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This is an open letter to the suicidal;Stop.
We are the ones you choose,
To catch you when you fall,
But we are not perfect.
Each time you slip,
We step closer,
To the edge we keep you from.
But no one will catch us;
You are the only one that hurts;
We are fine.
But it is more tempting,
Each time you slip,
To leave for a place with,
No fear of losing you,
No fear of failing you,
No emptyness of your loss.
We are not strong enough,
To save you,
When part of you does not want,
To be saved.
We are not strong enough,
To save you,
When you will not help us,
When you will not tell us what we can do.
This is an open letter to the suicidal;
Believe.
Believe that,
For every drop of blood you shed,
A thousand tears fall,
With the pieces of our shattered soul.
Each time the blade touches your skin,
We cry out in pain,
And cannot save you,
When you ask for yet reject our help.
You smother us in your suffering,
But will not let us give you what you ask,
And we bleed from the soul,
As you bleed from the flesh.
We don't want you to go,
But you push us towards the edge,
As we try to catch you.
This is an open letter to the suicidal;
Please.
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Comments: 52
AliceBGone [2017-02-12 05:14:54 +0000 UTC]
This is beautiful I hope who you wrote for understands your message.
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Silver-Cosmo [2016-08-22 18:45:53 +0000 UTC]
What a beautiful poem that touched my heart.Good Job 👌🏻😌
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Silver-Cosmo In reply to Mirintala [2016-09-21 21:14:26 +0000 UTC]
No prob strong words from a strong person keep it up
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mymusebleeds [2003-12-23 00:21:49 +0000 UTC]
We don't want you do go,
But you push us towards the edge,
As we try to catch you.
This is an open letter to the suicidal;
Please.
I love the ending. Very striking. But do you mean "to go?"
+fav
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Mirintala In reply to mymusebleeds [2003-12-23 14:54:24 +0000 UTC]
You'd be correct. I'll fix that now, thanks.
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psiph [2003-12-14 02:35:01 +0000 UTC]
i think this is good, but merely touches on the surface. it does not explain or attempt insight. good job tho.
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Mirintala In reply to psiph [2003-12-14 14:17:02 +0000 UTC]
Does not explain or attempt insight?
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Layte [2003-12-06 03:32:30 +0000 UTC]
This is brilliant, thankfully I have no one in my life at the moment that is suicidal, no thankful that I'm free from it, thankful that my friends aren't going to hurt themselves and others in this way.
To the guy who commented above about it being a weak poem... it's far from weak, especially when you can relate to it so deeply and have a lot of soul.
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Mirintala In reply to Layte [2003-12-06 12:45:33 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. I'm glad you're one of the lucky ones.
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Rareza [2003-12-06 01:56:17 +0000 UTC]
this is great mirintala. one of my favorites. you make my poetry look like shit im adding it to my favorites. keep up with the poetry, i love it.
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Mirintala In reply to Rareza [2003-12-06 02:01:02 +0000 UTC]
*laughs* I like your poetry.
My poetry seems to go over well with people . . . but, I want to write stories damnit.
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jadedpheonix [2003-12-05 22:12:49 +0000 UTC]
. . . exactly . . .
As proud as I am to call myself a writer, and for all the years and years I've reveled in the fact that I have the ability to adequately express myself, I've never been able to say what you just said. I attract those same people, who are still here only because of the strength of people like you and me, but it gets harder every time. Thank you for finally saying what I've wanted to. I needed it said, and if not from me, from someone even more talented. I wish I could do more than fav this, but that's the extent of my abilities to praise this beautiful work.
-Pheo
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Mirintala In reply to jadedpheonix [2003-12-05 23:13:20 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much for your comment. *hugs* Let's hope we can come through this and bring them all with us.
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happysacrifice [2003-12-05 03:58:02 +0000 UTC]
considering that two of the other featured poetry deviations are about commiting suicide this is infinitely refreshing. A much different perspective than the usual "angst-filled intellectual" cheers to you! not only is it well written, but the message is something that should really be considered. :fav:
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Mirintala In reply to happysacrifice [2003-12-05 11:09:06 +0000 UTC]
Thank you.
I'm very anti-suicide, but I tend to attract people who are very pro-suicide . . . bah.
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nicoleg2003 [2003-12-04 04:15:00 +0000 UTC]
wow, really good. can i give this to one of my friends? she's suicidal.
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Mirintala In reply to nicoleg2003 [2003-12-04 10:41:36 +0000 UTC]
Feel free. I hope it helps her understand that her her pain affects those around her, and that they do care. I hope it'll help.
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nicoleg2003 In reply to Mirintala [2003-12-04 18:01:10 +0000 UTC]
That's what I'm hoping for. The poems I've written for her seem to have no affect. Maybe someone else's words will help her. Thank you again.
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areincarnation [2003-12-03 15:41:35 +0000 UTC]
um.. firstly this is an interesting poem.. infact, i don't believe that i've read this before,
BUT:
technicalyl this poem is very weak, lots of words taht are unnecessarily stressed, and lots of ailments to rhythm...
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Mirintala In reply to areincarnation [2003-12-03 19:42:18 +0000 UTC]
I practice freeform mostly.
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littlevahn [2003-12-02 04:04:45 +0000 UTC]
Wow, i love this peice very much. Very strongly related to....
Vahn //
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Mirintala In reply to littlevahn [2003-12-02 10:47:32 +0000 UTC]
Related to ... ?
Thank you very much. And thank you for the fav. This piece is getting a shocking number of them. Which is strange, because I put no work into it, I just wrote . . .
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littlevahn In reply to Mirintala [2003-12-03 05:03:28 +0000 UTC]
I strongly relate to it lol sorry, for leaving it blank. Just emotionaly hit me.
Vahn
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Mirintala In reply to littlevahn [2003-12-03 10:51:20 +0000 UTC]
*nods* Well, I'm glad it did. Or am I not glad . . . I don't know. If it relates, then you know something of the subject, and I feel bad for that, but if it had meaning, and I wrote it, then I feel good. Conflict of interests on my part I suppose.
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rachiekitty [2003-12-01 19:08:42 +0000 UTC]
Wow sweetheart.... really really deep. I really adore it... Starworthy I must say
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mouselet [2003-11-30 16:30:53 +0000 UTC]
:stares: Wow. As strong as any thing I've faved here.
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Mirintala In reply to mouselet [2003-11-30 18:44:25 +0000 UTC]
*smiles shyly, blushing* Thank you.
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Mirintala In reply to raven8t8 [2003-11-29 13:14:00 +0000 UTC]
Thanks.
*kicks da* work faster damnit.
Wow, this is the most favs I've had on one piece ever.
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NINTheFragile [2003-11-29 01:45:22 +0000 UTC]
very awsome.. love this writting.. very well written.. +fav..
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notrust [2003-11-29 00:49:27 +0000 UTC]
For every drop of blood you shed,
A thousand tears fall,
That is my favorite part, you have a very beautiful gift with words
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Mirintala In reply to notrust [2003-11-29 13:17:16 +0000 UTC]
*blush* Thanks. It was less words and more what I was feeling when I mentally wrote it.
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