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oblivious-devotion — No Hope
Published: 2004-04-19 01:53:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 99; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 8
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Description You say everything will be all right.
That I will wake up from this dream.
But you don’t realize that there is no end in sight.
That things are not what they seem.

My life is in tatters,
Why don’t you understand me?
Why do I feel as if nothing matters?
I only want to be set free.

You say that there are still things worth living for.
Why am I unable to see light at the end of the tunnel?
I feel like I’m losing my war.
I hear the nearby tolling of my death bell.

Stop saying everything will work out fine,
Because I can’t see how it will.
I can’t seem to step back in line.
There’s an empty spot that I can’t seem to fill
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Comments: 11

homesick-alien [2004-06-01 07:38:03 +0000 UTC]

very awesome!! i like how some bits rhyme and others dont..individual..i like..very good imagery also

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oblivious-devotion In reply to homesick-alien [2004-06-01 17:10:55 +0000 UTC]

thanx ever so much !!

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ProfoundDesolation [2004-04-20 03:23:26 +0000 UTC]

very nice, my friend...you're blowing us away with all your great stuff!!!

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insomnia-mae [2004-04-20 03:19:44 +0000 UTC]

that's awesome! but,t he only thing about tunnell and bell is the onlyt hing i saw! NICE JOB!!

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oblivious-devotion In reply to insomnia-mae [2004-04-20 22:36:16 +0000 UTC]

thank you dearie

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simple-serendipity [2004-04-19 02:35:30 +0000 UTC]

well, though it doesn't rhyme, that part about the death bell was actually one of my favorite parts, so there Luke! LoL. Nice job Kels! You're just rollin 'em out today!

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oblivious-devotion In reply to simple-serendipity [2004-04-19 03:28:07 +0000 UTC]

i know! there are times when i cant think of anything to write...like i have no inspiration, and then there are days that im like, oooo that would make a good poem! lol

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Psyco-in-a-box [2004-04-19 02:13:38 +0000 UTC]

this is good kelsey, I like it all cept:

You say that there are still things worth living for.
Why am I unable to see light at the end of the tunnel?
I feel like I’m losing my war.
I hear the nearby tolling of my death bell.

just cause bell and tunnel dont really rhyme other than that, I loved the rhyme scheme and everything. nice job

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oblivious-devotion In reply to Psyco-in-a-box [2004-04-19 02:15:49 +0000 UTC]

i know.....i couldn't find anything else to rhyme so i was like oh well! maybe i'll change it if i can figure out something different

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oblivious-devotion In reply to Psyco-in-a-box [2004-04-19 02:15:46 +0000 UTC]

i know.....i couldn't find anything else to rhyme so i was like oh well! maybe i'll change it if i can figure out something different

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Psyco-in-a-box In reply to oblivious-devotion [2004-04-19 21:25:52 +0000 UTC]

meh, oh well hehehe

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