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Published: 2012-11-03 02:08:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 827; Favourites: 55; Downloads: 12
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Description Critique me please <3 How much should I price them?
I made it with a mouse so don't be too harsh...

*I am working on her blinking again, I fixed the black outline and white highlight *
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Comments: 29

Rigune [2012-11-03 02:22:01 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact


Uwahh I always write strict critiques, sorry if this is too harsh sob.

-Vision-
The idea is very clear and easy to see, and it is giving the whole innocent adorable appearance. The basic pose overall is very simple, but it is very significant! The cute chibi anatomy is just right for it's definition (chibi means little child). Great job by getting the correct vision.

-Originality-
Well-- I don't want to sound like a butt, but I've seen this pose plenty of times, so it is sorta unoriginal. But of course, originality is hard to obtain, so you shouldn't worry much about it. If you want to work on it, you should try drawing cool dyamic poses often and see how it goes. BUT, the character overall is not very common, or i haven't seen any like yours! It's very cute.

-Technique-
Sorry if i sound like a total butthole here, but I am absolutely confused why you have a black outline for the hair only. It sorta kills the concept of making the icon popout with a definite black outline. I believe you should had outlined the other outer part of the clothes and body or else only the hair pops out xD. I can't really say much for coloring, but my honest opinion is that maybe you should add more shading layer with the hair shine or else it might look like its part of the hair and not the shine xD. That's why i scored technique really low because i kinda see some mistakes. The animation is also too slow, you can fix it by adding more frames and speeding up the animation. But you did an absolutely amazing job on her ribbons.

-Impact-
Honestly, I didn't give me much as an impact, but it may differ for others xD. I guess because the shading are really closely related to the base color. You're not obligated to do so, but you should try playing around with the color theory xD.


SOBSOB sorry for such a harash critique, You're not obligated to listen to it, but I wish you to improve in the future! Your icon is absolutely adorable and keep on working! v u v. Your art and icons are still fabulous to me!

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mochajelly In reply to Rigune [2012-11-03 03:41:32 +0000 UTC]

the base wasn't by her, so it's not her fault about the base ^^'
sorry if I sound harsh, too, just wanted to say ^^'

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Rigune In reply to mochajelly [2012-11-03 04:26:31 +0000 UTC]

eep i didn't know that xD. Then i made a mistake on the crit. thanks for telling me q u q.

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mochajelly In reply to Rigune [2012-11-03 04:27:42 +0000 UTC]

its okai! ^u^ np c:

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TinyFurrTails [2012-11-03 02:13:32 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact


I'll start with each major part of the design/techniques:
1 - Hair: her hair flows smoothly and doesn't have a rough pixelated edge, also the shading is nice for your first gif!
2 - Hair Shading: a bit rough and choppy around the highlights (the white parts that look like a headband) It's a bit harsh and softening your gradient pixeling would smooth it out.
2 - Eyes: the colors are sharp and a nice coral color
3 - Eye Shading: a bit flat, she only has a little bit of shading around her eyes.
4 - Blinking: Her animation does seem a bit choppy, first she blinks very slow and then she blinks twice very quickly. If you pictured that on a human you would wonder if they had something in their eyes.
5 - pixel border: because your OC is VERY lightly colored the black border seems a bit harsh around the edges e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> try a lighter color for a light palette OC

Overall this is great for your first shot! You have all the basics nailed down e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>

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Pink-Green-Pixie [2012-11-05 04:33:47 +0000 UTC]

hehe sweet.

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Pink-Green-Pixie [2012-11-05 00:15:23 +0000 UTC]

cute and sweet as usual <3

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MechanicMocha In reply to Pink-Green-Pixie [2012-11-05 01:24:17 +0000 UTC]

<333333 Oh you!

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Neremedies [2012-11-03 09:41:36 +0000 UTC]

Very cute, sweetheart! Don't be afraid of shading, something that may help you a bit with pixel shading might be "dither" techniques. Shading pixels is quite tricky, but this is great with mouse!
If you're going to make her blink, remember that the more frames, the smoother her blink will be. But everyone has different "blinking patterns", have fun with it! ^^

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Takao-san [2012-11-03 08:58:20 +0000 UTC]

Nice chibi charecters

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AciliaChan [2012-11-03 06:00:57 +0000 UTC]

So cute~~~~~ ; w ;
You're very good, you know? >w<

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MechanicMocha In reply to AciliaChan [2012-11-03 06:02:01 +0000 UTC]

Nuuuu I don't know LOL But thank you!!! <333

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AciliaChan In reply to MechanicMocha [2012-11-04 01:05:51 +0000 UTC]

Then you know it now~ You're overly amazing~~~ You're my inspiration ; w ;

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MechanicMocha In reply to AciliaChan [2012-11-04 02:51:55 +0000 UTC]

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kikiyolol [2012-11-03 04:15:06 +0000 UTC]

:3 i wishi could make an icon that cute X3 i cant even make one X3 or have one

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kikiyolol [2012-11-03 04:13:10 +0000 UTC]

cute :3 idont know but if i mde one ill put $3 or 100points :3

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mochajelly [2012-11-03 03:43:20 +0000 UTC]

I always use a mouse for pixles...
it's so cute!!! <333 I made one but its awful yours so much better

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licoriceskittles [2012-11-03 02:37:52 +0000 UTC]

aww shes so cute <33
I feel like she could use an extra little frame between her eyes open and her eyes closed (sort of half open) It makes the animation a bit smoother (I would've put this in a critique but that's really the only thing I had to say about it )

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AngelicMochi [2012-11-03 02:31:13 +0000 UTC]

AMG I WANT THTAT ICON!! :3 lol SOO CUTE!!!

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MechanicMocha In reply to AngelicMochi [2012-11-03 02:34:11 +0000 UTC]

TOoooold you I would get better~!!! LOL<333

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AngelicMochi In reply to MechanicMocha [2012-11-03 02:39:03 +0000 UTC]

Yeah you did..... I want one lol


Answer skype

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MechanicMocha In reply to AngelicMochi [2012-11-03 02:39:57 +0000 UTC]

Okaaaaaay, but the one you hae now is better LOL,
What should I price tehm for?

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AngelicMochi In reply to MechanicMocha [2012-11-03 02:44:15 +0000 UTC]

For my neewww account :3 and I don't know

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MechanicMocha In reply to AngelicMochi [2012-11-03 02:48:08 +0000 UTC]

HEEEEEEEEEEEELP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! & Okay of your new oc, & I have to wait until danielle gets off her computer LOL, her mouse is better,yup I used a mouse LOL

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AngelicMochi In reply to MechanicMocha [2012-11-03 02:55:47 +0000 UTC]

Haha lol Okai :3 and I CANNNNTT HELLLPP

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GhostKillar [2012-11-03 02:13:52 +0000 UTC]

zomg, Q//u//Q
This is the most cutest icon ever!! Anyone who gets a gift like that is 100% lucky ;;u;;

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Sugarlime-Chan [2012-11-03 02:13:37 +0000 UTC]

AH MOCHA <3
This is so beautiful QAQ
I wouldn't have anything to critique about it
only thing is I think she blinks a bit too much,
but other than that I think everything looks perfect hun

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MechanicMocha In reply to Sugarlime-Chan [2012-11-03 02:15:56 +0000 UTC]

LOL Okay!!! <333 Thank you! <3

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DemonisAOH [2012-11-03 02:09:22 +0000 UTC]

AWWIES!

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