magicstix — Drawing midterm page 02 sketch
Published: 2009-03-03 05:07:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 53; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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And the drawing grind continues! Here's the concept sketch for page 02.I think i'll add another panel on the top right with a closeup on Roe'el and move her shadow down since as it is the shadow is a kind of compositional black hole.
Again, this one will go to scraps once the completed page is done.
Any critiques regarding the layout would be greatly appreciated.
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I've put in all the changes I wanted to. This is the final sketch before inking.
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Oh yes, also for layout, storyboarding is GREAT. Do quick sketches of mini-pages to place the panels and such. See what happens if you move that first panel somewhere else, or make it wider/longer/ect.
Also play with the angle of the guy inside it and the position of the speech.
Have fun, can't wait to see more. <3
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Hmm....well from this page alone, is the shadow in the background a reflection of the priestess' true form or power?
If so, I'd recommend making it her shadow rather than going off the page...like it's connected to her.
Also a background might make it more visually appealing, but I'd just experiment with that. From the looks of it you want her to stand out, so a background might hinder that. Maybe something like a wall for the shadow to fold over on or a surface it could be cast on.
For some reason, the text bubbles annoy me too. I'd center the priestess and get rid of the tail so you could draw the reader's eye across the page. It's okay for speech bubbles to not be connected if it's one person talking. C: As of right now, it goes straight down without looking at her.
Oh, playing with angles is good too. Don't be afraid to use that page-space!
And if you want the form to be intimidating, make it intimidating! Huge, creepy, maybe play with white and black to give it teeth or something. C:
Here's a butchered page to show you what I mean. XD
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It's a shadow of her true form. It's OK if the reader doesn't recognize that immediately though, since it becomes clearer and clearer as to what she is by the end of the first volume.
I don't necessarily want to spell it out plainly on the 2nd page, just as long as it's clear she's not a normal priestess, or even human for that matter.
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Ah I see~ Yeah that makes sense, I've done that a few times with my manga too. xD
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