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BluScuroGattino [2013-10-14 18:56:49 +0000 UTC]

what up with the english in this comic? I think it needs an editor, otherwise, it's awesome!

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White-Light-Majesty [2011-06-09 01:04:02 +0000 UTC]

This is a great comic so far, I love how you draw in suspense, and I like your drawing style!
If you wouldn't mind a few spell checks...

"Isn't it such so cute how he's playing with his grandchildren?"
*For 'isnt' you are missing the apostrophe that should go between the N and the T.
*Without a noun in that sentence, you use 'so', not 'such'. Example:
-such beautiful eyes that-
-so beautiful that-
With 'such', there was a noun (eyes was the noun, and it was a plural noun), and with 'so' there was no noun. (remember that a noun is a person, place, or thing)
*'He's' is just a shorter form of 'he is' and does not need to be used if you don't like it, just a tad of personal taste.

"Wouldn't it be sardistic fun to cut rip them apart?"
*Your mising your apostrophe between N and T again! XD
*'Sardistic' is actually spelt 'sadistic' haha, and it's a little weird to have a random large word thrown in there like that since you don't hear someone say 'sadistic' in everyday speed haha. I think 'fun' would make more sense since it still expresses pleasure and makes a little more sense.
*To explain replacing cut with rip, I will show you the definition of each word:
Cut: Make an opening, incision, or wound in (something/someone) with a sharp-edged tool or object.
Rip:Tear or pull (something/someone) quickly or forcibly away from something or someone
What your baddie doberman wants to do here is 'rip' this family, because he does not what to make an opening in the family, he wants to tear this family apart, and 'rip' is a good example for this.


I hope this helps! Sorry for going all extreme grammer freak on you haha. XD

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thedrunkenwerewolf [2011-01-02 21:52:15 +0000 UTC]

I'm loving the badass doberman ^^ can't wait to read this one

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AgaZaczkowska [2010-12-27 14:48:32 +0000 UTC]

wow, an evil doberman! I like his smirk

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rexyplexy [2010-12-27 02:42:16 +0000 UTC]

OMG, an evil Doberman! I can't wait to see more, this comic has promise

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Wolvekit [2010-12-27 00:49:14 +0000 UTC]

Dude. Very nice first page.

Just fyi, 'masochistic' means 'gratification gained from pain imposed on the self', so if that sentence makes sense then tearing them apart would hurt the Doberman himself, from which he would attain pleasure. Perhaps the word you're looking for is 'sadistic'?

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Shade-of-the-Night [2010-12-26 21:52:40 +0000 UTC]

First page and I'm already drawn in.

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SabraeTrash [2010-12-26 20:32:17 +0000 UTC]

Sexeh mean doberman! >:3 Awesome first page!

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RainUndead [2010-12-26 19:57:32 +0000 UTC]

naww i luff dobermans <3 so cute. i like this page allot

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Ginger-love [2010-12-26 18:25:56 +0000 UTC]

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Fiammy93 [2010-12-26 17:44:48 +0000 UTC]

So you finally used the dobermann °O° And red eyes °Q°
Why did you decide to make his ears straight? °O°
Niiiice anyway. °O°

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ZoayFire [2010-12-26 17:30:25 +0000 UTC]

It's great! I only noticed one thing, 'grandchilds' should be 'grandchildren'. Not sure if you knew that and did it on purpose or not.

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