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Published: 2004-02-14 20:17:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 93; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 8
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Description The little girl stands in the rubble.
The aftermath of the storm.
Her tearstained face is a thing of beauty
In the midst of wretchedness and
Devastaion.
Her curling hair a mass
Of hope.
Her eyes shining
With crystal sorrow.
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Comments: 4

insomnia-mae [2004-02-21 02:51:50 +0000 UTC]

Very nice!!!! amazing!!

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oblivious-devotion In reply to insomnia-mae [2004-02-21 04:07:06 +0000 UTC]

you crack me up tress.........youre a sweetheart too...lol....thanx

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ProfoundDesolation [2004-02-15 03:27:14 +0000 UTC]

It's so vivid. Awesome work! *applause*

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airmega23 [2004-02-14 20:23:00 +0000 UTC]

I like this piece, you used strong imagery to recreate the experience in the readers mind. The poem, although short, was quite moving visually.
The diction was good, and I liked the organization of the piece. Your flow was pretty good too, a bit ridgid, but I liked it nevertheless!

Keep it up!

Greg!

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