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D1 grinned at Corwin, who cowered beside Pi. "Do you know who I am?" he asked, that sickening, sultry voice weaving through the child\'s hearing sensors.Corwin glared up at D1, snarling, "You lied, and you said you were 97, but you're not! You're D1, the one everyone here seems to curse!"
The evil machine's smile grew larger, deep red eyes gleaming with contempt and inner knowing. "That isn't all that I am, little Corwin..."
48 stepped forward, glaring through her obvious terror at D1's mere existence. "Don't you DARE!" she snarled. "You've done enough to both me and the child!" She took a step forward, one foot blocking Corwin's view, her eyes staring hatefully at D1's face-- making a point to keep away from his optics. The thought of looking into his optics again filled her with an intense fear that she hadn't felt in years.
The smirk on D1's face grew into a grin of pure malevolence. "Shouldn't he know, 48? Shouldn't he know exactly who I am? Afterall, a boy must know who his father is, especially when he takes after him so very much..."
Corwin blinked. "But.. He's my father." He pointed to Allen, whose face was a mix between anguish and hatred, and turned to look at D1. "What're you talking about?"
Before D1 could speak, a cry of outrage sprang from 48's tight lips. She dropped her spear, racing at D1, arms outstretched and reaching to rip out his throat, tear apart his processor, take apart the optics that led to the mind that had changed her forever, created something that was never intended, destroyed everything, everything...
"Hyieeek-!" 48 shrieked as D1's hands twisted her movements, her feet sliding, trying to support her light weight, until she found herself in a position that dancers usually took when in the middle of a particularly beautiful waltz or tango. She looked up at D1 with horror-struck eyes, and then, before she could stop him... D1 leaned over, planting a deep, rich kiss on her lips, forcing her once again to succumb to his lustful, evil desires.
"I am your father, Corwin," D1 said upon breaking the kiss, dropping the stunned 48 to the floor. She didn't attempt to stand-- in fact, all she did was stare blankly up at the ceiling, wondering why she couldn't just die already and leave it all behind.
"No..." Corwin whispered, backing into Pi's welcoming and trembling arms. "No... it's not true!" He turned and sobbed into his best friend's shoulder, Pi softly crooning to him and holding back sobs of her own...
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This scene above was right after little Corwin's mind was taken over by his evil father, D1, who "got into 48's head," if ya know what I mean.
It got pretty emotional, and though I'm not entirely satisfied with the background (might re-do it later), I like how the characters turned out. I usually don't do poses so close together, so this is a first for me. Hope y'all like it! <3
48 (c) ~NightRunner42
D1 (c) ~TheEmptyOne (but created by Nighty a long time ago XD)
Art (c) ~NightRunner42 NO STEALING, though I'd doubt you want to.
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Comments: 11
TaylorRose16 [2010-01-24 18:31:30 +0000 UTC]
D1 is the creepiest guy in our entire RP...no, EVAH. But I do love him, much like you Night. Lol. This is a cool little piece you did here, and I really like your writing style. You're an artist and a writer for sure. <3 But I do agree with the critique Anna gave you.
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Nyx-Aeterna In reply to TaylorRose16 [2010-01-24 20:39:48 +0000 UTC]
8D You love him too? XD I'm not the only one! And thank you very much <3
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TaylorRose16 In reply to Nyx-Aeterna [2010-01-25 03:56:52 +0000 UTC]
Course I love him! He's the best pain in the ass evah! XD And you're welcomez!
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Nyx-Aeterna In reply to Mad-But-Happy [2010-01-23 22:55:51 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, thank you! XD Her obvious, "NO NOT WANT" expression is obvious. Also, would you care to critique the writing in the description?
I'd like to know how I did on that.
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Mad-But-Happy In reply to Nyx-Aeterna [2010-01-23 23:28:59 +0000 UTC]
IT'S TERRIBLE.
But no, seriously. *reads it*
You write fine! My only critque for you would be... to read your writing outloud, to yourself. Some of your sentences are awkwardly worded, or could have been made into two sentences.
"48 stepped forward, glaring through her obvious terror at D1's mere existence."
It would probably make more sense to put: "48 stepped forward and glared, although she was obviously terrified of D1's existence."
Do you understand?
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Nyx-Aeterna In reply to Mad-But-Happy [2010-01-24 02:53:33 +0000 UTC]
Yes, thank you! I'm always looking for critique of my writing, thank you again. XD
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