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Published: 2016-12-13 19:59:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 22954; Favourites: 317; Downloads: 0
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A pose practice I didn't get to finish. There were many reasons, but the main reason was unsuccessful implementation of semi-comic story telling. I didn't care about the reading order but I noticed that it caused a lot of problems. It was getting really long as well for a pose practice and I felt I strayed off with the close ups. Although there are many merits here, I regard this as a failed attempt and not worth submitting at that time.This is fairly recent piece, made somewhere around the summer 2016
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You should consider drawing a comic because your characters are super nice.
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Oh man... I just love your drawing style. Β It makes me happy to see your work.Β
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I hope you do wind up tidying up and completing this one. As much as I like Sayaka, Sachiko, et.al, Koh is probably my favourite of your characters. She's an interesting, fun, foil to the upfront general niceness of everyone else. Part of me wonders if she's actually a bit evil, or just enjoys winding people up.
Theory: Handsome Guy is her sibling, but she's seen Sayaka, put two and two together, and decided to give her chain a good solid yank.
Referring to your journal for a moment: while it may not have worked out as a pose practice, it is a good bit of visual story telling (and I'm always amazed at just how well you manage that), which is a not a bad thing either. In terms of reading sequence, I didn't actually find it too bad. The top three images could be read either direction (either Sayaka walks along, takes a photo of the cat, then puts her phone away... or takes her phone out, takes a photo of the cat, then walks off. Since both path through image no.4 in the middle it doesn't matter that much to the reader. It was only really for the two line-transitions between nos. 07 and 08, and 11 and 12 did I get a little lost. 07 to 08 as, for me at least, my eye wanted to naturally follow on through 09 instead of going to 08, and 11 to 12 thanks to the reversed reading order (having just had to consciously implement a left to right reading order in the section previous). Both though, I think, could probably be solved by dropping successor frames a little lower so the reader is presented with the correct image earlier as the eye moves down the page.
Either way, I do hope you get around to finishing this one up.
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You say 'mirrored clothing' in 8, but it's only noticeable after 10, since a movement from the arm the blouse slipped over could have caused it to slip over to the other side.
Also I love the expression of the cat in 2 'taking my picture? are you dumb or something?'
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The blondie is 16. She's younger. That guy is going to be framed as a pedo.
I'll be plain and honest... I think the blondie is a hussy/ slut/ whatever.
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Ah yes, these are the types of stories that make me want to initiate "face-breaking-time" I really hate snide witch-like people. Believe me, I've had enough of them in real life. They suck, truly.
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I see what you mean by it being out of order but I still think it is a good story that should be finished
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