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omnipotent-lion — Despair and Dances
Published: 2008-02-12 03:50:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 325; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 1
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In the corner stands a lonely boy,And I, his date, stand near.
He does not offer to dance with me,
Too shy, or bored: can’t tell.
He does not understand my feelings,
This little crush I have.
So, I grab his hand, and I guide him,
To the floor, hand in hand.
I put my arms around his shoulders,
He plays along with me.
The song is slow so we sway on spot,
Awkward first, then closer.
I can’t tell, what goes on in his head.
But butterflies plague me.
Petals fall, he loves me, loves me not.
And I’m thirteen again.
I did not know high school dances could
Make me feel so dizzy.
Who knew his eyes, dark as melting tar,
Were so intense up close?
Who knew how close our lips could have come
Without us kissing then.
Who could be so dense, not to see it?
The way I looked at him.
A kiss on your cheek and the dance ends.
Maybe tomorrow, yes?
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Comments: 16
I was terribly disappointed when I read the last stanza, but I'm guessing that was more or less the point of the whole poem, so job well done !
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Haha, thanks. I was pretty disappointed with the poem in general, but then again, I was also trying to portray disappointment, so I guess it works.
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I liked this piece of work, you portrayed the emotion and the setting very well. Structure was better than what I mostly see on DA so I get you a good job on that one. Keep it up!
8/10
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8/10! Not bad considering I did it as a writing exercise to motivate my cursed muse...(which, of course, has yet to become motivated T_T) Glad you liked! Thanks for commenting.
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Ah---yes, inspiration can come in the most opportune forms. But at least it gives us something to write about! And at least we're able to vent with writing.
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My words will not vent it away from me. This emotion that burdens me can only be cured by that which has brought this on me...
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Judging by your poetry, I'm gonna hazard: girl trouble? Unrequited love? If so---it plagues the best of us (well, guy trouble in my case) and I can only sympathize...
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Its awkward, read I am Right Here and that pretty much explains it all.
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Ah...I see. That must be tough...
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ha, guys are like that. I happen to be one myself. My girlfriend had to drive a railroad spike through my head before I finally got it.
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Yes, well. You have no idea how bloody annoying you blokes can be.
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ha, its just a way of life i suppose
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lol funny how things like that can work. i've had a few guys fall for me, but i'm not really into having boyfriends. 
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Yeah...in the past, I've been pretty good about that, having small crushes but never really wanting a relationship, then I asked out and broke up with my first boyfriend, vowed not to date again in high school because it was sort of pointless, and then got a huge crush on this guy a month later...which is very annoying. I envy your ability to stay away from the dating scene...
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Yeah, crushes are weird things . . .
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